第四单元 单元写作
初中语文七上第四单元写作指导附优秀范文
平时阅读课外读物，也要想着理清其思路。久而久之，你的思维会得到锻炼，表达也会清晰、 有条理。那么，有什么方法能让作文思路清晰呢？可以从以下方面人手。
一、整体构思 看到作文题目，你可能会有很多想法，会想到很多材料。这时别急于落笔，首先想清楚你要表 达的中心是什么，再据此取舍材料，并大致思考文章的整体结构。比如，要表达“他是一个热爱 学习的学生”这一中心，下面这些材料，你会用到哪些呢？大致采取什么样的结构呢?
三、列提纲 在头脑中形成作文的结构框架后，用提纲的形式把它呈现出来，有助于思路的清晰和完善。提 纲不仅要呈现文章的整体框架，也要包括文章各部分的内容要点。
写作指导
叶圣陶先生说:“思想是有一条路的，一句一句，一段一段都是有路的，好文章的作者是决不 乱走的。”那些言之有物、言之成理的好文章，都是建立在思路清晰、言之有序的基础上的。
一线教师写作指导
一、学会拟写作文提纲 写作是需要相对严谨的逻辑思维。写作前必须明确为什么写、写什么、怎么写，有一个清楚的 整体构思，这就如同盖楼房要先绘出“图纸”一样。有了写作提纲，文章就有了一个轮廓，写起 来心中有数，有条不紊。 不少同学不愿意拟写作提纲，觉得麻烦，耽误时间，结果想到哪儿写到哪儿，任意发挥，从而 出现条理不清、结构松散等弊病。为了减少盲目性，克服随意性，保证写作质量，我们一定要首 先学会写提纲。 记叙文写作提纲主要涉及：1.拟写标题；2.行文要点；3.思路结构；4.各层大意；5.表达技 巧。 1.拟写标题 文章标题如同人的眼睛，也是透视心灵的窗户。俗话说：“题好文一半。” 标题必须要有一定的作用：或是交代叙事要素，或是揭示文章主旨，或是蕴含深刻含义，或是 新奇别致吸引读者。 记叙文标题的拟写：或直接以人、事、物作题，或以时间、地点作题，或利用比喻拟人等修辞 作题。 2.行文要点 记叙文的行文要点包括时间、地点、人物、事件、起因、过程、结果、影响。
第四单元写作：笔尖流出的故事++课件++2024-2025学年统编版(五四学制)六年级上册
突然，飞机失去了控制，向深黑的海面坠去。机舱里一片嗷嚎。大家忍不住闭上了眼睛。 “咚——”的一声，飞机落到了海上。空姐有序组织大家快速调整好自己撤离，一个个救生艇都打开 了。人们拥挤在上面。最后一个离开机舱的是副机长李红。他的腿止不住的颤抖，一下子从机舱里栽 倒了下来。飞机慢慢地沉入了水中。可人们都得救了。
众人排队过桥时，老支书再次 因党性原则，“揪”出了抢在队伍 中的一个党员小伙子。
打破常规思路，设置悬念
列出提纲，丰富构想的情节内容
淘气包学习了《丁香 结》，想酿造“丁香蜜”
班长王寒冰发现教室门口 的丁香花越来越少了，通过侦 查，发现是淘气包 张明偷偷摘 花，她要告诉班主任。
班主任李军没有立刻 批评张明，询问原因
她“不安”的不是要不要把孤儿送回 去，而是担忧自己丈夫身上的生活重担， “揍我一顿也好！”
想一想人物在故事中可能会想什么呢？
环境：开满丁香花的校园 人物：淘气包张明
雷厉风行的班长王寒冰 充满活力的年轻班主任李军
想一想人物在故事中可能会想什么呢？
环境：冬日黄昏时车来人往的街头 人物：充满爱心的少年王天
李老师笑了，大家都笑了，这一刻深深的印在了大家的心中。
范文引路:
一架飞机正停在偌大的停机坪上，此时正是黑夜，飞机在其中显得十分孤独。熙熙攘攘的旅客
依次登上了飞机，机场雷鸣，副机长李红也走进了驾驶室。 这是老机长雷鸣最后一次驾驶飞机了，这次飞行对他来说十分重要。旅客们安顿下来，飞机开始
滑行，冲刺，起飞，飞机咆哮着插入茫茫云海。 过了一会儿，飞机进入平稳期，开启自动驾驶模式。雷鸣躺在椅子上，跟刚进来不久的副机长李
八年级语文上册第四单元写作《语言要连贯》写作指导+范文
八年级语文上册第四单元写作《语言要连贯》写作指导+范文写作指导（一）什么是连贯？连贯，是从句子前后逻辑关系的角度提出的要求。
无论是一段话还是一篇文章，都由许多句子组成，这些句子如果不连贯，就可能给读者的理解带来困难。
（二）怎样做到语言连贯？1.保持前后话题统一。
一段话不管有多少句子，都应围绕共同的话题，而不能东一榔头西一棒子。
如《昆明的雨》中写菌子的那部分文字，作者提到了牛肝菌、青头菌等，虽然写的内容不少，但都围绕“昆明的菌子极多”这个话题，句子之间的意思是连贯的，所以读起来并不让人觉得杂乱。
2.有合理的顺序。
前面出现的“四周的景色非常秀丽……”这段话，虽然各句都围绕“四周景色”的话题，但因为句子间的顺序不合理，读起来同样让人感到不连贯。
应该将第三句与第四句的顺序对调一下，这样第四句中的“它”才能指代“湖水”，整个语段读起来才连贯。
3.要注意句子间的衔接过渡。
适当的运用关联词、提示语或过渡句，可以帮助我们衔接句子。
如：表示关联的“可是”，“比如”“例如”等这样的提示性词语来引出例子，使句子上下衔接自然，过渡流畅。
范文范文一我的爸爸是一个热爱工作并且关心家庭的人。
由于工作出色,爸爸在单位经常被评为先进工作者，家里的墙上贴满了爸爸获得的奖状。
爸爸不仅上班忙工作,而且下了班也还惦记着工作。
记得有一一次，爸爸单位有一台机器坏了,大家修了一整天都找不出问题。
爸爸下班回到家,吃饭时突然想起了国外有过这方面的资料，于是他马上查阅了资料，接着连夜赶回单位抢修，终于修好了这台机器。
爸爸虽然醉心于工作,却从来不会忽略家人，他总是花很多时间陪伴家人。
周末,爸爸会带领我们全家人去郊游,为此他还专门买了本地郊区旅游攻略的书。
他研究了好多条路线，每次郊游，我们都能看到美丽的风景。
我们玩得非常开心。
范文二我们的节日光阴似箭,日月如梭。
作为中华民族最热闹、最喜庆的传统节日一春节马上要来临了。
春节是农历正月初一，又叫阴历年，是我国民间最隆重、最热闹的节日。
六年级下册英语苏教版第四单元写作文
六年级下册英语苏教版第四单元写作文全文共6篇示例，供读者参考篇1My Favourite Animal - The Majestic ElephantHey there! I'm so excited to tell you all about my favourite animal - the elephant! These gentle giants have always fascinated me ever since I was a little kid. Let me share with you why I love elephants so much.First off, elephants are just massive! Can you believe that an adult elephant can weigh up to 6 tons? That's like the weight of a big truck! Their size alone makes them really impressive creatures. And yet, despite being so huge, elephants are known for being quite gentle, at least with humans. Of course, you wouldn't want to make one angry - those tusks can do some serious damage!Speaking of tusks, did you know that elephants use them for so many different things? They use their tusks to dig for food and water, to strip bark from trees to eat, to protect themselves, and even to lift and move heavy objects. Tusks are basically likemulti-purpose tools for elephants. An elephant without its tusks is kind of like us humans without our hands!Another amazing fact about elephants is their trunks. An elephant's trunk is actually a fusion of their upper lip and nose. It's made up of around 100,000 muscles, making it super strong yet flexible. Elephants use their trunks to breath, smell, grab things, drink water, and even give themselves dust baths. Imagine if we had to do all those things just with our noses - it would be chaos!Have you ever seen videos of baby elephants? They are just about the cutest things ever! Baby elephants, called calves, weigh around 200 pounds at birth and drink their mother's milk for around 2 years. Mother elephants are very nurturing and protective of their young. The whole elephant herd helps take care of the calves too. Just thinking about those adorable baby elephant videos makes me smile.Sadly, African and Asian elephants have faced