跨考教育英语二作文预测及范文解析(五)

跨考教育英语二作文预测及范文解析（五）
五、节约资源
储蓄水滴，储蓄幸福
思路点拨
本图描述的场景是一副令人喜闻乐见的图画，图画中，一只可爱的小猪造型的储蓄罐，正在接住自来水里滴下来的水滴，像存钱一样，存储水滴。

实际上，它储存的不是水，它储存的是幸福。

我们可以看出，人们有了节水意识。

但是，从正在滴水的水龙头看，还是有人忽略了节约用水这一问题。

因此，本文可以这样写作：
第一段：描述图画;第二段：分析有些人浪费水的心理，并阐述水资源的宝贵;第三段：建议措施。

思维拓展
实际上，积极正面的图片写作，和揭示负面现象的文章没有什么本质上的区别，只要我们笔锋一转，就能把它继续按照原来的套路写。

本文也可以从低碳、环保的角度出发进行写作。

关于节约能源的话题，都可以按照这个行文思路和语言模式进行展开。

参考下图：
参考图片
高分范文
Water used to be mistaken to be an unlimited and renewable resource. Actually, water resource is very limited and precious. It is fortunate that now the public is starting to pay attention①. Just as is depicted in the p icture, just like saving money, the lovely and smiling piggy bank is collecting every drop of water falling from the water tap。

However, water shortage is still a serious problem threatening the existence and survival of the whole human being, and yet the phenomenon of wasting water can still easily be found anywhere in our daily life②. For example, water taps are frequently left on by careless users. Someone even assumes that they have the right to waste water because they pay for it so that it has nothing to do with others. In fact, so precious is water that we cannot afford to waste it③. Water resource is indispensable④ not only in our daily life but also in the industry and agriculture. And water is the wealth of the whole mankind, and it is hard to imagine what the world would be like⑤ when there is no more water。

Even though an increasing number of people have become aware of⑥ this emergency, further measures still need to be taken. On the macro level, the whole world should make a joint effort to fight against waste of water. On the micro level, publicizing activities, such as broadcasting wonderful ways on how to save water on TV and other media, should be conducted. To store water means to store happiness and only by saving
water can we save a better life for our offspring。

佳作妙译
水资源一度被误认为是一种无限的可再生资源，实际上，水资源是非常有限且宝贵的。

有幸的是现在公众开始关注这一问题了。

如图所示，一只可爱的快乐小猪存钱罐积攒着水龙头里流出的每一滴水，就像存钱一样。

然而，水资源短缺问题仍然威胁着全人类的生存和发展。

浪费水的现象在日常生活中仍然随处可见。

例如，经常有粗心大意者忘记关水龙头。

更有甚者认为自己缴了水费就有权浪费，与他人无关。

事实上，水资源不仅在生活中必不可少，在工农业生产中也是不可或缺的。

水资源是全人类共同的财富，很难想象当没有水的时候世界会是什么样子。

虽然越来越多的人已经认识到了这种紧迫性，但是仍然要采取进一步的措施。

从宏观层面上讲，全世界应该共同努力反对浪费水。

从微观层面上讲，要进行广泛的宣传活动。

比如在电视台播出关于如何节水的节目。

节约用水就是存储幸福，只有节约用水才能为子孙后代存储更好的生活。

名师点评
① It is fortunate that now the public is starting to pay attention: 来自于2005年阅读真题，原句是这样的：Fortunately, the White House is starting to pay attention。

历年真题是一座巨大的宝库，广大考生一定要学会充分利用这宝贵的资源!
② 第二段开头，用了一个转折词，也就是“起承转合”中的所谓的“转”，把这篇作文改造成了一篇社会问题型作文，也就是大家最擅长写的作文。

③ In fact, so precious is water that we cannot afford to waste it: 倒装句，表语提前，句子倒装。

倒装句写法：
第一步：写正常原句：Water is so precious that we cannot afford to waste it。

第二步：表语precious提前。

第三步：主谓倒置，变成So precious is water that we cannot afford to waste it。

普通的so… that… 句型，也能被化腐朽为神奇，成为钻石加分句型!
④ indispensable: 不可或缺的，替换important的一个很好的词汇。

顺便讲一个英译汉的技巧：大家可以看到，在译文中，这句话被翻译两次：必不可少、不可或缺。

因为原文中出现了：not only… but also，所以这个单词被拆开翻译成了两个近义词，以使行文更加通顺。

⑤ what the world would be like：注意宾语从句必须用陈述语序。

⑥ become aware of: 意识到。

意思和用法都等同于be conscious of。

后边接词语。

⑦ 非常重要：一般而言，历年真题中谈到的正面话题，或者人生哲理类的文章，有可能题目要求会变成：
Directions:
Write an essay of 160-200 words based on the following drawing. In your essay, you should
(1) describe the drawing briefly,
(2) explain its intended meaning, and then
(3) support your view with an example/examples。

也就是第三段并非发表个人评论(建议措施)，而是举例，这时候就需要我们去调整一下文章的叙述方法。

这种情况下，我们可以把结尾段调整为：
Examples of people’s increasing awareness on saving water can easily be found anywhere in our life. On the macro level, the whole world is making a joint effort to fight against waste of water. On the micro level, publicizing activities, such as broadcasting wonderful ways on how to save water on TV and other media, can be seen nearly anywhere and every day. In short, to store water means to store happiness
and only by saving water can we save a better life for our offspring。

这样的话，结尾段就从建议措施，变成了论证文章的示例。

可见，随机应变，对写好考研作文也很重要。