英语作文例文点评88篇

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--Miss.Q

英语作文例文点评88篇（收集于网络）

【要求】

英语课上老师教给同学们一句英语格言“No Pains, No Gains”（不劳则不获），并让大家围绕如下三方面以这句格言为题写一篇短文。

人们在困难面前容易气馁，并产生不劳而获的想法。

“不劳则不获”这一格言能给予人鼓励。

学生要取得优异成绩离不开苦功夫，所谓成功的秘诀即是辛勤的劳动。

【范文】

No Pains, No Gains

People attempting a task may be discouraged in front of difficulties. They start with a great interest and passion. When they find that the task will take much more effort than they thought, their interest diminishes and their passion wanes. At that time, they are likely to have the idea of reaping a good harvest without much labor. The old saying “No pains, no gains” comes as a word of cheer to these discouraged persons. No task that is really worth doing can be done either easily or quickly. No mastery of any knowledge or skill can be gained without painstaking efforts.

We students shoulder the task of learning knowledge that calls for exertion. To improve our grades is what every student wants. We may envy those who have achieved excellence, and wonder what makes them succeed. In fact, their secret of success is no secret. It depends largely on their efforts. Good grades only belong to hardworking students.

Many thanks for the favor you did for me!

【评语】

该文紧紧围绕题目给出的三方面加以论述，层次清楚，语言流畅易懂。“interest diminishes and their passion wanes”中词语搭配讲究，“reaping a good harvest without much labor”用另一个习惯表达法点出了“No Pains, No Gains”的含义，同时又避免了重复。文章句式灵活，长短搭配得当，使文章朗朗上口，虽然是议论文，但却没有枯燥之感。

【要求】

根据下面的提示写一篇短文，内容须包括下面几个要点。

没有坚强的意志就不可能取得成功。

事业成功须非凡的干劲。

有些人害怕困难，则一事无成。

【范文】

Where there is a Will, There is a Way

No man can win success without strong will. We hear some men have got good results, but hardly realize that the great men had been making more efforts before they achieved success.

Success requires an unusual amount of energy to overcome difficulties. So it is important for us to have great resolution.

Some men tend to be afraid of difficulties. If they meet with some difficulties, they will give in. So they get nothing eventually.

So let's make up our minds, stick to it and surely win success in our career.

Focus on the most important things to do to help your organization be successful. Don't focus on the easiest things.

【评语】

对这种提纲式作文，一定要囊括所给提纲中的全部内容，但又无须拘泥于提纲，更不能逐字逐句地“翻译”。对此应发挥自己的想像力和创造力，大胆地创作扩展。

【要求】

很多人都希望能在事业上有所成就，但不是所有人都能取得胜利。成功需要顽强的意志，锲而不舍的努力，勤奋学习的精神。请你以此为主要内容，准备一篇百字左右的简短发言。

【范文】

The way to success

Everyone tries to achieve success in his/her career. But some finally attain their aims while others fail. Why? Some continue their cause to the end through long period of hard struggles, but others are easily disappointed and stop halfway.

Strong will, perseverance and diligence are the three essentials of success. A man of strong will and perseverance always has an inflexible spirit. He sticks to his cause no matter how tough it might be. Life is short and we have too much to do. Without diligence no one can achieve anything.

I believe that where there is a will there is a way, and that success belongs to those who can make constant efforts.

Don't be afraid of life. Believe that life is worth living, and your belief will help create the fact.

【评语】

这是一篇议论文，作者首先提出问题，再提出自己观点：意志坚强、锲而不舍、勤奋，是成功的三大要素。作者在结尾，巧妙地运用了谚语“where there is a will there is a way”，使文章增色不少。

【要求】

坚强的意志(Man's Strong Will)请以下面三句分别作为三段段首的主题句，写一篇以坚强的意志为题的文章。

Strong will is universally regarded as a very praisable quality.

There have been many examples that success can be achieved by strong will.

It is not easy to cultivate a strong will.

【范文】

Man's Strong Will

Strong will is universally regarded as a very praisable quality. It is neither genius nor extraordinary ability that gives us power to deal with and overcome whatever hardship that befalls. It is strong will that enables us to endure the trying situation and to attain our goals. Strong will gives us light when we are in the dark, and encouragement when we are frustrated. With this meritorious quality, no enemy can overwhelm us, and no obstacles can stand in our way. As the saying goes, where there is a will, there is a way.

All pain helps to make us rise, how-ever much we may hate it at the time.

There have been many examples that success can be achieved by strong will. During the Long March, the Red Army soldiers met with the greatest hardship men have ever experienced. They had nothing to eat but grass roots and barks of trees. It was their strong will that made them defeat the hardship. Helen Keller, a strong willed American blind woman, mastered the English language and became a well-known educator. Such instances abound, and suffice it just to enumerate the two.

Develop a high tolerance for ambiguity----you'll be more satisfied.

It is not easy to cultivate a strong will. First of all, we must set up a firm faith in our cause, namely, the cause

of communism, and be ready to devote our lives to it. Secondly, we must learn from strong-willed persons, especially, from revolutionary martyrs who fought for communism to the last drop of blood. Finally, we should boldly go through trials and hardships to train our will so as to get rid of the weak points of our moral character. 【评语】

本文为议论文。首段的“neither…nor…”“It is strong will that…”，和“no enemy…no obstacles…”的运用，加强了文章的语气，突出了坚强意志的重要价值。段末的格言起到了画龙点睛的作用。第二段用了红军二万五千里长征和海伦?凯勒这两个例子，有力地证明了坚强的意志能使人获得成功这一主题。末段谈如何培养坚强的意志，层次清晰，观点正确，具有说服力。

【要求】

以“Don't Stop Halfway”为题写一篇议论文。

论证具体结构完整字数100—150

【范文】

Don't Stop Halfway

When a man is doing some work, he desires some benefit from it. In order to get this benefit, the must do the task to the end and completely finish it.

To finish a task, whether hard or not requires patience and firmness. Therefore when you have some work to do, you must do it faithfully, irrespective of the difficulty. Difficulties and obstacles are unavoidable; if you turn your back on meeting them, you will succeed in nothing, but if you can overcome them, you will accomplish something.

To stop halfway is very bad. Suppose that a precious stone is at a great distance from you and you want to obtain it; you must reach for it; you must not stop halfway. If you stop halfway, you will not only get nothing, but also lose something, because your time and strength will be wasted.

It is a good thing for one to do one thing at a time, and never stop halfway.

Cultivate a reputation for being reliable and hardworking, even if it means bucking peer pressure.