threats like habitat loss and poaching over the years, putting some elephant populations at risk. It makes me sad to think of a world without these magnificent creatures roaming free. Conservation groups and animal lovers are working hard to protect elephant habitatsand crack down on poaching to ensure elephants don't go extinct.Elephants are just so unique and special. They are highly intelligent animals that live in tight family groups, have amazing memories, and can even show emotions like happiness, grief and rage. Some researchers have witnessed elephants seeming to mourn their dead. They are deeply caring animals with complex social lives.When I was younger, I used to love collecting little elephant figurines and stuffed animals. I would line them all up on my dresser and make up stories about their adventures together. As I got a bit older, I became interested in learning more facts about real elephants through books and nature documentaries. There's just something magical about these giants that continues to fascinate me.My dream is to one day go on an African safari and see elephants roaming freely in their natural habitat. How cool would it be to witness a huge herd of elephants quenching their thirst at a watering hole or see young elephant calves playing together? Of course, I would have to keep a very safe distance - you can never be too careful around such immense animals!Until I can make that dream a reality, I'll have to be content admiring elephants through pictures, videos and books. I sometimes wonder what it would be like to actually ride on the back of an elephant. Their leathery, wrinkled skin looks kind of rough, but also comfy in a strange way. I imagine going for an elephant ride would be quite the experience, getting to feel their slow, lumbering movements beneath you as they carry you along.A unique way to journey and see the world!In conclusion, elephants are truly majestic beasts that deserve our awe, respect and protection. Their size, unique features like trunks and tusks, raw strength yet gentle nature, tight family bonds, and high intelligence all contribute to making them one of the most amazing animals on the planet. Elephants have meant so much to me ever since I was a little kid building elephant figurine collections. Even as I get older, my fascination with these giants never fades. Here's hoping that future generations can experience and marvel at the wonder of elephants for years to come. These treasured animals must be cherished and protected so their populations can thrive once more.篇2Unit 4 - A World of WondersHi there! My name is Lily and I'm a 6th grader. Today I want to tell you all about Unit 4 in our English textbook. It's called "A World of Wonders" and it's super interesting!The unit starts off by introducing some of the natural wonders of the world. Can you believe there are places like the Great Barrier Reef in Australia? It's the largest coral reef system in the world! The pictures in our book show so many bright colors and different kinds of marine life. I wish I could go snorkeling or scuba diving there one day.Another amazing natural wonder is the Aurora Borealis, or Northern Lights. They are colorful lights that dance across the sky near the North Pole. The book says they are caused by particles from the sun hitting the Earth's atmosphere. I've only seen photos but they look so magical! Maybe my family can take a trip to see them in real life someday.Then we learned about some man-made wonders like the Pyramids of Giza in Egypt. Those huge stone pyramids were built as tombs for pharaohs thousands of years ago. Just imagining how they were constructed with such basic tools and manpower back then blows my mind! Our book has cool illustrations comparing the height of the pyramids to a modern office building. They're so tall!The Great Wall of China is another man-made marvel we studied. It's an enormous series of stone and earth fortifications that stretches across northern China. Some parts are even older than the Pyramids! The book says the Great Wall is over 13,000 miles long if you add up all its sections. Walking the whole thing would take months and months. I can't fathom how many workers toiled to build something so immense.As we continued through the unit, I was stunned to learn about places like