上海英语历年一二模考试作文赏析
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样例3 2011年上海英语二模四区联考（静安、杨浦、青浦、宝山）试题：请简要描述图片，并结合图片内容谈谈自己的想法。
Composition AAccording to the picture, we can the young people carry a heavy bag, he and his parents was very worried, and they, try to let him go this way. There are two roads in the picture, one is personal interest and another is the pression of work. So it is hard for the people to try choose one.It is universal acknowledged to us that the world is face the financial crisis. So it is much 5harder to find a good job. Many parents are worried about their children’s future. But as far as I am concerned, compared with the pression of work, the personal interest is more important.For many college students, they also want to find a good job, and improve their living standards. But if the job is not satisfied with them, they will live a much harder work. They would will consider how to keep the job, and do a lot of things they don’t like. It is not only affect their health, But but also they will feel very pain for it.10However, when we choose the section course we like. We will devote ourself to it. We can feel happier when we listen attend the course. Though it may be that the course is not very hot, but if we learn it attentively, we can also learn it well. And I believe that all works of life must need excellent people. It is not necessary for a student to take the course that he has no interest in it.15We can see It is much better that the course you choose is very hot, and also you have interest in it. But if not, you should choose course according to your personal interest so you will not regret. After all, no one knows what happened in the future.(304 words)Composition BIn line with the picture given, we may figure out that they boy is standing on the crossroads between ‘job pressure’ and ‘personal interest’. His parents are urgently persuading him to take a better job and they takes no notice of the heavy burden on his back.Feeling sad about the boy, I reckon that a good personal interest is way more important than a 5decent job.Though I have to admit that once we get a well-paid job, our life quality will be improved, riches and fame are no equal to success. They will bring no mental benefit to us and will only make us more greedy.Persuing a personal interest, however, is the true genius of life. Every man is an individual 10who has no similarities with others — we are to ‘live’ rather than ‘survive’. We are to live out the values of life! Life isn’t about money, but happiness. If we all do what we want to do, we will live happier and more meaningful.Going forward, those who can really make their mark on the world are not those who have a good job, but those who are willing to live with their interests guiding them. Bill Gates, for 15instance, he dropped out halfway at Harvard and started to make the business he liked —computing. He is the model of all mankind!The time has come for every person to cultivate a personal interest, It is served as the compass through the darkest of storms. It helps us cut through the complexity of life to find a solution. It is the personal interest that enables us to live on our own out loud!(277 words) Composition CAccording to the picture, the little boy is struggling between two different choices of life —whether to follow his own interest or to meet the pressure of job. On the side of the road stand his own parents, shouting and waving flags in order to persuade him to meet the needs of the society.The boy, with all other burdens on the back, was quite dizzy as to taking which direction.5As far as I’m concerned, parents should let the children do the job themselves. Children may depend on parents when they are alive. But they will never grow up and try to live on their own two feet. In the long run, kids have to make the choice themselves. What’s more, with the input of their parents, kids may choose the way that actually they don’t prefer. Even if the road leads to success, they will never live a happy life. What a pity! Let them fly, and they will give you surprise!(164 words) Composition DHave you ever meet the situation like this? If you are a senior 3 student and your parents hope you can do more well in future, so you have a heavy bandon in your way, one is the pressure of working and the other is your interesting. How will you handle the situation?Maybe this is the general situation in senior 3 students’ life. Then the most important thing is 5what is the way for us to choose? I think your interesting is the most important things. If you can choose your favorite way you will feel happy and then you will never give up. Eventually you’ll reach the success.As is a senior 3 student, I hope every one can choose their interesting and reach their goal.