雅思写作九分作文欣赏

雅思写作九分作文范文欣赏：There is no doubt that helping students find a job is one of the primary functions of university education， but universities do exist for other purposes such as improving students’ analytical skills and raising students’moral standards.

A university education can be seen as a process of improving students’analytical thinking. The variety of courses offered at university inspires students in various ways， therefore improving their analytical ability. For example， science courses such as math and biology help students develop a rational way of thinking whereas arts courses such as literature 123ve to let students ponder over issues from a logical， multi- dimensional perspective; and courses in social sciences force students to recognize the ideas that have been traditionally assumed to be acceptable and unproblematic. With the development of these types of analytical thinking，graduates can face future challenges with more confidence and enthusiasm.

Also， university education is expected to improve students’ moral standards. This is rooted in universities’ belief that students’ awar123ss of responsibility towards their community and their country is of high importance. In this ever-deg123rating society and civilization， students are encouraged actively participate in improving the local community. A university that provides care and facilities for physically disadvantaged students may inspire the graduates to better handle situations in the future where they may have to interact with the disabled community. A successful university education is supposed to produce morally sound graduates， therefore increasing their employability.

In conclusion， university education not only helps students locate a decent job but will also develop other qualities such as enhancing their analytical skills and cultivating their hunger and spirit for life.

Some people warn that the era of the silver screen is coming to an end and that people will eventually lose interest in going to the cinema.

Do you agree or disagree with this view

(250 words)

wilight 2: New Moon could become the most successful blockbuster in movie history. Despite the movie has made more than 2,000 million US dollars over the week, many still believe movie industry is for sure to fade out from people’s entertainment life. Personally, I found it hard to side with the pessimists.

Undoubtedly, the magic of silver screen is no longer that fascinating as before. One major reason to draw people away from cinema is the evolution of home entertainment. Since technology can almost recreate similar audio-visual experience right in your living room, many have turned to their couch and popcorn. There could not be a better example than the booming of video stores worldwide. They sprung up everyw here around residential areas and had won many people’s favor.

Though cinema might be facing crucial challenge by other forms of entertainment, it is too reckless to spell its end. The silver screen still attracts people as a unique experience. Going to cinema is more a form of social activities, therefore, many people still prefer such opportunities, not only to see a brilliant movie, but have a good time with families or friends as well. Many major Cineplex have already launched diverse family coupons as a marketing gesture. This can show how cinema can adopt and adapt in this changing environment.

Cinemas also consolidate its status by always providing the latest movie. With most producing companies tend to release DVD a while after the movie, hence, for many movie fanatic, cinema is always their first choice. The Twilight 2 movie can make such a killing is just the perfect way to show the advantages of cinema over DVD.

In conclusion, I agree cinemas are facing extreme competition in modern time. However, I do not think it would be bleached away in people’s life. Being aware of the challenge, cinemas can also surprise us with new elements.

最新剑6提供的分雅思例文时间:2009-10-23 00:00 来源：未知特惠：北京-温哥华1980元北京-伦敦2980元20天口语写作由到7分关注无忧雅思官方微博Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Nowadays, there are lots of advertisements on television or on the streets. Som people think that the advertsing boosts the sales of goods and it encourages people to buy things unnecessarily. This arguments may be true in my country, many advertising companies produce advertisements with famous and popular actors or singers. People, especially youngsters, buy goods that their favourite singer advertise, although they do not really need the products.

Also, on the television screen, a product may look gorgeous and good quality. As a result of it, people often buy goods without enough consideration. Consumers may not actually need it but they buy goods impulsively soon after they watch the advertising. Furthermore, as many customers buy a particular product due to its advertising campaign, the other people may be affected by the trend, even if the product is not of the real needs of the society.

On the other hand, there are vairous aspects against these arguments. Moreover, it is people's choice to make a decision to buy goods. Advertising may be not a cause of customers' buying habits. Individuals have their own spending habits. If they have got enough disposable income, then the right to make a decision is given to them. No one actually can judge whether the goods sold are the real needs of the society or not.

In addition, as there should be a limited amount of disposable income consumers are able to spend, people try to allocate their budgets. They cannot be simply swayed by those advertisements.

In conclsuion, as customers have their own strong opinions and standad of good quality goods, it is better to leave them to make their own decision in buy goods. It is fairly difficult to say everyone is swayed by advertising and buy good impulsively. However, in sensitive area of businesses such as toy industries, it may be necessary to band advertising to those children as children have not got enough ability to control themselves or to know what they need.（332words）

This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band score. Here is the examiner's comment:

The way in which the candidate has responded to the task is a strong point of this script. It is a well-developed answer that addresses the issues relevantly and at length. The writer introduces the topic, examines both sides of the argument and expresses a clear position. Points are well-argued and supported with examples.

The answer is well-organised and the message is easy to follow with clear paragraphing and linking of ideas. There are too many erros in cohesion, however, and some linkers are not always fully appropriate, so this limits the rating for this criterion.