Piopiotahi in New Zealand. It's a massive hole in the ground caused by extreme erosion over millions of years! The photos make it look like a perfect circle carved into the earth. Apparently the crater is over 600 feet deep - that's taller than a 60-story skyscraper! Humans are so tiny compared to the incredible natural forces that shaped places like that.My personal favorite part was reading about Zhangye Danxia National Geological Park in China. It has these bizarre but beautiful rainbow-colored rock formations. The book explained how the surreal patterns and colors come from millions of years of mineral deposits and erosion sculpting the landscape. It almost doesn't look real! I really hope I can travel there to see the Rainbow Mountains with my own eyes someday.Towards the end of the unit, we learned about some incredible engineering projects that humans have constructed in modern times. Like the Channel Tunnel linking England and France undersea. Or the Millau Viaduct in France, which is one of the tallest bridges in the world. There are so many photos and diagrams showing the massive scale and complexity of these building marvels. It's mind-boggling what people can create with enough money, labor and ingenuity!Throughout this whole unit, I kept having the same thought: The world is full of such amazing natural wonders created over eons by powerful forces we can scarcely comprehend. And yet, humans have an almost magical ability to dream up and build our own extraordinary, seemingly impossible creations too. From the ancient Pyramids to modern feats like Burj Khalifa - the world's tallest skyscraper - we find ways to leave our mark on this planet alongside the marvels of nature.Some of my friends think units on world geography and landmarks are boring. But to me, learning about all these phenomenal places firing my imagination and curiosity like nothing else. I can't wait to see what other wonders await in future units!Studying this unit really opened my eyes to the incredible diversity of landscapes, environments and man-made structures around the globe. Sure, a lot of the reading was pretty dense for a 6th grader and some of the vocabulary was super advanced. But all the pictures, maps and diagrams made it easier to visualize and understand each wonder we explored. My personal favorite activities were the hands-on projects, like making a model of an erosion crater or sketching different architectural wonders.I'm so grateful my English textbook could take me on a virtual journey around the world to ponder these amazing natural and man-made marvels. Even though I've never actually traveled far from my hometown, I feel like I gained an appreciation for the astounding beauty and power of our planet - not to mention human creativity and perseverance. Who knew learning English could be a window into the wonders of the world?Well, that's my report on Unit 4! I still have a ton more to learn and discover, but at least this unit fired up my curiosity and excitement about the marvels waiting out there for me to hopefully experience for myself one day. Let me know if you have any other questions! Thanks for reading.篇3My Fun Summer VacationWow, where do I even begin? My summer vacation was just SO awesome this year! I had such an amazing time. Let me tell you all about the cool things I did.First up, my family and I went on an epic road trip! We packed up the car and hit the road bright and early. Our first stop was my aunt and uncle's farm out in the countryside. I loved seeing all the animals - the cows, chickens, pigs and horses. My cousin even let me ride one of the horses, Buttercup. She was kind of smelly but riding her was a blast. I felt like a real cowboy!After a few days on the farm, we drove further west towards the mountains. We stayed in this cute little cabin right near a beautiful lake. The water was so clear and refreshing. We went swimming every single day. My little brother kept trying to skip rocks but he wasn't very good at it. I'm much better than him! One afternoon we rented a little rowboat and went fishing. I didn't catch anything but my dad reeled in a huge bass! For dinner that night, we cooked it over the campfire. It was delicious.My favorite part was when we went hiking up into the mountains. The trails were a little challenging in