翻译技巧3 6月8日

译文中没有使用华丽辞藻，“奇峰叠翠，拔地而起”译为 towering peaks, “舒卷飘逸” 、“时而升腾，时而泄落”及“参差错落，非 常壮观”则全部省略。对于外国读者不熟悉的“窈窕淑女，关西大汉” 形象则用humans这个比较笼统、普遍的词来翻译。
孔子“登泰山而小天下”；李白“天门一长啸，万里清风 来”，杜甫“会当凌绝顶，一览众山小”都称得上千古绝唱。 自中国第一部诗歌总集《诗经》起至当代，描写泰山的诗歌 浩如烟海；泰山散文源远流长；泰山题材的小说，自魏晋至 当代都有大量作品产生。
Analysis: Generally speaking, it is very difficult for international tourists to digest ancient dynasties in Pinyin. But these terms are inevitable when introducing China’s history. Version 1 just gives the beginning and ending of the dynasty and clarifies the duration in western years instead of enumerating each dynasty from the source text.
…（莫高窟）历经十六国、西魏、北魏、隋、唐、五代、宋、 西夏、元，上下延续千余年，……
Version 1: …the project lasted more than 1000 years through many dynasties, from the Sixteen Regimes to the Yuan Dynasty (366-1368 A.D.)
Version 2: …the project lasted more than 1000 years through the Sixteen Regimes, Western Wei, Northern Wei, Sui, Tang, Five Dynasties, Song, Western Xia, Yuan.
省略第二人称代词 （textbook P107) (1) A warm welcome 24 hours a day awaits you at Travelodge,
where you’ll find real value for money, comfortable rooms with private bathroom, color TV, radio and telephone. (2) For the business people the ideal meeting place, with modern conference facilities available. (3) Families are particularly welcome. (4)To make your Travelodge reservation, contact….
澳门Macao
(1)作为一个世界性娱乐的场所，澳门不仅有豪华的赌场，现代的车赛与眼 花缭乱的夜生活，也有柔和了东西方文化的浪漫情调与快乐享受。 (2)漫 步在大街小巷，可以欣赏到古朴的教堂、古色古香的文物商店、百年的炮 台、地中海风格的建筑等，它们集中国传统与葡萄牙遗风为一体。（《汉 英旅游服务实用手册》 P205）
鲤鱼门海鲜美食村（textbook P108） Lei Yue Mun Seafood Bazaar
(1)鲤鱼门以海鲜美食驰名，最适宜三五知己晚饭共 聚。（2）在这里，顾客可以到海鲜摊亲自挑选鲜活 的海产，然后亲自交给菜馆炮制，客人更可指定烹 调的方式。（3）当然，在点菜前宜先查询价钱。
Version : This fishing village is popular for its seafood and ideal
(1) As a place of entertainment for the world, not only luxury casinos, modern car races or fascinating nightlife but also excitement and romance in a blend of Eastern and Western cultures does Macao offer. (2) Wandering along the winding streets, one will surely come across baroque churches, Chinese antique shops, century-old fortresses and Mediterranean styled promenades — an enchanting fusion of Chinese and Portuguese customs.
Translation methods 3
Omission/simplification减译 Loan Translation仿译
Translation of color words
Omission(simplification) 减译、删减法
减译是指基于语法、意义、修辞、文化等方面的考虑，将原文中需要而译 文中不需要的词语省去。省去的应是那些不符合目标语表达习惯，在译文 汇总保留下来反而使行文累赘的词语。
到泰山顶上，感受绝顶雄风，俯视群山，都在脚底。
When you climb to the top of Mount Tai, you will find the whole world below seemed small.
南天门很高，李白这是称赞这呼啸而过的山风。在南天门一 声长啸，感到万里清风都在呼应，一种居高临下的辽阔心情。
Travelodge是一家物美价廉，遍及世界60多个国家的连锁经济型酒店……
译文1：24小时热诚接待，价格实惠。设有浴室、彩电和电话的舒适客房。 还有现代会议设施，是商界人士开会的理想场所。特别欢迎家庭住宿。预 订电话…..
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Omission/simplification 减译、删减法
（《外宣资料的功能性编译法探讨》P41
删减主要包括删减一些重复的话语、行话、诗歌、高调的话 语和华丽的辞藻。当中文原文中含有中国特色的思维方式和 表达手段、独特的政治生活和语用色彩的一些描写和语言时， 译者需要根据英美人的思维方式和语言表达习惯采用删减法 简化语句和结构；当中文原文中还有晦涩、呆板的语言时， 译者也应适当删减以突出事实和特点。
产品出厂前应该进行抽样检查。 Ice is a solid. If we heat it, it melts and becomes water. 冰是固体，如果加热，就融化成水。 As it is late, let us go to bed. 不早啦，睡吧！
每当华灯初上之际，外滩各座建筑物上的艺术灯光与浦江对 岸东方明珠广播电视塔竞相辉映，争奇斗艳，令海内外游客 为之赞叹不已。
孔子“登泰山而小天下”；李白“天门一长啸，万里清风来”， 杜甫“会当凌绝顶，一览众山小”都称得上千古绝唱。自中国 第一部诗歌总集《诗经》起至当代，描写泰山的诗歌浩如烟海； 泰山散文源远流长；泰山题材的小说，自魏晋至当代都有大量 作品产。
The verses in quotation marks in the Chinese version are cited to account for the fact that Mt. Tai was frequently depicted and praised in ancient literary works. Even if they are translated word for word arduously, no one can ensure that they will be appreciated by the English readers. Thus translators can take a sensible measure to simplify them so as to keep the English version fluent and readable.
孔子“登泰山而小天下”；李白“天门一长啸，万里清风来 ”，杜甫“会当凌绝顶，一览众山小”都称得上千古绝唱。 自中国第一部诗歌总集《诗经》起至当代，描写泰山的诗歌 浩如烟海；泰山散文源远流长；泰山题材的小说，自魏晋至 当代都有大量作品产生。
The supreme magnificence of Mt. Tai had been extolled by lots of great historical figures, such as Confucius, Li Bai, Du Fu and so on. From Confucius time up till to the present age, countless poems and prose *which depict Mt. Tai in praise have been written. A number of novels on Mt. Tai have become popular since * the Wei Dynasty.
for a night out with friends. You can choose your own fresh fish (so fresh it’s still swimming in a tank!) and decide how you’d like it prepared. Make sure you ask the price before ordering.