雅思写作5.5到7其实很简单
首先，结构。结构很重要
结构能看出你的思维是否缜密。当然了不同的人有自己不同的结构。
我个人用的是贵学教育刘洪波老师的《最简化雅思写作的》15句框架，15句框架很好记，练熟了写作时间能大大降低，同时也不会给人以模板的感觉。除此以外，对思维也有帮助，15句事实上也是一种较为严密的思维推断过程，当将自己的观点论据按此模式写出来的时候，也就形成了完整的观点链条。所以以此为基础，就算考试发挥失常能都能做到及格线6及6以上（我5月25的作文就写得非常不好但是还是做到了6）。
同时单个段落的框架对口语的结构也有帮助，回答问题也可以按照这个思维方式去套。
第二，语法
因为我的词汇量并不是很大，所以永远无法在词汇上亮瞎考官的眼，所以就要做到尽量没有语法错误。
这个要在平时练习中多加注意，把自己的语法错误圈出来并认真改正，确保自己下次不要再犯，而且要让自己做到一次写对，因为我每次雅思考试作文都是没有时间复查的，所以要提前做好准备。
另外要注意雅思作文中很多名词要多复数形式出现，因为作文中揭示的一般是大众的普遍的观点，单数虽然从语法上没有错误，但是意义上就有失偏颇了。另外，对于同样的意思要不断变换词汇，短语，这样才能显示自己的语言功底，这个要靠平时积累。
第三，句式。
之所以把句式单独分出来说是因为它很重要。既然没有好词汇，那就必须得有好句子。一定要保证文章中出现4种不同的从句，具体什么句子看《最简化雅思写作》上有介绍。
当然了从总数上来说从句越多越好，但是也别写没有意义的从句，或者为了从句而从句。这边在再强调从句的语法，一定要注意前后动词单复数，时态，要保证正确。要不然错误的从句还不如两个简单句来的让人舒服。
第四，不错的资料和网站。
书不用说啦，一定是《最简化雅思写作》，这里我想强调，看书要看透，一遍两遍是不够的，要反复看，才能提高。考前看了一个雅思前考官写得博客，内容很充实非常值得认真品读。还有很多范文，也值得借鉴。
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雅思大作文思路拓展举例
一、写作十大原则——开阔思路，言之有物 面对200多个雅思话题，考生感到困惑：全部准备，时间紧不切实际；不全部准备，心里不踏实。换言之，充分准备了“转基因食品”这个话题，并不意味着能写好“英语是否应该作为全球语言”这个话题。那么，我们该如何才能做到“以不变应万变”呢？通过对200多个雅思作文话题的深入研究，笔者独创了“写作十大原则”，旨在帮助雅思考生摆脱“无米下炊”的困境。下面简单介绍十大原则的由来，并结合2005年的部分考题详细讲解如何利用十大原则备战雅思写作。“写作十大原则”其实是笔者通过研究众多雅思写作话题的“共性”，归纳出来的万用观点。换句话说，是英语作文必备观点，属于“万金油”、“救命稻草”和“保底”类的观点。对已出现的作文考题稍作分析，笔者发现，尽管雅思作文话题多达数百题，不少话题的论据其实是类似，相近或者是相通的。例如，“奥运会的利弊”=“旅游业的利弊”，“送小孩读幼儿园”=“送孩子服兵役”，“政府该不该资助艺术 家”=“政府该不该投资艺术项目如音乐厅、博物馆等”。 “写作十大原则”包括以下方面：（1）ECONOMY (2) TIME AND EFFICIENCY (3)HEALTH (4) EDUCATION (5) EMOTION (6) PSYCHOLOGY (7) RIGHT (8) ENVIRONMENT (9)CULTURE (10) MORAL IT Y。大部分雅思话题的正反论据都涉及到“十大原则”中的其中几个方面。只要掌握了十大原则及其核心词汇，不管考试中遇到什么话题，都能够说出个所以然，不会出现思维短路现象，或者有感而发不出来。 下面我们结合上面提到的近期考题验证十大原则的高效性。 （1）经济原则（涉及的话题有：智商高的学生是否应该和智商一般的学生同班学习；大学开设的课程是实用为主还是以理论为主；中学毕业生是否应该直接上大学还是先出社会工作几年；教育应该具备那些功能；旅游业与传统文化保护；英语是否应该作为全球性语言；城市建筑是否应该保持传统风格；转基因食品；网络生活的利弊） （2）时间与效率原则（涉及的话题有：智商高的学生是否应该和智商一般的学生同班学习；大学开设的课程是实用为主还是以理论为主；中学毕业生是否应该直接上大学还是先出社会工作几年；英语是否应该作为全球性语言；转基因食品；网络生活的利弊） （3）健康原则（涉及的话题有：中学毕业生是否应该直接上大学还是先出社会工作几年；转基因食品；网络生活的利弊） （4）教育原则（涉及的话题有：智商高的学生是否应该和智商一般的学生同班学习；大学开设的课程是实用为主还是以理论为主；中学毕业生是否应该直接上大学还是先出社会工作几年；青少年犯罪问题；网络生活的利弊） （5）情感原则（涉及的话题有：是否应该鼓励中学生给老师打分；中学毕业生是否应该直接上大学还是先出社会工作几年；智商高的学生是否应该和智商一般的学生同班学习；青少
2016.12.17雅思真题大作文7分范文
Task：Some people think getting old is entirely bad. However, others think that life of the elderly in modern world is much easier than in the past. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. 思路解析： 2016年雅思收官之战的作文来了一道新题，问当今社会老年人的生活是不是很 糟糕?说是新题，因为本题以前从未原题出现过，但关于年龄的话题却不缺少。 比如2010年7月10日“年轻人是否适合担任政府要职”，2012年3月10日“老 龄化现象的原因及解决方法”，2012年3月31日“年轻人和老年人谁的价值更 高?”，2013年6月8日“政府是否应该对老年人养老提供财政支持?”，2015 年1月1日“年轻人当领导，行不行?”，2015年4月11日“老年人与年轻人 争夺工作职位，怎么办?”等等。 本题需要论证的对立观点是：年老很糟糕 vs. 当今社会年老没有那么糟糕。那 么，变老有哪些坏处呢?首先，当然是身体条件没有以前好了，甚至可能出现多 种疾病(物质层面);其次，不工作了，与人的联系少了，心里可能会感觉孤单， 甚至感觉没有价值了(精神层面);最后，变老后对社会的依赖程度更高，给社会 增加了压力(社会层面)。那么，这些问题在当今社会是不是得到了解决呢?首先， 医疗条件的改善有助于保持老年人的身体状况;互联网的出现有助于缓解老年人 的心理孤单问题;物质水平的提高也降低了老年人给社会造成的压力。如此观之， 现代社会老年人的生活的确容易多了，但我的观点是：外部条件只是改善老年人 生活的一个方面，最重要的还是老年人自己要积极调整心态，努力适应退休后的 生活，从而过一个更幸福更祥和的晚年。 Sample answer： Getting old is a natural process that nobody really likes. When you reach a certain age, your physical conditions will inevitably deteriorate, and you may suffer from various kinds of diseases. When you retire, you will feel isolated because your previous work contacts may be all gone, then you may feel useless to the world. Furthermore, when you get too old, you’ ll have to rely heavily on the support from others, either physically or emotionally, and your life will become a great pressure to your family and the whole society as well. For all these bad things about getting old, many people argue that the life of the elderly today is much easier than in the past. In the first place, medical advances nowadays have made it possible for the old people to stay sound and healthy for quite a long while even after they retire. Diseases such as diabetes, hypertension and heart attack which might have