some spots but the views were just breathtaking. We saw lots of cool plants and wildlife too, like deer, squirrels, and once I even spotted a black bear from pretty far away! We made it all the way up to the top of Mount Morgan. From up there you could see forever. It felt like we were on top of the world. I took some amazing photos and videos to show my friends.After leaving the mountains, we headed back east towards the coast. We spent a few days at the beach near my grandparents' place. I love the beach so much! We had a ball playing in the waves, building sandcastles, and having picnics. My grandpa even took us out on his little boat one day. We spotted some dolphins swimming alongside! That was so neat. In the evenings, we would go get ice cream cones and walk along the boardwalk. Definitely my favorite summer treat.All too soon, it was time to head back home. I was pretty sad that our big trip was over, but I have so many fantastic memories. We saw and did so many fun things. Now I'm back at school sharing all my stories and experiences with my friends. Some of them are pretty jealous that my summer was so action-packed! I can't wait to make more amazing memories next summer.Hopefully, we can go somewhere even more exciting. Maybe a dude ranch in the Wild West? Or we could go on a cruise around the Caribbean? I'll just have to wait and see. But I know for sure it will be an adventure!篇4My Awesome Summer VacationSummer vacation is the best time of year! No school, no homework, just fun in the sun. This summer was one of the most amazing summers ever. I had so many incredible adventures and made so many wonderful memories with my family and friends.It all started on the last day of school. I was so excited for summer, I could barely sit still in class. I just wanted the final bell to ring so I could run home and start my vacation. When it was finally time to leave, I raced out of the classroom yelling "Freedom!" at the top of my lungs. Ah, the sweet feeling of having no responsibilities for two whole months!The first week of summer, my family didn't have any special plans. We just relaxed at home, sleeping in late, watching movies, and hanging out. My little brother and I had endless videogame marathons. We played our favorite games for hours on end, only stopping for meals and bathroom breaks. My thumbs were sorefrom all that controller action, but it was worth it to beat the boss levels.After a week of lazy lounging around, we decided to go on a road trip. We piled into our car bright and early one morning and headed for the mountains. The drive there took forever with my annoying brother constantly asking "Are we there yet? Are we there yet?" But when we finally arrived, it was breathtaking! The towering peaks, the crisp fresh air, the sparkling streams—it was like a painting come to life. Simply gorgeous.We stayed in a cozy little cabin surrounded by forests of tall pine trees. We went on lots of fun hikes, seeing cool stuff like waterfalls, wildflowers, and once even a family of deer. I tried my hand at fishing in one of the rivers, but didn't catch anything. Typical beginner's luck! We also built a campfire every night, toasted marshmallows, and gazed up at the bright starry sky. I spotted a few shooting stars and made wishes on them.Once we got back from the mountains, it was time for summer camp. I went to day camp for two weeks at the community center. We did so many awesome activities like swimming, arts and crafts, field games, even a talent show. I'm not very talented, so I just told some jokes for my act. Here's one of them: Why can't a bicycle stand up by itself? It's two-tired! Getit? The camp was super fun overall and I made some new friends too.The biggest highlight of the summer though was definitely our trip to the beach! We went to a beautiful resort for five days and had a blast. I could spent every minute swimming, playing in the sand, and splashing in the waves. The ocean was so refreshing and relaxing. I spotted some little crabs scrambling along the shoreline, which was cute. For some reason, I also really enjoyed hunting for seashells and unique rocks. I have a small collection of them now at home to remember the trip by.We also went on some fun excursions, like visiting a nearby aquarium one day. It was amazing seeing all the