【评语】

作者对不要半途而废的论证具体而有说服力，告诉我们半途而废不仅无法达到目标而且浪费时间、精力。段落安排逐层深入，循循善诱。全文整体结构完整、自然。

【要求】

题目：Failure（失败）是一个人经常遇到的。失败不是好事，因为它使人的努力(efforts)付之东流。但是，失败也是好事，它可以教育我们使我们学到更多的东西。试写一短文就此谈谈你对失败的看法。【范文】

Failure

Nearly everybody regards failure as a bad thing. The efforts we have made seem to be of no use and we feel very disappointed. Some people even lose the courage to start again or lose interest in life when the failure is a very great one.

But failure can also benefit us. It can teach us a good lesson and make us experienced. Also, we can realize our own shortcomings and get a better knowledge of ourselves. So when we start again, we can succeed more easily.

Therefore, failure not only disappoints us but also benefits us. When we fail, we should make full use of our failure and learn from our experience. Then, we may succeed in the future.

Life is made up of ambiguous victories and nebulous defeats----claim them all as victories!

【评语】

本文最大的优点是正反对照，条理清楚。高考作文时间很短，所以谋篇布局显得十分重要。本文脉络清楚，浅显易懂，应该说在考场中是容易取胜的。此外，本篇行文简练，显得干净利落。

要求】

每个人的生活中都有过失败的经历，失败对于我们来说，到底意味着什么？请你按如下提纲写一篇文章，谈谈你对失败的理解。

失败是生活中的常事。

人们对失败的态度各不相同。

就我而言，我认为失败…

【范文】

Is Failure a Bad Thing

Failure is quite a common thing in our life. As long as we do things we will surely encounter difficulties. Of course we should try our best to get over them, but in many cases, it is not so easy, or even impossible. Then how should we face failure?

Different people take different attitudes towards failure. When faced with failure, some people become frustrated and lose their selfconfidence. They refuse to make any further efforts. These people will probably never amount to anything in life. Some people just don't fear failure. They firmly believe that failure is the mother of success. As a result, not only can failure stop them, but they draw useful lessons from it and try even harder. Such people are sure to succeed someday.

As for me, I don't think failure is a bad thing. Failure can never discourage me but only enrich my experience and steel my will. With this positive attitude in mind, I will try hard in anything I'm determined to accomplish and attain success in the end.

【评语】

本文按题目所给纲要分为三段。首段简要地论述了失败是每个人都会遇到的，末句用了一句设问，起到了承上启下的作用。第二段谈到了人们对失败的两种典型态度，先写错误观点进行铺垫，而后再写正确观点。这种安排自然突出了作者所赞同的态度，同时为引出第三段做好的了准备。末段作者则阐明了自己的观点。全文层次清楚，段落间衔接紧密而自然，主题突出，语言流畅，用词准确。

【要求】

失败，是人人都不愿体验的结果。有人说失败使人消沉，有人说失败是成功之母。你对失败的态度怎样？写一篇短文。

字数150—200字，题目自拟。

【范文】

Is Failure a Bad Thing?

Failure is a common thing in our daily lives. As students, We sometimes fail to get high scores on our examinations. When we play game, we sometimes can't avoid losing to others. And there are times when we fail to do satisfactory work. All these failures happen naturally and almost every one of us has had such experiences.

However, there are different attitudes towards failure. Some people lose heart in failure, they think the world has come to an end. Some people don't take failure seriously and just ignore it, while some others learn much from it.

In my opinion, what really counts is not failure itself, but what we think of failure and do after failure. As long as we believe in ourselves and don't give up, and in the mean time learn something from our failure, We'll certainly be successful in the end. So I'm never afraid of failure, for I believe that failure is not a bad thing, but the mother of success.

看问题一定要看到正反两面，体现在文中，就往往是鲜明的对比。

【评语】

表达思想清楚，内容比较充实，文字流畅，句子结构多样。第一段、第二段主题句简练而贴切，句间衔接比较自然，用词造句有不少闪光点，如：the world has come to an end 等。

要求】

请以下面三句话分别作为三段段首的主题句，写一篇题为“诚实”的文章。

It is usually better to be honest than dishonest.

One of the worst things about lying is that it results in a guilty conscience.

Honesty makes you happy and gain a good reputation.

【范文】

honesty

We often praise somebody because of his diligence and honesty. So all the people think that honesty is a virtue and that it is the best policy.

It is usually better to be honest than dishonest. People tend to believe an honest man, no matter what he does and what he says. On the contrary, dishonest people are not trustworthy. For this reason, honest people are always more successful than the dishonest. So it is better to be honest because it can help you succeed.

One of the worst things about lying is that it results in a guilty conscience. If a person tells lies, his face will turn red and his heart will beat faster. He will always live in fright.

Honesty makes you happy and gains a good reputation. All people consider what you've said true and trust you just because you are an honest man. Therefore, you can say what you like and do what you like without fear. You will feel very happy. Likewise, just because of your honesty, people respect you and love you. Gradually, you will gain a good reputation. To be honest will ensure you a happy life.

【评语】

该文内容切题，详略安排得当，重点放在诚实的益处，即第二段和第四段上。这两段的段末均有一句总结句与段首的主题句相呼应，使段落结构完整，同时强化了主题。文章语言略显单调，但比较顺畅，表达也较清楚。

【要求】

班会课上要求同学们为大家用英文讲述一个小哲理，要求条理清晰，有自己的见解。你的发言稿内容如下：

真诚是一种重要的思想方法。

应该弄清楚什么是真诚。

为什么有时人们难以做到真诚。

真诚，是一种人生态度。

【范文】

On the Truth

Truth is an attitude of the mind. It is important, if one does not wish to inconvenience and bore his or her friends. It means telling no lies and never backing out of one's word.

But it is more important to know what is the truth, and not to slide into those untruthful habits of thought which are so pleasant and so easy.

There is a word named “the victory habit of mind”. People who have this mind are unduly preoccupied by what was socially and morally convenient. One should have the courage to think uncomfortably, since it is only by rejecting the convenience that one can come to think the truth.

Truth, is an attitude of the life.

直线式思维，层层推进是英文的习惯。避免Chinglish不仅仅要防止出错，还要培养语感和思路。【评语】

这篇短文首尾照应，用同一句式，只换了一个单词：“mind”、“life”，却把意思推进了一层，很符合英

文的习惯，能起到警人的效果。能够不停地把意思深入，也是这篇短的一个特点。它使用的是层层推进的办法，没有在每个点上展开论述，但却显得乏味。

【要求】

题目：自信

请指明什么是自信，并阐明自信的重要性。

【范文】

Self-confidence

Self-confidence means trust in one's own ability. As a very important psychological quality, it brings your creative power to play, arouses you enthusiasm for work and helps you overcome difficulties. When asked of the secret of her success, Marie Curie answered, “My success lies in perseverance and self-confidence, the latter in particular.”