(128 words )Composition ENow a lot of students can ’t choice the job what they like. why? Frist, it ’s difficult to find a job in nowadays. More and more peope lost their job. In addition, students ’ parents must hope their child find a good job and make a lots money, but they never care for the child ’s hobble.In my opinion, I agree with student find the job due to their hobble. they must work hard because they are interested in this job. All in all, it ’s very important that students should find the5 job by theirselves.(93 words )Composition FOnce upon a time, I was having dinner with people from all walks of life. During the dinner, someone raised the question what do you want to be when you grow up . You-name-it-we-have-it answers were given by the kids present — doctor, lawyer, president, with the exception of a little girl, who, to my surprise, answered: “I just want to be an ordinary mother.”Mesmerized! I ’m totally mesmerized! Nowadays, many people, the boy in the picture as a5 typical example, are in a dilemma whether to follow their own interest or to follow the mainstream. Many people choose to follow the mainstream, sacrificing their own dream. Stupid, stupid indeed! Money can give up so-called pleasure only in a short time. In the long run, people enjoy life by taking satisfaction in their own field.Wake up, human, and follow your own heart! 10(141 words )Teaching steps©P.F. Productions 版权所有保留一切合法权利™本内容附教师版，有需要者请通过上述e-mail 索取。
(完整word)2018年上海高三英语二模文章分析(12)
高考文章分析（12）Vocabulary Learning:1.underway在进行中2.on the set of the NBC comedy Superstore在NBC喜剧《超级商店》的片场NBC: 美国广播公司（National Broadcasting Company)3.craft精心制作4.post上传5.ahead of the comedy’s second-season return在喜剧第二季的回归之前6.struggle to reach young audiences努力迎合年轻观众7.turn to求助于8.Internet followings网络追随者9.as a means of generating awareness作为一种产生关注的方式10.seize on the strategy 利用这个策略[siːz]mercial-skipping跳过商业广告12.ad-blockers广告屏蔽13.recommendation推荐[,rekəmen'deɪʃ(ə)n]14.higher ratings更高的收视率15.executive执行官[ɪgˈzekjʊtɪv]16.build brand awareness and reputation建立品牌意识和声誉[repjʊ'teɪʃ(ə)n]17.online content platform网络平台18.count拥有19.tune in收听，收看20.review video games评论电竞游戏21.perform magic tricks表演魔术22.pursuit追求，爱好[pə'sjuːt]23.in the employ of受......雇佣24.marketing push市场推广25.decline to do拒绝去做某事26.range from......to从......到27.gift baskets礼盒28.entertainment company娱乐公司29.cast influencers 投资网络红人30.a bit of a gamble有点像赌博['gæmb(ə)l]31.business model商业模式32.show’s rating s节目收视率 ratings电视收视率34.box-office returns票房收入35.acting skill演技36.take on jobs担任工作37.both parties双方38.the credibility of a campaign活动的可信度[kredɪ'bɪlɪtɪ]39.definitely aware一定意识到['defɪnɪtlɪ]40.be tempted with 受.......诱惑41.fit with the image of the creator符合创造者的形象42.put on上演长难句分析：①And when Superstore gave its first public show, it did so to higher ratings than the last show of Season 1.它确实做到了，达到了更高的收视率比起第一季②Yet as social media stars consider whether to take on jobs promoting movies and TV shows, there’s an important consideration for both parties: the credibility of a campaign.但是，当网络红人考虑是否担任宣传电影或电视节目的工作时，有一个重要的考虑就是活动的可信度。
上海英语历年一二模考试作文样例分析连载5 - 2013上海高三浦东一模
上海英语历年一二模考试作文样例分析连载5样例5 2013届上海英语一模 浦东新区Composition AAfter watching the picture myself, I can ’t help but look down upon the cat who says that “such time we live in! Why would you catch mice when we are given fish?”It reminds me of China ’s current situation. Nowadays, China ’s rising in a speed that has never been before. But that doesn ’t mean that we could sit and enjoy the fruits of China ’s rise. Under no circumstances could we indulge ourselves into the present life which seems to be5 wonderful without thinking that there may be potential danger hidden somewhere around us. If we didn ’t realize it, we will gradually leave the basic skills we already have behind. In this way, when someday there does come emergency, we will lose the power to face and defeat it.In conclusion, we need to be prepared whether it is good or bad.(141 words )Composition BThe picture generally describes a family of cats, who are enjoying their dinner which is fish. When one of the cats is trying to catch a mouse when given fish, another cat flattered him by saying that “why catching mice when given fish?”In my opinion, the cat is wrong, definitely! In our study, for example, we always get help from our classmates, sometimes in exams. We take it for granted that whenever we are stuck in5 trouble, there’s gonna be someone ready to help, we are wrong, like the cat. There is not someone like Lei Feng who is always ready to help others in this century. If we rely too much on others ’ help, one day when we don ’t get it and we do not have the skill to do it ourselves, we are dead! Why would you catch micewhen we are given fish?I want to say to the cat: you may laugh at the cat who chases the mice, but one day you’ll be10laughed at when you lose the skill to catch mice yourselves. Always remember: He who laughs last laughs best.