different marine animals like sharks, rays, dolphins, and so many vibrantly colored fish. Another day we went on a glass-bottom boat cruise and got to see the ocean from right above it. The clear turquoise waters were filled with coral reefs, schools of fish, and other neat underwater sights. We even spotted a sea turtle!One night, the resort had a beachside campfire and all the kids did s'mores and listened to ghost stories. I wasn't scared at all by the silly stories, but some of the younger kids got pretty spooked! We ended our night by dancing around the campfire and singing silly songs. So much fun!On our last day at the beach, my brother and I had an epic sandcastle building contest. We spent hours molding and sculpting the perfect castle, decorating it with seashells and leaves. In the end, my castle was declared the winner by my parents, although I think my brother's was better. I'm still the champion though!When it was finally time to head back home, I was so sad to leave the beach behind. But I was also getting excited to see my friends again and swap summer adventure stories. I missed my neighborhood and my familiar surroundings too. And of course, getting back into my comfy bed after all that traveling felt amazing.In those last couple weeks of summer, I spent lots of time riding my bike around the neighborhood, having lemonade stands with my friends, and just savoring those last days of freedom before school started again. We played basketball, had water balloon fights, and stayed up late watching movies. My days were gloriously unscheduled and relaxed. Just pure fun!All too soon, summer was over. I was bummed to be heading back to school, but also excited to see my friends and learn new things. Plus I had a million memories from my awesome summer to look back on! Between the camping, the beach, the day camps,and all the adventures in between, it was one unforgettable couple of months. I had so many amazing new experiences and so much fun quality time with my family. This was a summer I'll never forget!篇5My Favorite SeasonHi there! My name is Xiaoming and I'm in the 6th grade. For our writing assignment this unit, my teacher asked us to write about our favorite season of the year. Well, my favorite season is definitely summer! I just love the warm weather, fun activities, and long vacation. Let me tell you all about why summer is the best.First off, the weather in summer is so nice. After the cold winter and rainy spring, it feels amazing when summer finally arrives. The sun shines brightly, warming everything up. The temperature gets hot, but not too hot. It's perfect weather to spend lots of time outside. I hate being cooped up indoors when it's gloomy and chilly out. But in summer, I can be outside all day long!My favorite thing to do in the summer is go swimming. Our community has a huge pool and I'm there every single day whenschool is out. I'm like a little fish, splashing around and playing games like marco polo with my friends. Swimming is not only fun, but good exercise too. I always take a quick dip in the pool after playing basketball to cool off.Speaking of basketball, that's another activity I love in the summer. There's a court right near my home and me and my buddies have three-on-three tournaments. The sunshine feels so nice as we're running around, dribbling and shooting hoops. Afterwards, we're always dripping in sweat but feeling accomplished.Summer is also great because there are so many fun places to go on trips and vacations. Every summer, my family goes on a road trip to visit my grandparents in another province. The drive there takes forever, but I don't mind because I can look out the window at all the cool landscapes. Last year, we stopped at this amazing lake and went swimming and hiking. We also love going to the beach in summer and playing in the ocean waves.Of course, my absolute favorite part of summer is having no school! Don't get me wrong, I love learning. But those long summer days with no classes, homework, or waking up early are just the best. I can stay up late, sleep in, and do whatever I wantall day. No schedule, no routines, just pure freedom. Thinking about it makes me want summer to start immediately!There are so many fun summer activities and traditions I look forward to every year. For example, we