Self-confidence gives you light when you are in dark and encouragement when you are dismayed. It is self-confidence that inspires you to cope with any arduous task. With self-confidence, the goal you intend can be reached, and so can the hard nut be cracked.

Some people find most of the things impossible, saying, “It is beyond my ability to do the task.” or “I am not cut out for it.” In many cases, these are only lame excuses. When our heart is void of self-confidence, every hope is gone, and everything we are laying our hands on is spoilt.

Be honest with yourself about your strengths and weakness and manage accordingly.

【评语】

本文为议论文，分三部分层层深入地论述了自信心这一可贵的心理素质。首段在给自信心作出简要解释后，接着阐明了自信心的重要性。段末恰到好处地引用了居里夫人的话来支持自己的论点。第二段进一步陈述了自信心的重要性。而在末段作者首先通过两句话生动地表现出了缺乏自信心人的心态，而后从反而指出如果缺乏自信心，则会一事无成。

【要求】

ambition的意思是我们的生活目标，是对成功、权力、财富等等的强烈渴望。ambition并不意味着要成为最好的，它是一种激励我们向前的目标，使我们不因失败而失去希望。每个人都有自己的ambition，但不是每个人都能实现自己的渴望。结合以上内容，以“Ambition”为题写一篇议论文。

不要逐字逐句翻译。

字数100字左右。

【范文】

Ambition

Our ambition means the goal we have in our life. It is a strong desire for success, power, riches, and so on. To have ambition doesn't necessarily mean one wants to be number one. This is not the real sense of the word. True ambition is the goal that encourages us to look forward and not to lose hope because of failure. Ambition differs from person to person and everyone has his or her own ambition. Yet not every-one of us can succeed in what we desire to do.

Live all you can. It's a mistake not to. The right time is any time, that one is still so lucky as to live.

【评语】

本文充分表达了题目的要求，思路清晰，结构完整，内容简明扼要。语句活泼流利，用词直接精当，避免了华丽浮夸的词藻或含义模糊的语句。紧扣题意，中心明确，是一篇成功的议论文。结尾处引用格言更显出深厚的语言功底，为全文增色不少。

【要求】

文明礼貌(Good Manners)请以下面三句话分别作为三段段首的主题句，写一篇以文明礼貌为题的文章。People all over the world set great regard on good manners.

There are good manners in which we behave in public places.

If everyone has developed good manners…

【范文】

Good Manners

People all over the world set great regard on good manners. To a certain degree, good manners indicate a person's good education and breeding. In schools, it is part of students' moral trailing to develop good manners.

A person with good manners always wins praise. On the contrary, people will frown on him if he behaves roughly and impolitely.

There are good manners in which we behave in public places. It is a good manner to offer help to the young, the old and the handicapped when they are in need of it. So is it to behave politely and keep away from foul language. Besides, we should guard against such minor offenses as making a loud noise, casting peels and shells, smoking and spitting.

If everyone has developed good manners, people will from a more harmonious relationship. If everyone behaves considerately towards others and follows the social ethics, people will live in a better world. With the general mood of society improved, there will be a progress of civilization.

【评语】

本文按照题目所给的纲要从三方面论述了文明礼貌的重要性。意思明晰，文理通顺。“frown on”，“keep away from”，“guard against”，“minor offenses”等小词用得准确自然，很好地传达了作者的意思。

要求】

在现代社会，请你谈一谈对礼貌的看法。

字数100—150字

【范文】

Politeness

Politeness means good behavior in social intercourse. Codes of politeness may differ from country to country. But the object is always to add pleasure and grace to daily life. A polite person is always an agreeable companion. He is agreeable because he is always thinking of others before himself. He doesn't interrupt people when they are talking. He is careful not to say anything to hurt other people's feelings. He doesn't push in a crowd, but waits quietly until it is his turn to pass. In addition, by acting in accordance with the prevailing customs, he is considered a member of the civilized society; otherwise, he is looked upon as a fool and will be avoided by people of high breeding. Politeness is truly a valuable asset.

If you are courteous to other people, you have good manners and your everday life will be much happier.

【评语】

论点鲜明。文章开头即表明作者观点，接着围绕这一观点以第三人称娓娓道来，给人以中肯无惑之感。全文运笔流畅，论证充分。读后给人以深刻印象。

【要求】

古今中外有很多关于人生问题的讨论，这方面的精彩英语文章也数不胜数。现在有一个英语杂志想开辟一个讨论人生的小专栏，要求语句精练警人，观点有新义。你的应征文章内容如下：

生命中的快乐是人们所不断寻求的。

但是我们往往忽视身边的快乐，而去寻找那些所谓大的野心勃勃的东西。

快乐无所不在。

想一想身边有哪些可珍惜的快乐呢。

【范文】

The Happiness of the Life

Life is like a winding path that surrounded by flowers, butterflies, and delicious fruit, but many of us spend much time looking for happiness around the next corner. We do not bend to enjoy the happiness that is ours for the taking just at out feet.

In our desire to reach the “pot of gold”, complete and lasting happiness we all want to fill our lives, we ignore things which don't seem worthy of such a large ambition, or which can't give us the whole thing all at once. Happiness is all around us, but it often comes in small grains. When we gather it grain by grain, we soon have a basketful.

What small pieces of happiness surround me right now?

Most folks are about as happy as they make up their minds to be.

【评语】

该文按要求描写了自己是如何看待生活中快乐的。语言很清新，几个比喻用得很有特色：比如把“life”比做“a winding path surrounded by flowers, butterflies, and delicious fruit”，把收集生活中的快乐比做“gather grain”。既生动又形象。最后的疑问句也起到了发人深省的效果。

【要求】

人人都渴望幸福，但对幸福的理解却不尽相同：有人追逐金钱，有人看重名誉，有人渴望友情，有人视爱情为人生的崇高追求。你呢？写下你对幸福的看法。

字数：100左右。

【范文】

Happiness

Happiness means different things to different people. For example some people believe that if they have a lot of money or many material things, they will be happy. They believe that if they are wealthy, they will be able to do everything they want, and so they will be happy. On the other hand, some people believe that money is not the only source of happiness. These people value their intelligence, or their health, or their religion; these things make them happy, For me, happiness is closely tied to my family. I am happy if my father and my mother live in harmony. When all the members of my family share the good time and the bad, I am happy. Although the definition of happiness depends on the individual, my “wealth” of happ iness is my family.

Remember this, ---- that very little is needed to make a happy life.