A wide range of vocabulary is used accurately and precisely, in spite of one or two awkward expressions and some rare errors. Similarly, a sophisticated range of structures is used but there are too many minor errors and omissions (such as in the use of prepositions and basic subjedct/verb agreement) to reach Band 8. Nevertheless these mistakes do not reduce the clarity of the answer and overall a wide range of language is used with a high level of proficiency.

雅思9分例文:人口与环境时间:2009-10-23 00:00 来源：未知特惠：北京-温哥华1980元北京-伦敦2980元20天口语写作由到7分关注无忧雅思官方微博以下是考官写的一篇雅思范文，大家学习一下，呵呵。。。

A rise in the world’s population is having serious, negative effects on the environment. Some scientists believe that the only way to solve the problem is to set up a colony on the Moon. Others argue that the cost would be far too great and other solutions should be sought.

What is your opinion

The environment is, of course, under serious threat, but the extent to which population growth is responsible may not be as great as some people claim. In fact there are many other factors such as the growth in big cities, pollution from traffic and manufacturing, and the destruction of rainforest that probably play a bigger role. It is questionable, therefore, how far a colony on the Moon would help solve the problem.

One of the most serious threats to the global ecosystem is the destruction of the rainforests with an area the size of Europe disappearing every year. And this is largely due to large companies in their pursuit of profit. Indeed, whilst international logging companies claim to use on average 10 percent of the species of trees that make up the rainforest, that 10 percent of species constitute about 90 percent of the volume.

Naturally, if the world’s population was not as large, the demand for wood would be considerably reduced, which would support setting up a colony on the Moon. But even if the colony was set up how many people in reality, would relocate Even if the number ran into tens of thousands the actual effect on the world’s population would be minimal. Indeed, we only need to consider how many people were killed during the two world wars, which ran into millions, to support this claim. Instead, the cost should be transferred into the development of sustainable economies.

Take, for instance, the growth of big cities that consume land at an enormous rate, and that rely on transport and essential services that devastate the environment. If people were to revert to living in small semi self-contained communities, many of the problems experienced by big cities could be avoided. It would even be beneficial for the economy because it would promote the development of small, family run businesses.

At the end of the day, to claim that setting up a colony on the Moon would help to solve the issue of environmental damage is to close our eyes to the causes of the damage. In short, it could potentially turn out to be a very costly exercise with few real benefits. (364 words)

原创范文＋思路详细解说时间:2009-10-21 00:00 来源：未知特惠：北京-温哥华1980元北京-伦敦2980元20天口语写作由到7分关注无忧雅思官方微博Some people believe that international news should be included into the subjects in secondary schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Step1: 首先确定本文的subject(主体，即topic讨论的对象)－The practice of including international news into the subjects of secondary schools.

Step2: 构思所有能够想到的subject的pros and cons (优点和缺点)

Pros: 让中学生上国际新闻这门课有什么好处呢一般应该马上会想到通过观看国际新闻，聆听专家关于国际时事的看法可以开拓学生的眼界，并有利于提高他们透过现象认识事件本质的分析能力(即我上课讲的分论点四大黄金原则当中的“能力原则”)。

关键词：widen one's horizon, analysing ability

Cons: 这种做法可能会带来什么问题呢首先马上想到分论点四大黄金原则当中的“因小失大”原则在这种青少年教育类的话题当中一定可以得到运用：学生的priority永远是study,而开设国际新闻课会占据课业压力原本就很大的学生们的大量时间，影响他们的academic performance。好，反方第一个supporting idea (分论点)有了！

接下来从学生和国际新闻的特点入手：学生年龄层较低，理解能力还不够强。而国际新闻的内容往往是纷繁复杂的国际局势，对于受众的阅历，理解能力要求较高。比如你让一个10多岁的小孩去分析美国当年攻打伊拉克的深层次动机对于他来说肯定是很吃力的一件事情。因此可以得出结论: 国际新闻的很多内容超出了普通学生的理解能力范围，不适合在中学推广。

关键词: complicated, beyond one's level of comprehension

第二个分论点搞定！

最后还需要一个反方分论点来构成全文的“3对1结构”，还是从国际新闻的特点入手：国际新闻讲的事儿跟学生的生活关系不大，导致学生很难对其产生真正深入的兴趣。试想，每天繁重的功课都搞得我焦头烂额了，哪里还有兴趣去探究以色列和巴勒斯坦那些事情......

