短文写作

短文写作

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【试题呈现】

请根据以下提示，并结合事例，用英语写一篇短文。词数不少于120字.

Only w hen we match our words w ith actions can w e make a difference in what w e hope to ac complish.

【审题点拨】

这是一篇开放性话题作文，与近几年高考命题特点相符，同学们可以灵活表达，但应该注意:

1.布局好”三段式”结构，首段开门见山，直接陈述观点，第二段通过事例加以说明，举例例证，要在“为什么”上深入开掘；第三段总结并深化自己的观点。此类命题具有思辨性写作特点，就是要一分为二地展开分析，要有思维的深度，否则就是泛泛而谈。

2.重点要放在有效运用所学语言知识，准确使用高级词汇和复杂的句式结构上。

3.关键是要清楚连贯地传递信息，要注意句与句、段与段之间的过渡语或衔接词的运用，起承转合，行文流畅，一气呵成。

【习作一】

Everyone has his or her ow n dream during the lifetime.How ever,only a part of people achieve w hat they dreamed in the beginning.Whether one matches his or her words w ith action really makes a difference.

When I first entered the high school,my ambi tion was to be the first one in my class.With great enthusiasm,I made a lot of plans for study ing.How ever,it was so lazy of me to study hard.I nearly forgot w hat I had made in previous time.Af ter a term,my grade just became w orse,which hurt me a lo t.Having been blamed by my parents and teachers,I started to try to find myself.Determined to accomplish my goal,I spared no effort to get more know ledge.Eventually,it paid off.

It is really important for all of us to match our w ords w ith actions.Only in this way can we lead a happy and successful life.

这是一篇中档习作。其优点是：

1.本文条理性强，布局合理，段落层次分明，“三段式”特点突出。

2.作者尝试使用了一些复杂的句式结构，如：名词性从句使句子之间自然巧妙地连接起来，避免文章平淡无味；灵活运用了非谓语形式，使句子简洁高级。

Whether...really makes a difference.(主语从句)

When I first entered...(状语从句）

...,my ambition was to be the first one in my class.（不定式作表语）

...,which hurt me a lot.(定语从句)

...,it w as so lazy of me to study hard.（不定式复合结构）

Having been blamed...,（现在分词）

Determined to achieve...(过去分词做状语)

Only in this way can we lead...（倒装句）

3.作者还运用了一些高级词汇、短语和表达法，如：enthusiasm,spared no effort,pay off,lead a...

短文写作

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