【评语】

作者首先列出不同人对幸福的不同理解，然后引出作者本人对幸福的观点—“closely tied to my family”尤其“I'm happy if my father and mother live in harmony”读来令人感动。全篇行文流畅，结构严谨，首尾呼应。

【要求】

社会的变化引起人们对富有与欢乐的讨论。人们开始认为富有与欢乐并非必然相联系，穷人一样有他们的欢乐。你会在富有与欢乐之间作出什么选择？请你就常人的看法和你自己的看法写简短文。

【范文】

Wealthy and Happy

Wealth and happiness are not necessarily related to each other.

First of all, we have to believe that wealthy people are more likely to be happy than poor ones. Because wealthy people do not have to worry about their work and bread, which are usually the causes of trouble to the poor.

But in this world, happiness does not belong to the rich only. The poor have an equal right to it. So long as the poor are satisfied with themselves and their condition, they feel happy.

I think it would be perfect to be both wealthy and happy. But if the two can not be held at the same time, I would rather choose happiness.

Money may be the husk of many things, but not the kernel.

【评语】

富有与欢乐是一个赋有哲学意义的问题：一个是物质条件，一个是心理感觉。不同的人应该允许有不同的看法。本文开篇阐述了常人的观点，按着从正、反两个方面辩证阐述二者的关系，最后阐明自己的观点，显得说理充分，让人信服。写这类主观性题目，个人观点必须明确。

【要求】

题目：How to Approach Money。请根据以下提示作文，要求以三句话作为段首语结构文章。

Money is necessary in our modern life.

But money is not all good.

How should we approach money.

【范文】

How to Approach Money

Money is necessary in our modern life. We need money to buy things such as food and clothing. When we go out, we should pay traffic fee and other fees. In a word, money is important. With more money, we can live better and create better working or studying conditions.

But money is not always good. Many people work hard when they have no money but do nothing when they have more than enough money, And even worse, there are some people nowadays who make money at the expense of friendship or other people's interests.

How should we approach money, then? In my opinion, we should work hard to earn more money, But at the same time, we must remember that money is not our final goal.

一定要把握好“度”哦，不要离topic sentence太远。

【评语】

本文为一给起首句的作文，所以内容限制很大，个人发挥余地较小。本文优点在于简练地评论了金钱的利与弊，逻辑清楚。此类文章写作起来比较容易。

【要求】

请以下面三句话分别作为三段段首的主题句，写一篇以健康、美貌和学识为题的文章。

Young people look forward to being strong and handsome.

There are women who set great store by the beauty of outward appearance.

Health and beauty without knowledge is almost equal to a body without soul.

【范文】

Health, Beauty and Knowledge

Young people look forward to being strong and handsome. They take part in rigorous training to build up their body. They take some gymnastics stars as their models, whose welldeveloped muscles or proportioned figure is the combination of strength and grace, and also the indication of youthfulness and vitality.

There are women who set great store by the beauty of outward appearance. They dress themselves in clothes of the latest fashion. They apply a heavy make-up, rouging their lips, powdering their faces, painting their brows, and wearing earrings and necklaces. To compensate the inadequacy of their natural beauty, some goes so far as to receive the operation of face mending.

文体和文风也是应该注意的。文体比较郑重。

Health and beauty without knowledge is almost equal to a body without soul. A person with a stout body alone can go nowhere in the modern age of science and technology, a person's outward beauty is as easy to fade as a flower to wither no matter how colorful it is. It is true that health and beauty are something one may well be proud of. But it is of greater importance for a student to master adequate knowledge that is useful in his life-long service to the country.

句子相应规整一些，用词也尽量正式，以免出现不得当的笑话。

【评语】

全文围绕三个主题句展开议论，条理清楚，层次分明，用词准确。“well-developed muscles”，“proportioned figure”，“apply make-up”，“rouging lips”，“powdering faces”，“painting brows”，及“wearing earrings and necklaces”等词语搭配讲究，生动地表达了作者的意思。“a person's outward beauty is as easy to fade as a flower to wither no matter how colorful it is.”比喻句用得贴切自然，很好地强调了主题。

【要求】

健康是革命的本钱，请以“health”为题目写篇100单词的英语小短文。每段的中心句已经给出：Health is the foundation of one's future success.

What should we do to maintain and enhance our health?

Health is more important than wealth.

【范文】

Health

It is clear that health is the foundation of one's future success. If you become sick, it is nearly impossible to pursue your career effectively. On the other hand, if you are strong, you can go all out to overcome the obstacles that lie ahead of you.

Now that we know that health is the source of our energy, what should we do to maintain and enhance our health? First, we should exercise every day to strengthen our muscles. Second, we should keep regular hours of our lives. If we get up early, we can breathe fresh air and see the sunrise, and this habit can do wonders for our outlook on life. Third, there is a proverb that says, “Prevention is better than cure.”

In conclusion, health is more important than wealth. Those who are rich but lose their health are no more fortunate than those who are poor. If you want your wish to come true, health is the most important ingredient of your success.

【评语】

该文为行云流水，结构清楚而紧凑。开篇说明健康的重要性。在第二段里，分了三个层次来阐释“健康是我们能量的源泉”，而且还有提问句来引导下面的回答。最后一段，“in conclusion”，总结了全文，而且有所提高。

Understand your health benefits and keep track of them.

【要求】

题目：减肥。请根据以下要点写一短文，谈谈你对减肥的看法。

节食（diet. n.）与慢跑（jogging）是两种效果不同的减肥方法。

慢跑经济而有效；节食效果不佳。

减肥如走极端则很危险。

【范文】

Losing Weight

Many fat people want to lose weight and to be younger and slimmer. They often choose two ways----diet and jogging. Their effects are different.

Jogging is the easiest and cheapest way of shaping the body. For the price of a good pair of running shoes, anyone can join the race anywhere.

Dieting, too, has become a common way. People eat very little everyday, and the food they eat cannot supply as much nutrition as the body needs.

Both jogging and dieting, carried to extremes, can be harmful. Above all, common sense should be the keystone for any dieting and exercise scheme.

It is true that the principal part of beauty lies in decent motion.

【评语】

这是一篇有提示语的作用文，因此，一般要求在文章的段首以中心句的形式点明要点。另外，提示性的作用，切忌主观修改提示要求。议论文的优点就在于紧扣提示，层层展开，干净利落，正反相称，使文章显得公允、完整。

要求】

“虚心使人进步，骄傲使人落后”这句家喻户晓的格言指出了谦虚这一美德的重要性。请你围绕这句格言写一篇短文谈谈你对谦虚的理解。

人各有所长，因此可能会自视过高。例如老年人可能看不起年轻人，认为年轻人短少智慧和阅历；而年轻人也会轻视老人，认为他们缺少活力。重要的是，要谦虚地学习别人的长处。

学习知识也离不开谦虚。一个谦虚的人会不耻下问，因为他知道，知识的海洋如此浩瀚，一个人在一生中能学到的只是沧海一粟。反之，一个自负的人则炫耀自己的一知半解，不再进取。谦虚的人对知识的追求是无止境的，这正是他能取得成功的原因所在。

【范文】

Modesty

“Modesty helps one progress, and pride makes one lag behind.”Celebrating the virtue of modesty, The saying becomes many people's motto.