(178 words) Composition CThe comic strip show a funny story happened between several cats. While one of the cats is catching mice when fed with fish, another cat asked why he did so when given fish.It catches my eye that it never occurred to the cat that one day they had to leave home and fed themselves. In other words, parents will pass away one day and at that time those cats will have no 5choice but to live on their own two feet. But if they don’t learn the skills that are required for survival, they will fail to be independent.It is an alarm for all the teenagers about my age, some of which are living in paradise with their mom handling housework and father chores. They refuse to do anything as long as they’re done by someone else. They fail to understand the importance of “practical skills”. When they 10cannot find anyone to look to, they will regret what they’ve done now.(163 words) Composition DWe can see from the picture that a cat doubts another cat’s behavior of catching mice when given fish. As far as I’m concerned, his behavior is quite understandable. Our learning experience can account for this.Some of the students are not satisfied with the school life for it teaches a student with nothing 5but knowledge. Thus, they focus on finding part-time jobs and skip classes from time to time, just like the cat who catches mice in the picture. As far as I’m concerned, it’s no need. As long as we are given knowledge (“the fish”), we should focus on it as long as it will contribute to our future life. If we are distracted from it and pay too much attention to practical experience, we forget that certificate does count in most cases.10In this sense, we need to first finish our main job first before we decide to do other things.(154 words) Composition EIt can be seen from the picture that the third cat from the left is questioning whether it is a must to chase a mouse or not when we are given fish. In my opinion, there is definitely a need to do so.It echoes with what military training is trying to teach students to do. During high school and 5college time, it is required in the curriculum that each individual should take part in the military training in order to graduate from the school and most students feel it disgusting to bear. But actually, we need not only knowledge but also real-life experience & technique which can be learned from social activity like military training and volunteer works. We may fail to feel that these things are of great importance until we are faced with enormous difficulties or challenges 10one day.Just like the cats who are given fish, we may fail to understand the brilliance of the cat who chases mice. But only when we have to catch fish ourselves will we understand the importance of it.(179 words)Composition FThe cat in the picture is questioning another cat the reason why the cat is chasing the mice at dinner. Likewise, many modern people are questioning whether it is needed to teach citizens the escape skills when we’re lived in a safe place.Or are we?5I think we still remember the big fire occurred in 2010 at Jiaozhou Rd, which took awaynearly 100 people’s life. Only afterwards do we begin to realize the importance of escape skills. It alarms us that there is a strong possibility that we may be stuck in such a condition one day. And if we don’t pick up these skills beforehand, we may fail to survive. And I’m serious.From this, we may conclude that it’s better that we figure out the importance of certain skills 10before certain disasters happened to us later on. If we take the cat who laughs at another one as an example, we may have a sad ending just like him!(163 words)Teaching steps™©P.F. Productions 版权所有保留一切合法权利本内容附教师版，有需要者请通过zhucanqi@163.。
上海英语历年一二模考试作文样例分析连载7 - 2014上海高三普陀一模 (学生版)
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Composition A During high school life, one must have already experienced one school activity or another. While some are good, others are not. all, high school activities, generally speaking, extend our horizons and expose ourselves to the environment that we haven’t been before. My
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有的校园活动让你兴奋不已， 有的校园活动让你感到枯燥乏味。 请描述你参与过的 一次校园活动，并简单谈谈你对该活动的看法。 • • 请具体描述一次你参与过的校园活动； 并谈谈你对此次校园活动的看法或它对你的影响。
The following are compositions written by the examinees of the test, each with its own pros and cons. Try to improve the compositions by finding out their pros and cons.
