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gre满分作文汇总

Both the development of technological tools and the uses to which humanity has put them have created modern civilizations in which loneliness is ever increasing.

The technological tools we as a society have developed are not in themselves positive or negative, they are just that, tools. The uses, however, are definitely a different story. Computers, I believe at one time, were developed to save us time. Do our work more quickly for us so that we could have more leisure time to spend doing those things we enjoy. We have found now, especially those of us that are parents, that all of the leisure time we have gained is either spent watching our children learn things on the computer or creating our own unique something on the family computer. For one thing, it has become a very fun item, the computers have become more than just work related technological tools. The amount of human interaction is limited, because people in general are spending much of their leisure time doing solo on the computer. In the past, it was common for the new young exectutive to get a membership to the exercise club as a perk, where he could socialize with the upper crust. Now the new

young exec. gets a car phone or a portable fax, so that he can work from whereever he is, usually doing that solo trip to somewhere. Given these as examples, I would tend to agree with the statement that lonliness has increased as a direct result.

Comments:

This response is limited in its analysis of the issue.

The writer clearly expresses the idea that the technological tools we as a society have developed are not in themselves positive or negative. However, the response provides only limited support for the position. The two examples are loosely connected and undeveloped; for example, the relevance of the young executive example is not clear because there is no transition from the preceding example of the computer. The conclusion, one sentence long, simply restates the claim made in the topic.

The awkward sentences are evidence of a limited fluency. Greater use of compound sentences could help eliminate structural problems and facilitate the communication of ideas (e.g., sentences 3 and 4 could be combined).

For all of these reasons, this is not an adequate response. It received a score of 3.

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Both the development of technological tools and the uses to which humanity has put them have created modern civilizations in which loneliness is ever increasing. Computers of all shapes and sizes, p.c.s, laptops, faxes, phones, the list never ends. All considered by our society as great technological advances. Not many would argue that the development of these tools has not advanced our world in some ways. However they certainly seem to be making our world one in which contact with our fellow man is less and less necessary. Though some may be more comfortable not having to engage in direct contact, it is questionable whether this is beneficial to society as a whole. The very least result could in fact be a very lonely world, but it may result in more significant problems.

Comments:

This response is seriously flawed. The analysis of the issue is extremely limited, and there are serious problems in sentence structure. The writers position, never clearly stated, seems to be that as a result of technological developments, contact with our fellow man is less and less necessary. However, the implications of this statement (and others) are never explored

or developed. Furthermore, the list of technological advancements does not support or clarify the writers already tenuously held position. Each new sentence could serve as a springboard to a thoughtful analysis but instead takes the response further from the apparent premise.

This response received a score of 2, not because of language problems, but because reasoning, analysis, and development are extremely thin and insubstantial.

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Both the development of technological tools and the uses to which humanity has put them have created modern civilizations in which loneliness is ever increasing.

This statement is stating. The more advance in tecnology that society becomes, the more we depend on technology to live our everyday lives. Society as a whole will out do daily tasks and depend more on machines and computers to accomplish those tasks for them. For example; I was told that the younger generations use caclators in classes on a everday level. We counldnt do that. We had to resolve a problem on our own. Because caculators are being used, math problems are being adjusted around the caculators. If I didnt know how to use a caculator today then I most likely woulndt know how to

attempt to tackle the math of today. Computers of today are another example. Writing a essay took a lot of thought and hard work in past. Today, I can type some words in the computer and that computer will spell, make grammer correction, and dictate a right form to use in my essay. In the past we had to all these things on our own. Im not putting down modern technology totally. I just want to state that if we take away peoples ability to think then we will slowly loose our ability to function with out modern technology. Comments:

This response is fundamentally deficient because it does not discuss the issue. Instead, it briefly discusses the drawbacks of specific types of technology (e.g., calculators and computers) in terms of the effect they have on an individuals ability to function without them.

Furthermore, the awkward and imprecise phrasing often interferes with meaning (e.g., Society as a whole will out do daily tasks???).

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Our declining environment may bring the people of the world together as no politician, philosopher, or war ever could. Environmental problems are global in scope and respect no

nations boundaries. Therefore, people are faced with the choice of unity and cooperation on the one hand or disunity and a common tragedy on the other.

Cooperation---or Tragedy?

The solution to the worlds growing environmental problems may have to wait awhile. It has been said that environmental problems are global and respect no nations boundaries. Unfortunately, pollution and its consequences still fall to large measure on those least likely to do anything about it: poor countries willing to sacrifice anything in order to sit at the table with the worlds wealthy.

As far as the industrialized nations of the world are concerned, the world is a big place. Environmental destruction taking place outside their borders may sometimes be fodder for government pronouncements of concern, but few concrete actions. Deforestation of the Amazon, for instance, is of vital concern to all those who wish to continue breathing. But the only effective deterrent to this activity, the restriction of international aid money to those countries showing net deforestation, has been stalled in the United Nations by those unwilling to interfere in the internal politics of other nations. Because of the differential impact of polluting activities

around the world, and even in different regions of a single country, many governments will undoubtedly continue to promulgate only modest environmental regulations. Costs to polluting companies will continue to carry as much weight as the benefit of a pollution-free environment. Particularly in the current political climate of the United States, the well-documented expense of todays pollution-control measures will be stacked against the unknown long-term effects of polluting actitivities. Why should I spend millions of dollars a year, which causes me to have to raise the cost of my goods or eliminate jobs, if no one really knows if air pollution is all that harmful? Show me the proof, an air polluting company may demand.

Realistically, it wont be until critical mass is achieved that the hoped for choice of unity and cooperation will be a viable one. Only when the earth as a whole is so polluted that life itself becomes increasingly difficult for a majority of the worlds people will there likely be the political will to force global environmental laws on governments worldwide. But the optimists (read: environmental activists) among us continue to believe that the world can be shown the error of its ways. They continue to point out that the sky is probably falling--or at

least developing a big hole. The world, as a whole, ignores them.

One would hope, however, that governments, perhaps through a strengthened U.N., could somehow be forced to realize that when the Earth reaches the critical mass of pollution, it may be too late to do anything about it. That would be a common tragedy indeed.

Comments:

This excellent response displays an in-depth analysis of the issue, conveyed through the skillful use of language.

While acknowledging that environmental problems are serious and of global dimensions, the discussion explores the complexity of international cooperation. Such cooperation, the paper argues, runs into a variety of problems, and the writer offers persuasive examples to support that point:

-- the unwillingness of nations to interfere with other nations through

political measures such as restriction of foreign aid

-- inadequate environmental regulations, which are caused both by the

differential impact of polluting activities between countries and

regions and by the difficulty of comparing the long-term effects of

polluting actitivities with the more easily documented, short-term

costs of reducing pollution.

The paper distinguishes itself in part by its excellent organization. The first paragraph analyzes the claim and announces the writers position; the second and third paragraphs provide clear examples supporting that position. The skillful use of a quotation from a business person vividly illustrates the economic impact of pollution controls. The last two paragraphs bring a sense of closure to the essay by continuing the theme announced in the first paragraph -- that cooperation must wait until more dire circumstances produce the political will necessary to reduce pollution. Transitional phrases -- because, however, for instance -- help guide the reader through the argument. Also, effective sentence variety and the use of precise vocabulary help clarify meaning and confirm the score of 6.

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