Everyone has his strong points, of which he may have too high an opinion. For example, the old may look down upon the young, thinking that young persons lack wisdom and experience; the young may despise the old, taking pride in their vigor. The important thing is to be modest and to learn from other people's strong points. Modesty is important in learning. A modest person never hesitates to consult those who are inferior to him. He understands that the range of knowledge is as vast as the sea and one can only gain a drop all his life. In contrast, a conceited person, while having only a smattering of knowledge, shows it off and dissatisfied with what he has achieved. As a modest person's thirst for knowledge is never satisfied, the road to success lies before him.

【评语】

文章以“虚心使人进步，骄傲使人落后”这一格言开头，从“人各有所长，应虚心取人所长”和“谦虚对求学至关重要”两方面论述了谦虚这一主题，最后得出结论“虚心的人能够走向成功”。层次清楚，措辞准确。文中将知识与大海作比喻句贴切自然，没有牵强附会之感。文中一些习语的熟练运用，也显示出了作者良好的文字功底。

【要求】

题目：爱是人类普遍而伟大的感情，请以“love”为题，写一篇100单词左右的英语小短文。文章每一段的前一句话已经给出。

Love plays an important part in this world today.

The love between you and your parents is a specials love.

There are other kinds of love.

【范文】

Love

Love plays an important part in this world today. With the increasing modernization of society, relationship between people are becoming looser and looser. It is difficult to imagine what they would be like if there were no love for each other. Love is the caring and concern for, and understanding of other people and the acceptance of their strength and weaknesses. To love and to be loved is the true happiness in life.

The love between you and your parents is a special one. This love, as any other sincere love, must be honest and be shared by both parents and children. The love of parents is a great support in their children's lives. It will remain with them and help them overcome all the difficulties and make them feel secure.

There are other kinds of love. Love between friends, partners, human beings and animals. The power of love makes us endure the difficulties in our lives, even though we may not have the chance to think about it, it maybe be kept alive deeply in our heart.

【评语】该文逻辑清晰，词语简练，先从“爱”的普遍意义谈起，说到“爱”的含义，“爱”对我们的重要。在第二段里又重点地谈了谈父母和孩子之间的“爱”，然后结尾处点到了其他种类的“爱”。有序有节，完整精干。

并不是好文章必须追求艰涩的词语，平易的语言只要运用得当，也会有极好的效果。

【要求】

本市无偿献血日即将来到。在学校的无偿献血动员活动中，你应《英语园地》之邀，写一篇宣传稿，向包括留学生及外籍教员在内的全校师生宣传无偿献血的重大意义及其对身体的影响。大意如下：

血液是人体不可缺少的东西。它将养分和氧气输送体内各给组织，同时将废物和二氧化碳运走。一个人如果失血过多就会死亡。输血这一措施正在挽救着千百万人的生命。没有丰富的血库，也就无所谓现代医学的发展。

无偿献血是高尚之举，它体现了献血者对他人的关爱。目前，献血活动在许多国家都广泛开展，它在我国也得到提倡。

献血不会损害献血者的健康。首先，只有健康的人才有资格献血；此外，每次的献血量很少，献血者的身体会很快进行调整，使身体机制正常运行。

【范文】

Blood Donation Without payment

Blood is vital to the human body. It carries nourishment and oxygen to tissues, and at the same time, removes wastes and carbon dioxide. A person will die if he loses too much blood. Nowadays blood transfusion is saving millions of dying people. Without an adequate store of blood, the modern medicine can't develop.

Blood donation doesn't harm the donator's health. First, only healthy people are allowed to donate blood; besides, every time, only a small amount of blood is taken from the donator. His body will make a quick adjustment to allow the body to operate normally.

【评语】

文章从血液对人体的重要性和献血对人体的影响两方面对无偿献血活动进行了论述。每段句首为主题句，使整篇文章结构清晰。行文流畅，用词准确。句式虽略显简单，但“carry, remove, make an adjustment”等词语的恰当使用，使文章呈现出一定的变化。

We may miss the point of life by being too important.

【要求】

人类每时每刻都在浪费着各种各样的资源，不仅包括自然资源，还包括时间资源。请你以下面三句话分别作为段首主题句，写一篇短文谈谈浪费问题。

Mankind is wasting things everywhere and every day.

The worst example of man's waste is the waste of time.

It is time to call for an end to waste.

【范文】

Mankind is wasting things everywhere and every day. Wherever we turn, we can see that paper, bottles and cans are thrown away; food is wasted just because of its poor taste; clothes are discarded simply due to their old fashion. Not only things and money are wasted, but natural resources are abused as well. Trees are cut down merely for fuel; wildlife is killed simply for food; oil, coal and minerals are exploited in a bad way.

The worst example of man's waste is the waste of time. Many people tend to spend their time on worthless things, such as wandering about in the street, gossiping in the office, or sleeping too much during the day. As we know, time is so precious to us that it passes by and never returns. The waste of time amounts to the waste of life.

It is time to call for an end to waste. On the one hand, we must save natural resources and make full use of them; otherwise human beings will be faced with the scarcity of natural resources and suffer from the pollution caused by wastes. On the other hand, we must treasure our time. Only with our time devoted to study and work for the people will we never regret the life we have had.

【评语】

该文主题突出，论述充分而有层次。句子之间衔接自然，逻辑性强。文中词语搭配讲究，符合英语表态习惯。

词语搭配是难点也是重点，只要熟练运用，才能真正掌握。

【要求】

面对班上越来越多的同学开始讲究吃穿，追求名牌，班主任王老师组织了一次以“节俭”为主题的班会。经过讨论，大家达成了共识，认为现在虽然生活富裕了，衣食无忧了，但节俭是我们富家强国的基础，是一种美德，不应忘记。请你从以下三方面入手来谈一谈你对节俭的认识：

节俭是一种美德，节俭的人懂得花钱之道；

节俭有诸多益处；

中国是一个发展中国家。我们只有勤劳节俭，才能建设一个强大的祖国。

【范文】

Thrift

Thrift is considered as a kind of virtue not only in China but also in the world. Thrifty people take great care not to waste anything when they are doing things and not to waste any money when they are spending it. As a virtue, thrift is very important to everyone. In the world some people spend their money like water, while others keep the habit of practicing thrift. The latter never spend their money on useless things, what's more, they always make good use of their money, for example, to help the poor to do things out of charity. By doing this they have made contributions to the society and their virtue has been highly appreciated.