雅思5分 剑桥7 Test1 小作文范文
雅思5分剑桥7 Test1 小作文范文 学生原文： The graph shows the total number of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country from 1979 to 2004. In this graph, we can see the consumption of chicken experienced a erratic rise of almost 100 Grans per person per week during 25 years. Then, the consumption of fish always rank the last. And the consumption of the Lamp underwent a erratic decline from 1976 to 2004. In the spite of the fact that from 1979 to 1984 withnessed a wild fluctuation rise in consumption of Beef, when it experienced a sharply decline over last 20 years. While the consumption of chicken underwent a erratic rise from 1979 to 2004. After that, the consumption of fish almost remain the same level at 50 grans per person per week in 25 years. And subsequently, the comsuption of lamb showed a moderate decline, dropping by almost 50 Grans per person per week in 25 years, and the consumption of chicken surpassed it in the early 5 years.
雅思6.5分 小作文范文参考
●批改By Will 本次批改严格按照ILETS小作文评分标准进行。ILETS小作文评分项：TA (内容的完整性), CC (连贯性及一致性), GRA (语法范围及精准度), LR (词汇资源)。文末会进行总评及打分。 ●文中标识： 用词不当逻辑错误语法错误修改添加 The graph provides the information concerning the average temperatures on a month basis in three major cities.(介于有两张图，都要提一下。此后可加一句：In addition, clearly demonstrated in the table are the time of sunshine on an annual base.) (补充：在下一段看到了你对于后一张图的总结，这样的话建议你在开头强调一下“the first graph”) As can be seen from the graph, there is a similar trend in terms of average monthly temperature between London and New York during the period from January to December. (可加入连接词：To be specific) The average temperature in London (介于你后面写的是两个城市的数据，这里改为：for both of the cities) gradually rises from January to July both in London and new york, reaching a peak at 25 degrees and 20 degrees respectively. After that, the following 4 months witness a dramatic decrease both in London and new york. In comparison (这里不妨分段), an opposite trend is found in Sydney. It (这是悉尼的第一句，建议写出来具体的量词至少：The temperature) keeps stable at 25 degrees from January to march, after which the average temperature undergoes a considerable descent, reaching the bottom point at approximately 15 degrees, before there is (there is 没必要了，可以去除) a steady ascent by 10 degrees. It is obvious that the table depicts the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. As we can see from the statistics, when it comes to the total annual hours of sunshine, new york ranks first, followed by Sydney ,London lies last. Specifically, people who live in new york enjoy 2,353 hours of sunshine every year, which is similar to people living in London with 2,473 hours (不是人和人像，是时间长短像，改为：which is similar to the amount of sunshine for those in London). However, only 1,180 hours of sunshine are found in London annually. 总评6.5（TA6.5 CC6.5 LR6.5 GRA7.0） 1.语法变化上从句数量可以了，分词的使用还可以多一些。偶尔试试一到两句倒装，如我在开头给你的那个。 2.趋势等词汇变化可以，试着多换换题目话题词汇，如people=residents=citizens