上海英语历年一二模考试作文样例分析连载6 - 2013上海高三嘉定一模
上海英语历年一二模考试作文样例分析连载6✧考试技巧指导一、上海英语高考作文是否需要写标题？许多学生会有这样的疑问：上海英语高考作文需要写标题吗？毋庸置疑，如果作文有一个较好的标题，能使阅卷老师一开始就了解写作的内容。
但由于英语的标题，有其固定的表达方式，也有其固定的大小写习惯。
许多的学生并没有在高中时期学过如何根据提示写一个标题，因此对于这些学生来说，加一个作文标题也无疑是画蛇添足之举。
何况上海高考英语作文的评分标准中也没有将“标题”列入，所以对于不懂得如何写标题的学生，不建议冒险写标题。
当然，试卷已给出了标题的情况另当别论。
✧考试样例分析样例6 2013届上海英语一模嘉定区试题：Composition AI do agree the behavior that some provinces in China are taking of recycling textbooks.First of all, China is a country with a large population. Printing out textbooks for each individual will cost a lot. Thus, using textbooks is a good way to cut down costs, for both students and country. Second, textbooks from others are usually full of useful note, which is quite 5beneficial to us. Thus, using textbooks saves us the time and energy used to take notes. Last, by using what has already been used, students can know the importance of being frugal. It is a good lesson students can draw from recycling textbooks.(108 words)Composition BIt is said that nowadays more and more provinces in China are deciding to recycling textbooks. On hearing the news, I can’t see eye to eye with it.There is no denying that recycling the textbooks can cut down costs, but there is still another side of the story. As we all know, textbooks used by others must be full of words written by others.As a result, those notes will make the used textbooks look a mass, which will cut down the 5readability of the book.In addition, the notes taken on the books can always be troublesome. Students tend to think it unnecessary to be attentive at class as far as there is note on the textbooks. Thus, another problem arisen from recycling textbooks is the reduction in students’ attentiveness in class.10Last but not the least, not all textbooks can be recycled. Books used as exercise books should never be recycled.In one word, there are more cons than pros when it comes to recycling books. We need to balance the pros and cons when it comes to recycling books.(183 words) Composition CRecently, whether recycling books should be promoted in China has raised much debate among teachers and students. As far as I’m concerned, I do agree that it should be promoted. My reasons are listed as follow.First of all, in my opinion, trees, one of the main components of books, are precious elements 5given by Nature. Thus, reducing the production of books is equal to reducing the usage of trees, which protects the environment. It is assumed that it takes more than 80,000 trees to simply provide students in Shanghai for one year’s textbooks. If these textbooks are recycled, we literally saved 80,000 trees.In addition, using recycled textbooks doesn’t cost as much as using new textbooks. Children 10can use the saved money to buy candies and toys they like rather than wasting money on something that is expensive.Although those books are used, but we should treat it carefully so that more children can reuse the book.(158 words) Composition DBooks are humans’ friends. It is reported that many provinces in China have called on people to reuse what have been used instead of buying brand-new textbooks every time, which I can’t agree more.First of all, trees play an important role in producing books. The less the books are produced, 5the more trees are saved. Therefore, using textbooks that have already been used is helping to protect the environment actually. What’s more, books, though important in study, turn out to be a big burden for parents as it usually cost a large sum of money, especially to those who live in remote or underdeveloped area. Thus, using second-hand books, which cost less, helps to alleviate the burden of money. From all the above advantages, we can see that recycled textbooks are quite 10useful.And while we are reading those used books, we cannot be too careful to protect these books so that more students can be used. It is actually telling us to be both economical and considerate for others.(171 words) Composition EHave you ever count how many books you have used and then dropped throughout the yearsat school? Countless, right? But you are not alone. Everyone did so. Then the amount total will be an astronomical figure. If those books are recycled and reused, that will definitely be a good thing.Thus, many areas in China have adopted the plan of recycling textbooks. Students are nolonger forced to buy textbooks. They can use the recycled textbooks. More areas are thinking of5 doing this.As for me, there are at least two good points. One, it can reduce the usage of trees and protectthe environment. Two, it can lessen the cost of the textbooks. In this sense, not only the parents but also the environment benefits through recycled books.In my opinion, if the plan is carried out smoothly, even other kinds of books, like magazines,10 should also be recycled.(151 words )Teaching steps©P.F. Productions 版权所有保留一切合法权利上海英语历年一二模考试作文样例分析制作单位：P.F. Productions版权所有制作人：fyw, Mr. Jellyfish™本内容附教师版，有需要者请通过zhucanqi @ 索取。
2019届上海高三英语二模汇编--概要写作(解析版)
