成人商务英语之自我介绍练习与讲解
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Self-introduction
原:
I am Peter and I am male, and I was born 1979. I graduated in Nanjing. And I am/my major is International Trading. As to my favorites, I love the sports for football game and basketball. When I am university, I hope to have a healthy body. But for long time, I didn’t play these games.
As to my career schedule, now I am a SOHO, however, I hope to ex p and my business, for example, I want to attend the fair in Canton, if possible, I hope to attend the fare in Frankford. About my products range of business, there are Christmas Lighting and Steel and Toys, plush toys and so on. Ok, thank you.
修改:
My name is Peter, male. And I was born in 1979. I graduated from a university in Nanjing. My major was International Trading. As to my hobbies, I love sports. Like football and basketball. I believed that exercise can keep me healthy. However, I didn’t keep it for a long time since a lot of reasons.
Regarding to my career,I tried several kinds of jobs after my graduation, and now I am a SOHO. Recently, I planned to expand my business. For this purpose, I hope I can attend the fare in Canton and in Frankford, if possible. My product range includes Christmas Lighting, Steel and Plush Toys and so on.
Thank you.
句句修改讲解:
1. I am Peter and I am male, and I was born 1979.
My name is Peter, male. And I was born in 1979. be born in 出生于
不都用I 开头说话,会显得更加自然。And的频率降低。
2. I graduated in Nanjing.
I graduated from a university in Nanjing. graduated from 毕业于
从南京毕业在外国人开来有点奇怪,作为graduate的宾语用学校比较好。
3. And I am/my major is International Trading.
My major was International Trading.
降低and的频率。过去的专业,用was过去式。
4. As to my favorites, I love the sports for football game and basketball. When I am university, I hope to have a healthy body. But for long time, I didn’t play these games.
As to my hobbies, I love sports. Like football and basketball. I believed that exercise can keep me healthy. However, I didn’t keep it for a long time since a lot of reasons.
Favorite有爱好的意思,但是更偏向于指偏爱或者是记事本。爱好通常用hobby。
I love the sports for foot ball game and basketball, 中式英语。句型混乱。
When I am university中am要换成was过去式,When I was in university.
整句When I am university, I hope to have a healthy body. 中式英语。听着很奇怪。直接说我从前相信运动使人健康。下句同样的问题。
5. As to my career schedule, now I am a SOHO, however, I hope to expand my business, for example, I want to attend the fair in Canton,if possible, I hope to attend the fare in Frankford.
Regarding to my career,I tried several kinds of jobs after my graduation, and now I am a SOHO. Recently, I planned to expand my business. For this purpose, I hope I can attend the fare in Canton and in Frankford, if possible.
关于的表达有很多,不要过于单一都用as to,要换换。职业生涯直接career。建议在现在工作之前加上之前的工作经历一带而过。使内容更充实一点。However是表示转折的,但是这个句子里不需要转折。Recently最近。Hope的用法注意不好直接hope to do。Hope后面加人称或者that