always have a huge barbecue with my extended family. Running around in the yard, playing games and sports, while amazing smells of burgers and corn waft from the grill. Yum! I also really enjoy going to the night markets in summer, wandering around snacking on fun foods and doing carnival games.Another thing I love is reading books and magazines during the summer. Since there's no homework, I can read just for fun. I pull up a lounge chair in the backyard and spend lazy afternoons getting lost in adventure novels and comic books. Sometimes I even build a fort out of blankets and read inside there with a flashlight. So cozy!One of my favorite summer memories is from two years ago when my family went camping in the mountains. We hiked up a trail to this beautiful clearing and set up our tents under the stars. In the evening, we built a campfire and roasted marshmallows. I'll never forget gazing up at the bright milky way while the fire crackled. We sang silly songs and told spooky stories. Though Igot bitten by a million mosquitoes, it was still an amazing experience.Summer also means lots of yummy summer foods and treats. Like ice cream! On hot days, I'll grab a popsicle or bowl of ice cream to cool down. My mouth waters just thinking about digging into a triple-scoop banana split. Corn on the cob, watermelon, lemonade - summer has the tastiest snacks and drinks. And you can't forget fairs and festivals with all their delicious fried food!As you can probably tell, I really look forward to summer every year. From splashing in the pool, to camping trips, to backyard barbecues - summer is just nonstop fun. The warm weather, long days, and time off from school create the perfect recipe for amazing memories. I have so many more summer highlights I could write about, but I'll have to stop here. Thanks for reading about why I love summer the most!篇6My Summer VacationThe summer vacation is my favorite time of the year. I love not having to wake up early for school and having so much freetime to do whatever I want. This summer was especially fun because my family went on an amazing trip!At the beginning of the summer, my parents surprised me and my little brother by telling us we were going to Thailand for two weeks! I was so excited because I had never been out of the country before. We started getting ready right away by packing our suitcases and making sure we had all our travel documents.The day we left, we woke up really early to catch our flight from Shanghai to Bangkok. The plane ride took almost 5 hours but it went by quickly because I watched movies and played games on the screen in front of my seat. When we finally landed in Bangkok, it was super hot and humid outside! The airport was really big and crowded with people.We took a taxi from the airport to our hotel. I couldn't believe all the traffic on the roads - there were cars, motorcycles, and tuk-tuks everywhere going every direction! Our hotel was right in the center of the city. It had a huge pool, a few restaurants, and even a kids' club with video games and activities. After unpacking, we went to explore the area around our hotel. There were so many markets and street food stalls. We tried mango sticky rice, pad thai, and other delicious Thai dishes.The next day, we took a tour to see some of Bangkok's famous temples like the Grand Palace and Wat Pho. They were absolutely breathtaking with all the colorful tiles, intricate carvings, and golden Buddhas. Our guide taught us that we had to dress modestly by covering our shoulders and knees to go inside the temples. Later that day, we went on a long-tail boat tour through Bangkok's canals and waterways. It was really cool seeing all the houses and buildings right along the water.After a few days in Bangkok, we flew down to the islands in the south of Thailand. We stayed in Phuket for a few nights at a beautiful beach resort. I had so much fun swimming in the warm ocean water, building sandcastles, and just relaxing on the beach. One day we took a boat out to go snorkeling at some nearby islands. I saw so many tropical fish and coral under the crystal clear water. It was like being in an aquarium!Our last stop in Thailand was the island of Koh Samui. This was definitely my favorite place – it was so laidback and peaceful compared to the hustle and bustle of