2019届高三英语二模汇编——概要写作1、2019黄浦二模Directions:Read the following passage. Summarize the main idea and the main point(s) of the passage in no more than 60 words. Use your own words as far as possible.DesertificationDesertification is one of the world’s most alarming processes of environmental degradation（退化）. The issue is often unclear, however, by a common misperception: that it’s a “natural” problem of advancing deserts in faraway developing countries. In fact, desertification is about land degradation: the loss of the land’s biological productivity, caused by man-made factors and climate change.Each year, desertification and drought cause an estimated $42 billion in lost agricultural production. The risks of desertification are sufficient and clear. It contributes to food insecurity, hunger and poverty, and can give rise to social, economic and political tensions that can cause conflicts, further poverty and land degradation. The great urgency of this challenge led the United Nations General Assembly to state 2006 to be the International Year of Deserts and Desertification (IYDD). It is a strong reminder of the urgent need to address the far-reaching implications of this problem. United Nations General Secretary recently summarizes in this way: “I look forward to working with Governments, civil society, the private section, international organizations and others to focus attention on this crucial issue, and to reverse the trend of desertification and set the world on a safer, more sustainable path of development.”The IYDD also presents a golden opportunity to get the message across strongly and effectively that desertification is a global problem which we ignore at our risk. It is important to recognize that dry-lands are home to some of the most magnificent ecosystems of this world. These unique natural habitats have been home to some of the world’s oldest civilizations. They stand like open-air museums, bearing witness to bygone eras. The Year will therefore also celebrate the delicate beauty and unique inheritance of the world’s deserts.参考答案：Desertification means land degradation due to man-made causes and climate change. It may cause problems like conflicts, poverty and land degradation. So 2006 was stated to be IYDD as a reminder of the serious problem and call for joint efforts to develop the world sustainably. The IYDD also reminds us of the risk, the beauty and civilization/inheritance of the deserts.难度：偏难解析：首先细读原文。
2018年上海高三英语二模文章分析(12)
高考文章分析（12）Vocabulary Learning:1.underway在进行中2.on the set of the NBC comedy Superstore在NBC喜剧《超级商店》的片场NBC: 美国广播公司（National Broadcasting Company)3.craft精心制作4.post上传5.ahead of the comedy’s second-season return在喜剧第二季的回归之前6.struggle to reach young audiences努力迎合年轻观众7.turn to求助于8.Internet followings网络追随者9.as a means of generating awareness作为一种产生关注的方式10.seize on the strategy 利用这个策略[siːz]mercial-skipping跳过商业广告12.ad-blockers广告屏蔽13.recommendation推荐[,rekəmen'deɪʃ(ə)n]14.higher ratings更高的收视率15.executive执行官[ɪgˈzekjʊtɪv]16.build brand awareness and reputation建立品牌意识和声誉[repjʊ'teɪʃ(ə)n]17.online content platform网络平台18.count拥有19.tune in收听，收看20.review video games评论电竞游戏21.perform magic tricks表演魔术22.pursuit追求，爱好[pə'sjuːt]23.in the employ of受......雇佣24.marketing push市场推广25.decline to do拒绝去做某事26.range from......to从......到27.gift baskets礼盒28.entertainment company娱乐公司29.cast influencers 投资网络红人30.a bit of a gamble有点像赌博['gæmb(ə)l]31.business model商业模式32.show’s rating s节目收视率 ratings电视收视率34.box-office returns票房收入35.acting skill演技36.take on jobs担任工作37.both parties双方38.the credibility of a campaign活动的可信度[kredɪ'bɪlɪtɪ]39.definitely aware一定意识到['defɪnɪtlɪ]40.be tempted with 受.......诱惑41.fit with the image of the creator符合创造者的形象42.put on上演长难句分析：①And when Superstore gave its first public show, it did so to higher ratings than the last show of Season 1.它确实做到了，达到了更高的收视率比起第一季②Yet as social media stars consider whether to take on jobs promoting movies and TV shows, there’s an important consideration for both parties: the credibility of a campaign.但是，当网络红人考虑是否担任宣传电影或电视节目的工作时，有一个重要的考虑就是活动的可信度。
2024年上海中考英语二模各区英语作文
2024年上海中考英语二模各区英语作文全文共3篇示例，供读者参考篇1Title: English Composition on the 2024 Shanghai Junior High School Second Mock ExamIntroduction:The 2024 Shanghai Junior High School Second Mock Exam has recently taken place, with students across different districts participating in the English section. This important test serves as a pivotal moment for students as they demonstrate their English proficiency and skills in reading, writing, listening, and speaking. In this essay, we will explore the performance of students in various districts and analyze the trends and patterns observed in the English compositions.District Analysis:1. Huangpu District: In the Huangpu District, students demonstrated a strong command of the English language in their compositions. The essays were well-structured, with organized paragraphs and coherent arguments. The use ofvocabulary and grammar was commendable, reflecting the students' dedication to language learning.2. Xuhui District: Students in Xuhui District showcased creativity and originality in their English compositions. The narratives were engaging and imaginative, capturing the reader's attention from start to finish. The students' efforts to incorporate idiomatic expressions and literary devices were evident, adding depth and richness to their writing.3. Jing'an District: Jing'an District students impressed examiners with their analytical skills and critical thinking in their English compositions. The essays were thought-provoking and insightful, reflecting the students' capacity to