Live within your means.

Not everyone knows how mysteriously money dribbles away in petty expenditure. If we don't take care of the cent, it will mount to dollars, which will take wings and fly away. We should always remember the English proverb“Take care of the pence and the pounds will take care of themselves”. Sometimes we want to go out to have holidays with our family and by means of thrift the money to be spent on such occasions can often be saved beforehand. Sickness sometimes comes and unless preparation has been made, there is much difficulty in meeting the increased expenditure. So everybody should try to save as much money as possible.

China is a developing country. If we Chinese people are all thrifty and working hard, surely our country will be stronger and stronger, and then one day become a very rich and prosperous one.

突出特点是大量谚语的运用，借力发挥，为文章增色不少。

【评语】

全文围绕题目所给的三方面展开论述，内容切题，观点鲜明。语言流畅，句与句之间联系紧密，富有逻辑性。句式的变换和一系列比喻及谚语的使用，使文章读来生动，具有说服力。

【要求】

幽默感是上天赐给人类的最好礼物，是快乐生活中所必不可少的要素。请你以下面的提纲写一篇短文，谈谈为什么幽默感非常重要。

幽默感是上天赐给人类的最好礼物，是公认的最有价值的性格特征之一。

幽默可以促进我们的身心健康。

幽默有助于我们与他人和谐相处。

综上所述，…

【范文】

Why a Sense of Humor is Important

A sense of humor, God's greatest gift to mankind, is universally considered the most valuable personality asset. It is born within every person's heart, but has to be cultivated. A person without humor is just like a spring without flowers and a dish without seasoning. In a sense, your personality lies in your sense of humor.

Humor can enhance physical as well as mental well being. It helps us bear our burdens, lessen our tension, overcome our frustration, relax our body muscles, and dissolve countless trifles and irritations. With the cracking of a joke, all our worries, sadness and tiredness disperse like mist and smoke, and we are full of vigor once again.

Humor helps us live in harmony with others. It is unavoidable to have misunderstanding and tension with others during work or study. But humor can ,as a“pacifier”, inject a light note into the touchy situation to ease these problems quicker than angry words or quarrels. With it you can always keep on good terms with others.

In short, a sense of humor is really one of the keys to happiness. It gives zest to life to make it worth living. 【评语】

该文语言生动流畅，用词准确。尤其是词语的搭配比较讲究，值得大家学习。文章内容切题，层次清楚，句与句之间的连接富有逻辑性。

【要求】

以“Why a sense of humor is important”为题，写一篇100字左右短文。提示如下：

幽默能体现个性。

幽默有益于身心健康。

幽默能融洽与他人关系。

【范文】

Why a Sense of Humor Is Important

Humor shows a person's characteristics. If you can see everything with a sense of humor, you are an interesting person, and people will never feel dull together with you .It also shows that you are a well-educated man.

You are healthy and happy with your sense of humor, for it can always keep you in high spirit, which will do good to both your mental and physical health. A sense of humor changes the color of the whole world before you.

You will also have plenty of friends with your sense of humor. People feel it a pleasure to be with you, for you help them to see things from an entirely different view and a much brighter view. You give people strength to face a world full of struggle.

【评语】

本文给出了每段的主题句。文章应围绕这几点发展成段，运用类比、假设等技巧，可以完成一篇出色的习作。

A little bit of humor can be an effective icebreaker.

【要求】

你认为在人际交往中最能体现个性风度、融洽与他人关系的性格是什么。

请用100字左右阐述你的理由。

题目自拟。

【范文】

Why a Sense of Humor Is Important

A sense of humor is universally considered the most valuable personality trait. Although everyone is born with it, it has to be cultivated. A person without humor is just like a spring without flowers. In a way, your personality lies in your sense of humor. Humor can enhance physical as well as mental well being. It helps us

reduce stress, overcome frustration and dissolve countless trifling irritations.

Humor helps us to get along with others. Misunderstanding and tension with others during work or study is unavoidable. But appropriate use of humor can settle quarrels and conflicts. With a good sense of humor you can always keep on good terms with others

【评语】

本文语言优美，比喻恰当，论述有理有据，条理清晰，层次分明。自拟的题目既指出了性格关键词“humor”，又说明了本文的主要内容是论述“重要性”，是自命题作文中的精品。

把这几篇同题材的文章对照参阅，一定会很有帮助的。

【要求】

题目：时间是无价之宝，浪费时间就是浪费生命。请以“The Value of Time”为题，写一篇100单词左右的英语小短文。每段的中心句已经给出。

Time is even more precious than money.

We should make full use of time.

There are a lot of people who waste their time.

We should get into the good habit of saving time.

【范文】

The V alue of Time

A proverb says:“Time is money”. But in my opinion, time is even more precious than money. When money is spent, we can earn it back. However, when time is gone, it will never return. This is the reason why we must save time.

It goes without saying that the time at our disposal is unusually limited. Hence, even an hour is extremely precious. We should make full use of our time to do useful things. As students we must not relax our efforts to engage in our studies so as to serve society and our nation in the future.

It is a pity that there are a lot of people who do not know the importance of time. They spend their precious time smoking, drinking and gambling. They do not realize that wasting time is equal to wasting part of their valuable life.

In a word, we should get into the good habit of saving time. Do not put off what can be done today until tomorrow. Laziness will not only bring us failure but also lead us to the road of poverty.

【评语】

该文分为四段，结构清晰，每段有每段的重点和内容。每一段，开门见山地谈到为什么我们要珍惜时间，因为它比金钱还宝贵；第二段里说，作为一名学生，更应该如此，“hence…”作为一种总结；第三段，对于一些不学无术的同学表示遗憾和惋惜。最后，用“in a word”来说明我们应该培养高效率地利用时间的好习惯。

【要求】

题目：暑假两个月的漫长假期为紧张学习的同学们提供了空闲娱乐、实践锻炼的好机会。你将怎样安排你的暑假生活？请以“How to Spend the Summer Vacation”为题，写一篇100个单词左右的英语短文。写出你安排暑假的活动和选择这些活动的理由。

【范文】

How to Spend the Summer Vacation

In school, we have summer vacation. In summer, the weather is so hot that our brain needs a rest after a period of hard work. Thus it is for health reasons that we have our summer vacation.

What would be the most healthy way to spend it then? There are many kinds of sports, which are good for health in summer, such as swimming, tennis and baseball. But care should be taken not to practice such sports all day long, which would be very bad for our health.

Another point we have to consider is that our time should not be spent entirely in playing. We attend school in order to get some knowledge, which will be useful in our life. But knowledge can only be obtained through constant drilling. During the vacation, we should not neglect to review the lessons we have learnt. It is true that all work and no play makes you a dull fellow. Though there may be other ways to spend the summer vacation, this seems to me the best of all.