Bangkok. We stayed in adorable little bungalows right on the beach. We spent our days kayaking, collecting seashells, and just hanging out by the pool. At night there were amazing fire shows and dance performances at our resort.After two wonderful weeks, it was time to head back home to Shanghai. I was really sad to leave Thailand because I had such an incredible time, but I was also excited to see my friends again and tell them all about my summer adventures.This was the best vacation ever! I made so many amazing memories exploring Thailand with my family. I hope I can go back again someday and maybe even learn some Thai phrases. For now, I'll just have to start dreaming about where my next summer trip will be!。
部编版六年级语文上册第四单元《笔尖流出的故事》习作训练范文3篇及点评
部编版六年级语文上册第四单元写作训练及范文3篇习作主题：笔尖流出的故事目录：1.流浪狗回家2.醉酒记3.街边的故事☆流浪狗回家☆窗外飘着雪,树被寒风吹得直摇晃,人们一个个穿着羽绒服,戴着手套,围着围巾,恨不得整个人都钻进衣服里。
小西从校门口跑出来,把小小的脸缩进厚重的校服里,拼命地往家跑去。
跑着跑着,突然传出一阵刺耳的喇叭声,一辆车猛地刹住了,紧接着,很多车都响起了喇叭,这高低起伏的刺叭声,在寒风中显得更加刺耳和响亮。
小西受不了了她转过头看了看那辆车,车主正愤怒地盯着前方。
原来前面有一只小狗,它吃力地拖着一条腿,不停地打着哆嗦,身体上还沾满了冰渣子,眼巴巴地望着周围的人。
由于身有残疾,小狗走得很慢,后面的车主已经越来越愤怒,整条街都挤满了车。
小西顿时对小狗起了怜悯之心,她跑到小狗身边,没有丝毫犹豫,把浑身发抖的小狗抱到胸前,用宽大的校服给它取暖。
她抱着这只可怜的小狗,慢慢地走着。
走到家门口,她突然想起妈妈是不会让小狗待在家里的。
可是,这条小狗多可怜啊,待在外面会被冻死的。
这该怎么办呢?突然,她似乎想起了什么,立刻向小巷深处跑去。
小巷的尽头有一个比较隐蔽的地方,小西找来一大把稻草,并均匀地铺好,又把随身带的一块小手帕放到稻草上。
她把小狗抱进去,小狗舒服地站在手帕上,对小西摇摇尾巴。
它那副可爱的模样让小西不禁哈哈大笑起来。
她摸摸小狗的头,对它说:“现在你就叫朵朵了!”小狗高兴地对她叫着,还用脸去蹭她的手。
从此以后,每天放学小西都走这条小巷,顺便把手上的一点食物给小狗吃。
慢慢地,她和小狗越来越熟了,小狗也会准时等着她。
有一天,老师拖课了。
小西十分着急:五点半妈妈就下班了,现在已经五点了，小狗吃不到小西的食物会饿的,怎么办呀?总算放学了,小西飞也似的朝小巷跑去,她心里只有小狗,却没有发现,刚下班的妈妈正从远处走来。
“朵朵,今天老师拖课了,给你送吃的迟了,你还不饿吧?”小西抚摸着朵朵可爱的小脸儿,一脸疼惜地问它。
第四单元写作《突出中心》
二、病例分析
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成长的足迹里饱含着亲情的关爱。难忘记忆 里儿时的童稚，骑在父亲脖子上撒欢儿，倚在妈 妈膝上数星星。睡觉时缠着他们讲大灰狼的故事， 半夜里被吓醒，生怕被狼叼走，就钻到妈妈的被 窝里，让妈妈紧紧搂住。不会忘记，在生病时， 送到面前的一片片药片，一杯杯开水，一声声问 候，那是同学们悉心的照顾。更不会忘记，在取 得成绩时，老师送来欣慰和赞许的眼神，考试失 败了她又送来鼓励的目光，增添了我与挫折斗争 的勇气。所有关怀我的人都与我同欢笑，共呼吸。
Байду номын сангаас例分析：
1.中心是说成长的足迹中饱含亲情的关爱，但是所 写材料却涉及同学友爱、老师关爱，这些内容都 偏离了中心。 2.最后一句是强调了关怀我的人与我同欢笑，共呼 吸。未突出亲情环绕的氛围对自己成长的作用。
病例修改建议：
方案一：将生病时同学的关爱和老师的关爱删除，增加在亲 人关爱下成长的事例。 方案二：作者在自己的成长中，能体会到他人对自己的关爱， 能意识到自己的成长离不开亲人、朋友们的关爱，这本身 就是思想认知上的加深，是成长中应该珍惜的精神财富。 如果能在意识到的同时写出知道自己该怎么去做，中心会 更鲜明突出。 方案三：将第一句中的‚亲情的‛删去，把最后一句改为 ‚我成长的每一步都离不开他们对我的关爱啊！‛之类的 语句，中心就明确集中了。但这种方案最好不采用，一是 因为这样改是未尊重作者本意的。二是因为这是修改中心 去适应材料，而没有修改材料来突出中心。
第四单元写作
突出中心
[学习目标]
1、借助课文学会认识中心对于 一篇文章的重要性。 2、从读到写，学习并体会如何 突出中心。 3、通过回忆社会实践活动，围 绕中心立意，写出情感和思考。
猜一猜
下面三段文字是学校组织 夜行军后，小学三年级、小 学六年级和初中一年级同学 写的，请你猜一猜，这几段 文字分别是哪个年级的同学 写的，为什么？
第四单元写作《撰写演讲稿》教案
一、教学内容
《撰写演讲稿》为四年级语文第四单元写作教学内容。本节课依据人教版《语文》四年级下册教材设计，具体内容包括：
1.学习演讲稿的基本结构：开场白、正文、结尾。
2.掌握撰写演讲稿的技巧，如：选题、立意、论述、举例。
3.分析教材中的优秀演讲稿，学习其表达方式和修辞手法。
在实践活动和小组讨论中，我发现学生们在讨论选题和立意时，思维比较活跃，能够提出不少有创意的观点。但在具体的撰写过程中，有些学生还是显得有些吃力，尤其是在运用修辞手法方面。这让我意识到，写作能力的培养并非一蹴而就，需要在日常教学中不断积累和练习。
在小组讨论环节，我尝试作为一个引导者，让学生们自己发现问题、解决问题。这种教学方式让学生们更加主动地参与到学习中来，效果还是不错的。但我也注意到，有些学生在讨论中显得比较沉默，可能是因为性格原因，也可能是对讨论主题不够熟悉。针对这部分学生，我需要在课后进行个别辅导，鼓励他们大胆表达自己的观点。
4.实践撰写演讲稿，培养表达清晰、观点明确、论证有力的写作能力。
二、核心素养目标
《撰写演讲稿》教学旨在提升学生以下学科核心素养：
1.增强语言表达能力，能够运用恰当的词语、句子清晰阐述个人观点。
2.培养逻辑思维能力，通过合理的论述、举例使演讲内容更具说服力。
3.提高文化素养，结合教材内容，了解不同演讲主题背后的文化内涵。
4.培养合作精神，在小组讨论、互评中学会倾听、尊重他人意见，共同提高撰写演讲稿的能力。
5.激发创新意识，鼓励学生在演讲稿中表达独到见解，勇于尝试不同表达方式。
三、教学难点与重点
1.教学重点
-掌握演讲稿的结构：明确演讲稿的开场白、正文、结尾三个部分，了解各部分的功能和特点。
部编版语文七年级上册第4单元单元写作指导 思路要清晰课件
全文思路清楚，行文流畅，给人以无限美好。
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你有勇气去访问你所在地区的一位名人，或者本校一位你不熟悉的教师吗
？ 勇敢地尝试一次，你不仅会获得人际交往的经验，还可能收获满满的自信。
记得提前做点儿准备，列出你的访问提纲。访问完成后，以《对 的一次访问 》为题，写一篇作文，跟同学分享你访问的经过和感受。
老妈对“我”的爱之深 欲扬先抑
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【点评】环绕中心来组织材料，为了突出老妈对“我”的爱，先
写老妈对“我”细致入微的照料，在拟写提纲的时候，按照一定的写
作顺序来完成思路，列出提纲，让我们看到自己谋篇布局的构思：中
心是什么，材料是什么，哪件事详写，哪件事略写，怎样安排顺序等
。这样一目了然，使写作时思路清楚，行文有序。
④听了亚凌老师的回答，我不由得对眼前这位处世不惊、肃然淡 雅的女子多了几分敬意。
⑤随着与老师交流的不断深入，我更是被亚凌老师的人格魅力所 吸引，谈话也愈加自然。最终，我抛出了在心中埋藏已久的问题：“ 亚凌老师，您认为创作过程中最重要的是什么？”亚凌老师淡淡地笑 笑，向我娓娓道来：“写作者的心动了、心热了，语言自然细腻得铺 排成了画面，文字结构自然浑然天成。”
所思、所感为线索，用极其细腻的笔触描写了一个下大雨的晚上，“
我”在放学回家的途中，和一群人一起帮一个卖梨的妇人捡梨的故事
。这件事让“我”感受到了人间真情，即使天空下着雨，即使彼此很
陌生，大家一起雨中全力帮助妇人的情景仍然让“我”倍感温暖。这
是“我”回家晚归的原因，也是“我”备受感动的原因，值得铭记。
对点评析 开头介绍故事产生的环境。 第②段点明故事产生的时间。 引出主人公妇人。 通过对妇人的动作和衣着的描写，为下文作铺垫。 第⑥段写出妇人看到梨掉在地上时的担忧。 第⑦～⑨段详写大家对妇人的帮助。 第 段点明文章的中心，写“我”收获了真情。
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单元写作怎样选材教材分析写作的材料源自生活,我们日常所接触到的各类人物,遇到的各种事情,都可以成为写作时的直接材料;而读过的书籍、文章等,还可以为我们提供一些间接材料。
当然,在所有材料中,最重要的还是自己的亲身经历。
生活中的素材很多,要学会围绕中心进行选择。
主题和题材是作文的两个最重要的构成要素。
没有中心,材料就没有生命力;没有材料,中心就无所依附。