engage with complex ideas and concepts. The use of evidence and examples to support arguments was particularly noteworthy, showcasing a high level of intellectual maturity.4. Yangpu District: Students in Yangpu District exhibited a strong grasp of English language fundamentals in their compositions. The essays were clear and concise, with a focus on accuracy and precision in communication. The students' attention to detail in grammar and syntax demonstrated their commitment to excellence in writing.Conclusion:Overall, the performance of students in the 2024 Shanghai Junior High School Second Mock Exam English section was commendable. The dedication and hard work of students across different districts were evident in their compositions, reflecting their commitment to academic excellence. As students continue to hone their English language skills, they will undoubtedly achieve success in the future.Through the analysis of English compositions from various districts, we have gained valuable insights into the strengths and areas for improvement in students' writing abilities. With continued practice and support, students will undoubtedly excel in the English language and achieve their academic goals.篇2The 2024 Shanghai Middle School English Second Model Examination was held across various districts in the city. Students from different schools participated in the exam, showcasing their English language proficiency and skills. The exam comprised of various sections including reading comprehension, grammar, vocabulary, writing, and listening.In the reading comprehension section, students were required to read a series of passages and answer questionsbased on the information provided. The passages covered a wide range of topics including technology, environment, culture, and society. Students had to demonstrate their ability to understand and interpret written English texts.The grammar section tested students' knowledge of English grammar rules and usage. They were required to identify errors in sentences, choose the correct tense or form of a verb, and complete sentences with the appropriate words or phrases. This section assessed students' understanding of sentence structure, verb conjugation, articles, prepositions, and more.The vocabulary section focused on testing students' knowledge of English words and phrases. Students were required to match words with their definitions, fill in the blanks with the correct words, and choose synonyms or antonyms for given words. This section assessed students' ability to understand and use a wide range of vocabulary in different contexts.The writing section challenged students to express their thoughts and ideas in written form. They were given prompts or topics to write essays, letters, or reports. Students had to demonstrate their ability to organize their ideas, use appropriate language and grammar, and communicate effectively in English.The listening section tested students' ability to comprehend spoken English. They listened to recordings of conversations, interviews, lectures, or other audio materials and answered questions based on the information presented. This section assessed students' listening skills, including their ability to understand accents, tones, and nuances in spoken English.Overall, the 2024 Shanghai Middle School English Second Model Examination provided students with a comprehensive assessment of their English language skills. It challenged students to showcase their proficiency in reading, writing, grammar, vocabulary, and listening. The exam aimed to evaluate students' ability to communicate effectively in English and prepare them for future academic and professional endeavors.篇32024 Shanghai Junior High School English Second Model Exam Essays in Various DistrictsIntroduction:The 2024 Shanghai Junior High School English Second Model Exam has been held in various districts, testing the students' English language skills. In this article, we will reviewsome of the essay topics and the performance of students in different districts.District 1:In District 1, one of the essay topics was about the importance of protecting the environment. Students were required to discuss the causes of environmental pollution and suggest ways to protect the environment. Most students in District 1 performed well in this essay, showing a good understanding of the topic and providing relevant examples to support their arguments.District 2:In District 2, students were asked to write an essay about the benefits of reading books. They were required to explain why reading is important and how it can benefit individuals in various aspects of their lives. Students in District 2 demonstrated a strong grasp of the topic and showcased their writing skills by presenting well-structured and coherent arguments in their essays.District 3:In District 3, the essay topic focused on the impact of technology on young people. Students were asked to discuss thepositive and negative effects of technology on teenagers and provide recommendations on how to use technology wisely. While some students struggled with organizing their ideas, overall, students in District 3 showed a good understanding of the topic and offered insightful perspectives on the issue.District 4:In District 4, students were required