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Some people think government should pay for public libraries in every town, while others think itis a waste of money because people can access information from the internet. Discuss both viewsand give your own opinion.
It is argued that government should invest more money in public libraries; the other people believe that we can search the information from the internet, so government should not cost money in public libraries. I agree with this idea.
Surfing on the internet is the fashion way to search information in modern life, there are a lot of people use computer or mobile phone to find some information on the internet. It is because people believe that internet is the most convenient platform to find the key. People can get all the information they want effectively, rather than go to the library cost a large amount of time to read book.
On the other handthe books in libraries are though many times of check and reserve, that can ensure the authority of every book. So some people would like to go to library to read the book and find the truth. Especially in medical book, if doctor find some information is wrong, it will affect the patient who was saved by the doctor. Considering the
reality some people also go to the library to read book.
In my opinion the book in library cannot follow the pace of the times, although the information in book is more authoritative, the new research will replace the old knowledge, but the book in library cannot update like the internet.
In sum, government is unnecessary to spend more money into public libraries. Because of the development of the times, an increasing number of people will use internet to get information.
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雅思考试的结构内容及评分标准
雅思考试的结构内容及评分标准 在复习和备考雅思考试的过程中，考试的结构内容以及评分标准是需要考生们了解的。下面是整理的雅思考试内容，分享给大家! 雅思考试的结构内容1、考试时间：考试全程时间约为2小时55分钟(包括听力的10分钟填写答案纸) 2、听力部分(General Training和Academic试卷一致) 40分钟(含10分钟誊写答案的时间)，通常考生会听到4段语音(独白部分及2人或多人对话部分)。共给40小题作答，你将只听到一次语音，不会重复(边听边作答)此部分。所以学生作答时，千万别等待语音结束才作答(不要回头作答)，考生可把答案先写在试卷上，30分钟会话结束后，利用额外10分钟，再誊写在答案纸上。 四段语音前二段中，内容以一般生活及社会状态、人际关系不同情况模拟为主，后二段则以较教育性的、学术性、世界性的主题探讨。第一、三段以对答为主，二、四段以叙述为主，但因其非常实际性、常识性，考生不必钻牛角尖。 在会话进行中，边听边记录所听到的重点答案，记在问卷上(非答案卷)，以免忘记或漏掉答案。 3、阅读部分(General Traning和Academic试卷不同) 概况：60分钟共3篇文章每篇约1000左右(阅读量极大)
40个题目 Academic类与General training类的考题都以"三大段"的文章为基本结构，大约1500-3000字之间，内容多样，甚至有时以图表、表格的方式出现，学生答题的方式亦有多种答题形式，共40题. 阅读部分的主题并不是为了考察学生对学术的专业度或认知度，所以学生千万别因对主题的陌生而紧张起来。 A类与G类内容相同之处在于A类除生活化范畴之外，加入考生在学业上、学术上的探讨与了解，而G类较着重于社会上的、生活化的、工作训练等的主题。 4、写作部分(General Traning和Academic试卷不同) 写作包括两篇作文题目，T ask 1和Task 2，前一篇150字，后一篇250字。原则上建议考生前一篇作文用20分钟，后一篇用40分钟，因为后一篇文章分值更高。 A类写作部分，全部1小时时间，分2大单元(T ask 1&Task 2); (Task 1)通常考题以图片、表格坐标、曲线图为基本形式，考生根据所给的资料，写出150个字以上的文章来叙述主题，组织并探讨主题，提出比较支持的论点。 G类的(T ask 1)考生多以写一封信来应对考题中所给予的模拟状况或问题。 (Task 2) A类与G类非常类似，考生就考题的主题，用250字