所以,我们写作不仅要重视立意,还要重视素材的积累和题材的选择。
学情分析刚升入初中的学生,对初中语文的学习还处于一个适应期。
经过小学的学习,已初步了解作文的格式要求,在书写认真与合乎规范的方面接受了较系统的训练。
但是,作文写作和学生的知识经验、阅读积累、作文思维能力、练笔次数等息息相关,学生们对以上几方面均体现为不足。
大多数学生遭遇作文难写的尴尬,主要困难在于缺乏观察,没有生活积累,内容干瘪,无话可说,训练学生“如何选材”的能力迫在眉睫。
教学分析●教学目标1.在阅读教学和既有写作积累的基础上,帮助学生认识直接材料和间接材料。
2.拓展阅读,引导学生体会选材对于写作的意义,学习选材的方法。
3.写作实践,指导学生在写作时从生活中选材,围绕中心选材,并努力做到真实、新颖。
●教学重难点1.帮助学生认识直接材料和间接材料。
2.训练选材能力,学习选材方法。
●课时安排2课时活动过程设计第一课时一、导入“优秀考场作文一定来源于平时的练习”“看破千道题,其实一文章”,平时就要备好鲜活素材,苦练审题构思技巧,考场作文是和平时习作交错相通的。
考场上,时间短,要高分就得一气呵成。
所以,我们在平时的写作中就要苦练功夫,在看透题目、确定立意的基础上,学会选择自己身边的素材,用真实又新颖的材料写出优秀作文。
二、写作指导(一)带问题自读教材。
问题:写作时如何选取材料?(二)读后交流讨论,反馈指导。
1.根据中心选材一定的材料只能表现一定的中心,一定的中心要通过一定的材料表现。
文章的中心是从材料中提炼出来的,中心确定了,又对材料起制约、统率的作用。
在构思文章时,选什么材料,确定怎样的中心是一个反复交错的复杂的思维过程。
2.选材要新颖所谓新颖,并非是那些轰轰烈烈的大事或一般人尚未知晓的新鲜事,也可以是日常生活中的平凡小事。
滴水藏金,巧妙挖掘,就可以写出感人肺腑的佳作。
张中行在《叶圣陶先生二三事》一文中通过精心选材,体现叶圣陶先生为人宽厚、严于律己一个躬行君子、堪为师表的忠厚长者,独具而可贵的精神风貌。
3.材料要真实所谓真实,就是选择的材料应是实实在在的真事,是自己亲眼看到、亲耳听到、亲身经历过的事情。
所谓真实,还应该是说真话、吐真情。
如何做到材料选择真实呢?首先,睁大眼睛观察我们周围的人事物景,用眼睛拍摄下一幅幅美好的画面,留存在你的脑海里,用耳朵倾听世间美妙的声音。
多留心自己亲身经历的一些校内、校外活动。
其次,从报纸上、书上、网上、电视上,看到的、查到的资料,没有发生在我们身上的不能随意用到作文中。
最后,选择和运用的材料要符合实际情况。
4.选材要关注热点我们生活的时代是个突飞猛进的时代,所以我们应该跟得上时代的脚步关注社会热点,把握时代脉搏,讴歌真善美,抨击假恶丑。
当今社会像教育公平、打击假冒、保护环境等都是人们最为关心的热门话题。
若能做到选取得法,必能出奇制胜。
因此,文章选材时,一定要在围绕中心的基础上,使材料散发着浓烈的时代气息。
我们课本上的《最苦与最乐》这篇文章选入课本就是因为它具有时代性。
证明了未尽责任是人生最大的痛苦,尽责任是人生最大的快乐的论点,告诉我们不能躲避责任、苟且偷生,要勇于背负人生、社会的大责任,体会人生的快乐。
三、实战演练(一)病文会诊,聚焦选材问题1.收集病文,适当分类、筛选。
学生翻阅近期作文、日记等,挑出在选材方面明显存在问题的作品。
2.会诊病文,诊断选材问题。
分组活动。
学生以小组为单位,浏览病文,组内会诊,找出选材方面存在的问题,推测出现问题的原因。
全班交流。
各组轮流发布会诊结果,教师点拨,师生共同梳理写作中选材容易出现的问题。
假:虚假的、没有经历过的材料;大:刻意选取所谓重大、深刻的材料;空:没有真情实感、感情虚假;俗:选取的材料陈旧。
(二)头脑风暴,运用选材方法1.围绕“母爱”这个主题,你选择哪些材料?全班交流。
2.出示材料,学生筛选。
(1)我在学校生病了,委屈地跑回家,母亲说:“学校条件太差了,就在家治好了再去上学!”(2)我跌倒了,母亲没有扶我起来,却说:“你是个勇敢的孩子,自己跌倒自己爬起来!”(3)我悄悄把别人的文具盒拿回家,母亲看见了,狠狠地教训了我一顿,然后要我连夜送回别人家去。
(4)母亲在街上看见一个小偷,不顾个人安危,把他扭送到派出所去了。
(5)母亲从不私拆我的信件,也不干涉我的交往,但却经常注意我与什么样的人往来。
材料分析:(1)虽然是母爱,但是母亲的溺爱不是我们应该选的题材,所以不能选。
(2)围绕中心,而且深刻。
母亲独特的爱,是一种新颖的爱的方式,多下笔墨能成为好的材料。
(3)题材虽然是母爱,但太多人写,写不出自己的特色。
(4)有关与母爱无关的材料,实际该材料是说的母亲见义勇为。
(5)有关母爱的一种既尊重孩子,又关心孩子的新材料,很少有人写,此材料容易得高分。
四、教师总结“生活中不是缺少材料,而是缺少发现”,“读书破万卷,下笔如有神”,考场作文是和平时习作交错相通的。
考场上,时间短,要高分就得一气呵成。
所以,我们在平时的写作中就要苦练功夫,在看透题目、确定立意的基础上,学会选择自己身边的素材,用真实又新颖的材料写出优秀作文。
第二课时根据写作学案,完成本单元的写作实践题目。
板书设计教学分析●教学目标1.了解作文在选材方面的具体要求。
2.引导学生分析作文选材常出现的问题。
3.掌握作文选材的方法和技巧,提高学生的选材能力,并用之于写作实践。
●教学重难点学会怎样选材,并用之于写作实践。
教学过程设计第一课时一、导入新课一提起写作文,许多同学就感到头痛,提起笔望着题目发呆,总觉得无话可说。
平时有些同学聊天谈论学校生活时,滔滔不绝,却到这时候也开始犯难了。
有一副对联就生动地描写出了同学们面对作文题时的痛苦情形。
横批:无米之炊上联:抓耳挠腮落笔愁下联:胡编生套成文羞二、怎样选材1.选材选材,就是根据主题的需要,选择恰当材料,使文章产生良好效果。
选材就像蜜蜂采花, 不是所有的花都能酿蜜,只有精心挑选、精心酿制的,才有甘甜可口的蜂蜜。
对于一篇好作文来说,主题是心脏;结构是骨架;语言是细胞;材料是血肉!2.选材的原则原则一:紧扣中心生活中的材料很多,要学会围绕中心选择。
同学们在写作中经常出现的毛病是,没有明确的中心,想到哪儿就写到哪儿,从头到尾像一本“流水账”。
文章中心决定了材料的取舍及详略的安排:跟中心无关的,舍弃不取;跟中心有关的,也要分清层次,选取有利于表现中心的材料作为重点展开,其他的可以略写。
如《阿长与<山海经>》材料是为表现中心服务的。
因此,选材必须紧扣中心,准确选取。
【片段欣赏】记住我爱你这是世上最伟大的死亡姿势:她双膝跪地,身子前倾,双手着地支撑身体,成匍匐姿势,身体被压得变了形,成为人与大自然抗争的雕像。
她身子底下的孩子还活着,被子里有一部手机,屏幕上有一条妈妈留给娃娃的短信:“亲爱的宝贝,如果你能活着,一定要记住我爱你。
”手机在人们中间传递,每个看到短信的人都落泪了。
原则二:真事真情只有叙写真实的事情,才能自然流露真实的感情,而真挚的感情才最能打动人。
因此, 我们写作文就应选真事抒真情。
3.选材的角度角度一:小处入手现实生活中,多的是小事,而有时事虽小,却因其中的一句话、一个动作、一个眼神打动了我们。
因此,选材时应从小处入手,选取令你感动的小事,并对其中细节作细致描写,这样才能打动别人。
如《散步》这篇散文运用了以小见大的手法,“小”指文中写一家人互敬互爱的细节;“大”指的是“我”尊老爱幼,想了一个两全其美的办法,体现出了亲情、使命感、生命的生生不息等。
角度二:富有新意(新)选材应以独特的视角,选取与众不同的材料:或是别人未关注的时事热点或是别人未留心的特色材料或是转换视角创新切入角度,将常用材料翻出新意的……选择新颖的材料会让作文折射出耀眼的光彩!【片段欣赏】美在身边“记得5月初的《兰州晚报》上刊登了兰州急救中心O型血告急的消息,第二天,就有2000多名群众挽起袖子为急救事业无偿献血,挽救了众多病人的生命,这不正是有无数颗美好心灵汇聚而谱写的爱之歌吗?”【短评】选择别人未关注的时事材料,显新颖!我的老师写字课上曾有这样逗人一幕:老师发现有人写字不看字帖。
有些急脾气的他生气了,提高声调叫:“你们怎么可以这样呢?这么不认真!态度怎么这么不好?要是再这样,就叫你们上来,讲一讲自己的理由了……”忽然他打住了,似乎是觉得自己过火了、失态了,便自嘲似的笑了笑。
呵,一个多么可爱的老人哦!【短评】选择了别人未留心而遗漏的特色材料,显独特!一件幸福的事早晨,一辆载着上班族的公交车正行驶着。
忽然从旁边冲出一辆婚礼的摄像车,公交车一个急刹,停住了。
只见后面是长长的迎亲车队,行驶得很缓慢。
乘客开始抱怨上班要迟到了,公交车司机只是静静地坐着,不时地按着喇叭。
有人说:“你光按喇叭不行,倒不如从车队的空隙中冲过去。
”司机回过头来笑着说:“我按喇叭不是催他们让道,我是在为他们祝福呢!”顿了顿,他又说:“别人结婚是件幸福的事,我们有机会为别人的幸福让一次道,不也是一件幸福的事吗?”满车的乘客霎时安静下来。
给别人的幸福让道,是一件幸福的事;有这种心情的人,必定也是一个幸福的人。
【短评】选择独特视角下的常用材料,翻新意!三、实战演练1.聪明能干的大哥有一次,我跟大哥一起去食品厂拉猪骨头。
当我们要走的时候,两个女工拦住我们,说:“你们得交5元钱才行。
”大哥说: “我一分钱也没带,不信你们翻。
”大哥说着,翻遍了所有的口袋,果真没有。
“我这儿有。
”我说着,把钱递给了两位女工。
一出厂,我便疑惑地问大哥:“你刚才……”大哥哈哈大笑起来,说:“傻兄弟,我是装的!你要是不说有钱不就省了嘛。
记住,以后在外面不要这么老实。
”大哥既诚实又聪明能干,他教给了我许多书本上没有的知识和经验……【短评】选取的材料恰当吗?为什么?2.围绕“母爱”这个主题,你选择哪些材料?(1)我在学校生病了,委屈地跑回家,母亲说:“学校条件太差了,就在家治好了再去上学!”(2)我跌倒了,母亲没有扶我起来,却说:“你是个勇敢的孩子,自己跌倒自己爬起来!”(3)我悄悄把别人的文具盒拿回家,母亲看见了,狠狠地教训了我一顿,然后要我连夜送回别人家去。
(4)母亲在街上看见一个小偷,不顾个人安危,把他扭送到派出所去了。
(5)母亲从不私拆我的信件,也不干涉我的交往,但却经常注意我与什么样的人往来。