to write an essay about the importance of education in today's society. They were asked to discuss the role of education in shaping individuals' lives and the benefits of receiving a quality education. Students in District 4 excelled in this essay, demonstrating a strong command of the English language and presenting compelling arguments to support their views.Conclusion:Overall, students across different districts performed well in the 2024 Shanghai Junior High School English Second Model Exam essays. They displayed a good understanding of the topics and showcased their writing skills by presenting well-structured and coherent arguments. The essays reflected the students' ability to think critically and express their ideas effectively in English, highlighting their proficiency in the language.。
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上海英语历年一二模考试作文赏析2013届上海英语一模徐汇区试题：假设你叫李华，你的同班同学小明觉得自己的手机太旧，想买个最新的iPhone 5，可是他的父母不同意，为此他很苦恼。
请你给他写封信，谈谈你的看法。
注意：短文中不得出现考生姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。
Composition AAs for Xiao Ming’s behavior, I think it is really silly for him to ask for a mobile pho ne like iPhone 5. It is even sillier to be upset for his parents’ turning down.As far as I’m concerned, students’ top priority should always be studying. He/she should always focus the attention on the study rather than thinking about playing or following the trend.5What’s more, it is mentioned that Xiao Ming wanted to change his mobile phone simply because hethinks that his mobile phone is out-of-date, which, in my humble opinion, thinks his behavior nothing butridiculous. Even if we are rich now, never can we forget to be economical in reality. Since it’s not broken or outof order, there is no need to change.(128 words) Composition BDear Xiao Ming,I’ve heard that you are suffering from your parents’ not allowing you to buy the iPhone 5. A s your classmate, I felt a pity that you’re struggling to get your dream realized. But, at the same time, I really don’tthink buying iPhone 5 is such a good option, especially for you.5 You know, youngsters of your age are all using iPhone 5 now. It has already become the mainstream. Do you thinkusing iPhone 5 is really innovative? Definitely not! As the new generation, we need to develop our own ideasinstead of following others’ steps. What’s more, since your parents disapprove of your buying iPhone 5, whynot trying other brands? In my opinion, other brands are far better than simply iPhone 5.10 If you have more questions about choosing mobile phone, feel free to contact me via email. I’ll be more thanwilling to pull you out of your misery.Yours sincerely, ZhangLin-lin(160 words) Composition CDear Xiao Ming,It is said that your parents don’t allow you to buy the iPhone 5 in place of your old cell phone. And you are upset simply because it. As for me, I think that is quite understandable.Young kids like us are always trend-followers. Thus, we should definitely feel free to buy5anything we want. I think your parents may be quite old-fashioned, or even too conservative for not allowing you to buy a new cell phone. We’re in the age of doing s o. They should give us more freedom instead of more restriction.Thus, in my opinion, you need to stick to your goal in order to survive the battle with your parents. Be courageous to follow your dreams no matter what obstacles you meet with along the10way, as long as these dreams are not off limit. I will be your great back-up and I’m willing to be a persuader.Be free to contact if your parents are still stubborn.Yours sincerely,Li Hua(169 words) Composition DDear Xiao Ming:I’ve heard you’re not happy as your parents disapprove of your behavior of buying a new cell phone. Although I can understand how you feel right now, I must point out that you need to listento your parents’ words.You know, your parents are senior to us not only in age but also in experience. They do haveevery reason to prevent you from buying iPhone 5. What’s more, we children are still not employed. In other words, we did not contribute anything to the family. But we are asking this andthat and become annoyed if our wish is not fulfilled by the parents. We need to think in our parents’ shoes.As your classmate, I’m not against your dream. But what I’m trying to express is that you canwork hard and make big progress in your study so that your parents are more than willing to buyyou a iPhone 5 simply as a reward in which both you and your parents are satisfied, which, I think,turns out to be a far happier ending than the present one.Yours,Li Hua(186 words) Composition EMing:I know y ou’re having some quarrel with your parents and I understand that you really wantthe brand-new iPhone 5. However, while I do respect your own feelings, I can’t 100% agree withwhat you’re doing.After all, we are nothing but kids. Thus, first thing we should do is not purchasing butstudying. Before we demand parents to buy anything for us, we need to first succeed in doing ourown job in a serious and good way.Thus, before you demand anything from your parents, we need to produce products that satisfy them. So, I recommend first make progress in study then ask for things. Don’t make that too much expensive. Otherwise, your parents won’t have enough money to buy it.Good luck!Lee(127 words)。