【评语】文章首先从暑假的必要性开始，在第二段里又用问句来承上启下，提出本文的中心意思：“我们怎么才能最好地利用暑假的时间呢？”并说明运动是一个很好的选择，但是，第三段又说明还要学习以增长知识。

回答“怎么样”的时候往往要阐述“为什么”，才显得理直气壮。

【要求】

周末两天的休息对于平时忙于工作学习的人们来说是非常宝贵的。请你根据下列提纲写一篇短文。

周末对于人们来说意味着什么。

每个人都有自己度周末的方式。

我是怎样度周末的。

【范文】

Weekends

Weekends to people mean that they can have a two-day good rest. For example, people can go out to enjoy themselves or get together with relatives and friends to talk with each other or watch interesting video tapes with the whole family.

Everyone spends weekends in his own way. Within two days, some people can relax themselves by listening to music, reading novels, or watching films. Others perhaps are more active by playing basketball, wimming or dancing. Different people have different relaxations.

I often spend weekends with my family or my friends. Sometimes my parents take me on a visit to their old friends. Sometimes I go to the library to study or borrow some books to gain much knowledge. I also go to see various exhibition to broaden my vision. An excursion to seashore or mountain resorts is my favorite way of spending weekends. Weekends are always enjoyable for me.

【评语】

全文思路清晰，论述充分，语言流畅易懂。用词讲究，注意了词语搭配，没有重复、堆砌之感。

【要求】

要求：旅游事业对我国具有举足轻重的作用。请以Ways to Improve China's Tourism为题为我国旅游事业的发展提几点建议。（提示：扩大宣传，改善旅游设施，提高服务质量……）

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Ways to Improve china's tourism

Tourism is now becoming a major industry throughout the world. However, tourism in China is not as developed as it should be. If the following is done, China's tourism will definitely be improved.

First, our places of interest should be better advertised throughout the world to attract more tourists. Second, facilities should be provided to ensure that tourists enjoy their trip. Finally, the quality of service should be improved.

Don't tell people their ideas are bad unless you've got a good one.

【评语】

本文第一段提出问题，第二段解决问题，“first”，“second”，“finally”等词的使用，使整篇文章条理格外清晰。

【要求】

题目：人们对旅游观光有各种不同的看法，旅游也有其巨大的优点，同时也有缺点。请写一短文谈谈

你如何看待旅游的。

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Nowadays, it is very popular among young people to travel around and see the world. Some people say they want something exciting and choose sightseeing. Some people who go outside simply want to see how other people live. And other people hope to refresh themselves and relax.

However, when you want to travel, you will find many things to worry about before you really enjoy yourself. For example, ticket, hotel, luggage, thirst, hunger, rain, etc.

In my opinion, if you have made up your mind to travel, you'd better well prepare yourself and never complain.

Living close to nature is fun, especially for city people. Many new inventions make camping easier.

【评语】

本文从几个方面表明了不同人有不同旅游观念这一现实，同时指出旅游的麻烦之处，而没有泛泛地谈旅游的种种优缺点，这是本文取胜之处。文末的话，形象表明了大众对旅游的态度，显得真实贴切。此文另一优点，在于罗列不同观点时有条不紊。

【要求】

暑假就要到了，许多同学都会选择旅游作为度假的一种方式。的确，旅游对一个人的身心健康颇有好处。那么就请你以下面三句话分别作为三段段首的主题句，写一篇旅游的文章。

Travel is a very good means of broadening a person's perspective.

Travel may relieve a person of boredom and gloom.

Travelers can choose different modes of transportation which have advantages and disadvantages.

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Travel

Travel is a very good means of broadening a person's perspective. It makes you come into contact with different cultures, meet people of different colors and go through peculiar rites and ceremonies. Travelling much, you will not only enrich your knowledge and experiences, but also be aware of the vastness of nature. Travel may also relieve person of boredom and gloom. Travel brings you enjoyment and attraction. It gives you a pleasant experience, which will disperse your boredom and make you forget whatever annoys you. Travel broadens your mind and leaves you good memories. Later, you may go over these memories and enjoy your past experiences, thus keeping a fresh and sunny mind.

The field's his study, nature was his book.

Travelers can choose different modes of transportation which have advantages and disadvantages. Airplanes are the fastest but also the most expensive. Buses and trains are less expensive, but they soon make you feel cramped and uncomfortable. Ships provide you with comfort unless you get seasick. Most people can afford traveling by bicycle, which, although slow, can limber up your muscles and get you closer to nature.

【评语】

本文首先陈述了旅游能够开阔人们眼界的原因，接着指出为什么旅游能够消除烦闷、抑郁的心情，最后说明进行旅游可采取的不同交通工具的优缺点。本篇各段解释言简意明，主题突出。“come into contact with…”，“enrich you knowledge and experiences”，“be aware of the vastness of nature”，“disperse your boredom”，“broaden your mind”等词语的恰当搭配，生动而准确地表现出了旅游的益处。

要求】

题目：你将参加校园英语讲演比赛。现在需要写出一份简要的底稿，底稿应包含以下基本要点。

随着工作时间的缩短，空余时间越来越多了。

如何利用空余时间。

利用空余时间的益处。

题目自拟。

【范文】

Use of Free Time

Some people may be so busy that they never have a spare moment, but it would be hard to find such people in contemporary times. Working hours are shorter and vacations longer, and there are more and more ways to spend the weekends. Aside from eating and sleeping, what do people do during the many hours when they are not at work or at school?

Use of free time often discloses much about one's tastes, values, interests and personality. What may be one man's leisure, however, might be another man's work. In leisure hours, some may turn to the humanities: literature, magic, art and here we might also mention movies and television. Others participate in sports, politics, voluntary work or hobbies at home. Still others like parties, travelling, or just loafing.

Obviously, the use of free time is a good means of relaxation, but its benefits go beyond this. All things people do in leisure hours enable them to gratify their wishes. This can contribute to intellectual growth and promote social activities as well.

So the good use of free time will make life rich, colorful and rewarding.

【评语】

这篇文章写得很有水平。说理深入浅出，语言丰富晓畅，例证详实，句式灵活多变，使得文章生动并吸引人。开篇用问句，引出下文；结尾点题，总结全文。并且很有文学性。

【要求】

和外国朋友交谈是文化生活中很重要的一部分，但是谈什么话题却要慎重考虑，因为各国风俗习惯不同，谈的东西要关涉到禁忌、兴趣。学校的英语角将要组织一次对外交流活动。请你以书面形式写一些可以作为谈话的材料。

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Holidays and Outings

It is common in English to ask people about their holidays. In the West many families go away on holiday during the summer months and so it is very usual to ask about this. If the holiday has not yet taken place, then their holiday plans can be talked about. And if it is already over, then where they went, whether they enjoyed it and so on can be discussed. Similar questions are asked before festivals and pubic holidays.