关键词: be of little relevance to sth (与......关系不大)， surplus (多余的事物)

至此supporting ideas全部搞定，接下来就是确定分论点的具体设置了！

Step3: 确定全文使用“3对1结构”，具体结构如下

3对1结构 (全文分为4段)

第一段 (开头段/Introduction):

第一句+第二句： Background Information－Introduce the topic

(1). What is the subject (Paraphrase or Summarize)

(2). What is the public opinion on the subject (Paraphrase)

第三句： Statement－State your opinion on the topic

第二段 (让步段)

第一句：过渡句 (Topic Sentence)

第二句+第三句: 分析弱势分论点X1 (Theoretical Evidence/Case Evidence/Self-evident)

第三段（重点段）

第一句: 过渡句 (Topic Sentence)

第二句+第三句: 强势分论点1 + Evidence (Theoretical)

第四句+第五句: 强势分论点2 + Evidence (Case)

第六句: 强势分论点3 (Self-evident)

第四段 (结尾段)

第一句+第二句：主体定性/Summarize the nature of the subject

第三句: 重申观点/Restate your opinion on the topic

根据以上结构，发现正方分论点（即弱势分论点）国际新闻课程有利于提高学生的分析能力，开拓眼界属于self-evident（显而易见的）的分论点，也就是说基本没有必要在分论点后面进一步拓展论证国际新闻课程为什么能够开拓学生眼界，为什么能够提高其分析能力。

接下来确定3个强势分论点的分配，如上所示，理想的情况是把3个强势分论点设置成一个self-evident无需证明的，一个适合举例使用case evidence (实例论证)来证明，剩下一个适合theoretical evidence (理论论证)来证明的。这样能保证写出来的字数基本在

280字左右(雅思作文最理想的字数)，论证手法又不会让人感觉重复。

先找三个反方分论点当中哪一个的内容是最最显而易见，无需证明的呢

我这里选择的第三个分论点：国际新闻的内容和学生生活关系不大，难以引起他们的兴趣。

接下来找哪个分论点最适合举例......应该是第二个吧:国际新闻内容纷繁复杂，年幼的学生理解上会有困难。要举一个具体例子应该不难吧

那么剩下的第一个分论点：“增加国际新闻课占用学生学习时间影响学习”就用theoretical evidence了，要把这个道理讲清楚应该不难吧

至此准备工作全部完成，接下来就是按照上面“3对1结构”的具体设置一句一句去写了，应该不用花很多时间就能把文章写完了(我写的时间30分钟不到就写完了)。

Some educationalists propose that it is necessary to include international news as part of school curriculum. The effectiveness, nevertheless, is questionable from my point of view.

Admittedly, the introduction of international news into curriculum in secondary schools does have certain benefits to the students. Indeed, to young people, it is evident that watching international news is beneficial to the improvement of their capability in certain fields like the broadening of their horizons and the enhancement of their analysing ability, which both help them to be equipped with a global perspective.

Despite the benefit, some probelms that the practice may lead to should not be overlooked. Firstly, the practice is likely to affect the students' study. Indeed, it could be time-consuming for students to read or watch these news stories and the more time they spend on international news, the less time is available for study, which is their , the complicated contents of international news might be beyond the students' level of comprehension. For example, students might be confused with a great variety of conflicting arguments produced by different commentary experts. Last but not least, some international news actually have little relevance to the students' lives and thus it is highly possible that students would regard the subject as a surplus which is of little value to them.

In conclusion, the introduction of international news into secondary schools has the benefit to develop the students' certain capabilities. This only benefit, nevertheless, is evidently dwarfed by the more prominent problems the practice may lead to. For this reason, I reaffirm my conviction that it is not advisable to introduce international news into the subjects in secondary schools.

Poverty reduction is again a hot topic worldwide when the economic crisis hits the poorest counties hardest. While more attention drawn to this issue, some problems emerge with people’s opinions divided. Many people believe countries have a moral obligation to help each other, whilst others argue that aid money is, more often than not, misspent by the recipients, so foreign aids, as a well-intended mechanism, simply failed and need to be scrapped.

As a more widely shared knowledge than ever, poverty in the third world is an inevitable cause of all the chaos afflicting the world, from crimes, regional confrontations to terrorism, even pandemics. On this more and more globalized world, a nation could no longer be exempt from the unstableness and misery suffered by its neighbouring countries. Even the cry from the faraway end of the globe will be brought to your ears through all the links and ties. It is, therefore, a consensus among both the rich and the poor that only when poverty is eliminated once and for all, can peace and prosperity be attained and sustained. To this common end, the only possible way is to engage rich countries in helping poor ones generously and unconditionally.

Sure enough, there are some high-profile scandals of fund misuse. It’s also true foreign aid did foster corruption and irresponsible policymaking in some countries. Yet, this should not serve as the excuse of withdrawing these most needed

aids which are supposed to and also proved to save lives and deliver hopes. A loose governance or corruptive government cannot cancel off the desperate needs of its people. On the other hand, there are some effective measures can be taken to avoid, at least to some extent, such undesirable situations, for instance, strengthening the supervision of fund disbursement, delivering aids through the network of non-governmental organizations, or helping to promote recipient counties’ governance and management.

In other words, the abuses involved with foreign aids can be checked through other available means rather than just abandoning the whole package altogether. As I mentioned above, there is hardly any way more effective than international aids in fighting world hunger and its tragic consequences. On no accounts would we give up on our shared dream of creating a planet free from tears and bleeding. So let’s work together to hold the rich countries accountable in this tough battle.