Foreigners living and working in China often have frequent opportunities for travel, either at weekends or during their holiday periods, so questions on this topic can often lead to fruitful discussions. They may be particularly interested to hear comments on which places are worth visiting and why, especially if these places are a little less well known and not clearly described in the tour guides.

Take vacaticn and long weekends. Never let vacation time expire.

【评语】

看完上文，可知这实际上是一篇讨论英语话题的文章。从这个角度来写“Holidays and Outings”这个题目可谓不无新义。但是在与外国人交往时谈些什么都是一个很现实的问题。本文提供了这一范例。全篇也围这个问题来写，几乎每句话都是紧扣中心的。比如它始终突出了这是一个话题，就反复用“ask”、“discuss”、以及“comment”等词。

【要求】

在一次主题为“电脑时代”的学校征文活动中，你计划以“The Computer”为题写一篇文章参加评选，你的辅导老师帮助你制订了一个写作纲要，如下：

计算机正广泛被用于各行各业。

在过去的五十年中，计算机得到了迅猛的发展。

计算机最终还是由人来设计和控制。

【范文】

The Computer

The computer is widely used in all phases of society. In industry, business, education, medicine, nearly all walks of life, computers have made their appearance, providing great speed and accuracy for our work. Computers have been used in the home, offices, laboratories and research institutions, functioning as the most efficient and versatile instruments for calculating, sorting, filing, recording and distributing. Computers are indispensable to modern civilization. Without computers, our life and our society will undoubtedly suffer a big regression.

During the past five decades the computer has been rapidly advanced. Ever since the computer came into being, it has experienced the development of several generations, which are based respectively on vacuum tube, transistor and integrated circuit. Early computers were of great size, and had no match for the latest electronic computers in speed and accuracy. The Latter is capable of processing the most complicated information and reaching solution to problems in a fraction of time. At present, efforts are being made not only to bring the hardware to perfection, but also to improve the quality of the software.

作文的内容千变万化，这就要求我们丰富自己的知识，特别是各行业的最新动态。只有这样，才能自如地处理各种题材和内容。

Computers must be instructed and programmed by people. In spite of the remarkable skill of the computer, men can never become its slave. Computers are not creative. They work according to men's instructions. So the development of computers and their use will depend upon the ingenuity of men. Although there are times when computer s seem to operate like a mechanical “brain”,their achievements are not comparable to what the minds of men are able to do.

【评语】

全文按照题目所给主题共分三段，以说明为主，第三段具有议论性质。本文层次清楚，表达准确，句与句之间联系紧密。该文题材涉及当今热门话题，许多与电脑有关的词汇和表达法对同学们有参考价值。题目：计算机是现代科学技术最杰出的成果之一，它无处不在，与我们生活的各个领域息息相关。

请以“Computers”为题，写一篇100个单词左右的英语小短文。

要求写出计算机的具体用途和人们对于计算机应用的态度。

【范文】

Computers

One of the greatest advancements in modern technology has been the invention of computers. Computers are changing the way people live and work. They are already widely used in industry, business and in academic institutions.

With the popularization of science and technology, computers have found an increasingly wide application in all fields. A computer can do a lot of work. It is capable of doing extremely complicated work in all fields of learning. It can solve the most complex mathematics problems. Computers are able to store large amounts of information, which can be recalled rapidly at any time.

The truth of the matter, however, is that any new technology has a “dark”side. The problems caused by the use of computers are quite different. For example, assembly lines will be a slow process to retain workers to build and operate new equipment. Nevertheless, the dark side of the computer shouldn't mean that we should abandon the use of computers.

Technology only can make the real work cheaper, faster, and less tedious. It cannot solve problems.

【评语】

该文从现代化的技术革新角度来谈计算机，然后在第二段里讲到，随着科学和技术的普遍应用，计算机也大放光彩，具体的例举了两个用处。最后一段里，用“the truth of the matter”，再加“however”转折，说明了计算机的“dark side”，文章全面而重点突出。

【要求】

世界环境日到来之际，你将代表你们班以一个污染的环境为题向全校同学发出一封倡仪书，先描述列举环境污染对人类健康的危害，然后号召大家保护环境。

【范文】

A Polluted Environment

Environmental pollution is a serious social problem. It poses a terrible threat to men's health.

The atmosphere is filthy. The air is thick with dust and burnt oil. Dark smokes are being emitted from chimneys, and choking fumes are being released from numerous vehicles. Stay a little while in a big city, then wipe your forehead with your handkerchief, it is black. Hang out your washing on the line to dry, you will have to wash again. Garbage is left to accumulate in unsanitary heaps that attract flies and give off bad smell. Nor is the pollution confined to air and land. Large quantity of sewage and chemical waste are dumped daily into rivers, lakes and the sea, which kills millions of fish. Noises coming from honking cars, rumbling machines and broadcasting loudspeakers may make a person nervous and irritable, even drive him crazy.

Environmental pollution is responsible for many diseases that are disabling, or bringing death to human beings.

In short, let's take good care of our mother globe, not only for the well-being of ourselves, but also for that of our future generations.

【评语】

本文是描写文，以主观描写的方式，具体、形象地描绘了被污染的环境。文章突出强调了污染对人体健康有极大危害这一主题。语言简练有力，句式总体上讲也较简单，但有效地表达了倡议书所需的语气。文章感染性强，特别是以祈使句作结，增强了本文的号召性。

【要求】

题目：“世界环保日”即将到来，你将为校广播站写一篇宣传保护水资源的稿件，包含如下要点：

水是必不可少的。

人类面临严重缺水问题。

我们应该怎么做。

【范文】

Conserving Water Resource

Water is indispensable to our life and the development of national economy. It is often described as the source of all living things and the lifeblood of agriculture and industry. Without it, nothing could grow and out world would become a terrible desert.

The world we live in is now faced with a severe shortage of fresh water. According to some official figures, more than 1,700 million people in the world don't have enough clear water to drink and over 25 thousand people die of water related diseases daily.

So, all of us should actively b save water. It's our obligation for the benefit of the future generations.

每篇文章都会有自己的特色，要尽力突出自己的闪光点。

【评语】

文章条理清晰，层次分明，语言流畅，用词灵活不落俗套。运用了一个比喻，使文章增色不少。

【要求】

题目：以“Preserving Our Environment”为题，写一篇征文。要求按如下三条作为文章的提纲：

人类正在污染环境。

污染对人类的危害。

如何保护环境。

【范文】