雅思(ielts)写作：雅思大作文9分范文分析
2010年雅思大作文点评
1月10日、4月5日、4月15日、6月4日、8月5日、8月14日、9月16日、3月20日、1月10日Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to deal with. Others, however, think that each individual should take some actions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.考题分析：本题是一道典型的雅思 (IELTS) 环境类写作考题。
在历届雅思 (IELTS) 写作环境类话题中，出题思路主要有以下三个方面：1.环境保护是谁的责任？考题给出的选项通常会有个人、公司、国家、国际合作等(例如 04 年 5 月 15 日， 0-7 年 2 月 3 日考题) 。
2.如何保护环境？考题通常会给出某个方案问其正确与否(如 06 年 6 月 17 日， 08 年 6 月 14 日考题) 。
3.为什么人们明知环境正在被破坏却不动声色例？(如 08 年 9 月 13 日 A 类议论文)假如考前对以上三方面的雅思 (IELTS) 写作真题都思考过，相信本题一定会变的很简单，实际上只要把一些理由进行组合就可以了。
由于考题的提问形式是“ Discuss both views and give your own opinion. ”所以，既要讨论到个人能够采取何种行动解决一些环境问题，也要讨论为什么有些环境问题个人无法解决(即只有政府或公司才能解决) 。
Sample Answer:It is true that our tiny individual actions often seem insignificant compared to the scale and complexity of global environmental problems such as pollution, deforestation and depletion of natural resources. But that does not relieve our duty as individuals to do as much as we can to deal with these problems.Individual actions, small as they may be, can prove more effective than we realize. We can avoid driving the car, and take public transit, walk, or bicycle instead. This will reduce the use of fossil fuels and cut pollution. Saving energy at home, like turning on the air conditioner only when we have to, or turning water heater down a few degrees, is also ultimately good for the environment. Individual actions can also turn into united powers when, for example, the whole neighborhood is mobilized to participate in a local campaign to oppose environmentally damaging policies.There are, however, obstacles that stand in the way of individual action towards environmental conservation. The first obstacle is the lack of professional knowledge needed to cope with serious environmental issues like soil erosion and salinity, which require a significant amount of investigation and research. Another obstacle which makes individual action almost impossible is when an environmental emergency or accident happens, e.g. an oil spill near the bord der line, which would necessitate government intervention or even international coordination.So, in conclusion, when it comes to environmental problems, individual actions are indispensable in the problem solving process. But the most pressing and complicated problems go far beyond an individual’s capability and so require the concerted effort of the government as well as the global community2010 年雅思大作文点评:不够尊重老人的原因2010-6-4There is not enough respect for the elderly people. What are the causes and what problems does this phenomenon create?There is a growing tendency nowadays for some people to regard the elderly people as a troublesome group. Gradually, this leads to not revere (这是啥意思？！ lead to 后面接doing ！) the elderly people in diverse conditions. Yet in my opinion, instead of contempting every one should treat them as our treasure (这句话本身就有点变扭，感觉很怪！) . But, what causes the promble? Here i give two major reasons (这句太废话了，把两个理由总结一下，写出来会比较好) .On the one hand, some elder people (第一段用的是 elderly people ，这里怎么又变了？！ ) live without any income. In addition, they are weak even some of them cannot look after themselves (这分明是两个句子，怎么可以写在一起！ ) .Thus, they have to be given a hand. A recent statistics ( statistics 这里好像应该是复数吧) shows that 90 percent of the elderly people need to provide (应该是被动语态吧) the allowance and nurses. It costs 80 billions ( billion 不可数的！ ) yuan every year. So the elderly people become a burden to the society. On the other hand ,the young are to blame. Their consciousness of respecting the elderly people should be promoted. What is worse, they don't regard anyone.Nevertheness (应该是 nevertheless ) , for the above reasons, we also can take immediate and specific measures to cope with them. Because no one can deny the fact that a person's moral( 应该是 morality 吧 ) is the most important aspect of the society. If we lose it,I (人称不要变来变去) can't image, (这里逗号多余) what may happen to our society. How terrible it is! As is known to everyone, we are all getting old. But, we may not being esteemed. A yeasty world is proceeding.To sum up ,the reasons and problems for respecting the elderly people are many. I have simply pointed out some of the more obvious ones. However, it is certain that if the whole of society pays more attention to the solicitude of the elderly people, the issue will not being a trouble again.语言分析：1. 整篇文章没有什么精彩的长句或复杂句，所以不太可能上 7 分；2. 低级错误或者明显错误(红色部分)很多，所以也就 4-5 分的水平；3. 错误岁多，但不影响理解，还是能够看得懂作者的观点，所以应该是 5 分的水平。
雅思高分范文之年轻人是否应该保持传统
雅思高分范文之年轻人是否应该保持传统写作题目Some people think that young people should follow traditions of their society, and others think that young people should be free to behave as individuals.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.题目大致意思：到底年轻人(1)是应该遵守传统，(2)还是可以被允许有自由的行为?隐形模板：起3承6转6合3起--允许年轻人自由取舍传统，视传统为历史的导师，而不是未来的狱警。
承--(舍其劣)年轻人自由抗拒不好的传统束缚，如此社会才能进化。
转--(取其优)全力保卫优良的传统价值，如此相传社会的文化遗产。
合--年轻人在行为上分辨理性的活传统与非理性的死传统。
IELTS Example EssayEvery generation, young and old, should be allowed freedom to deal with the breaking down of certain patterns and standards being handed down from the past. As individuals, young people are particularly keen to the need to end whatever tradition they think is unreasonable for the society. All rebellious minds think alike--tradition is a guide for the past but not a jailer for the future.Too often young men and women are enthusiastic about the evolution of beliefs and practices of their society, and their behaviors tend to challenge a number of elements of tradition. For that matter, mental independence is required because without an amount of freedom, tradition would be only an explanation for acting in conformity without thinking independently.Accordingly, young people ought not to be forced to express their new feelings in a mummified form, otherwise the evolution in tradition could not happen. The point is that not just because something is traditional, so there is reason enough to do it. It is good, however, for young people to continue a worthwhile tradition, and it is also good not to be captive of an unreasonable tradition which is not worth having. Although social bondage persists, it makes a difference if young people are permitted to think and act in such a way as different from that of a conservative mind in which the word 'tradition' means a shortcut to thinking or an excuse for acting.Probably a society can only successfully function with traditional values--diverse customs, thoughts, lifestyles, religion, music, dance, arts and languages, among other things of culture. Young people had better learn that modern traditions are built on the past just as the past was builton the times that went before it. Traditions bring continuity to one's existence in a society, even though this sort of continuity is precisely what has been increasingly lost through modernity.Thus, it behooves young individuals to preserve their traditions of value by safeguarding against the negative influence from various factors such as industrialization, globalization, and assimilation or marginalization of special cultural groups. It certainly makes patriotic sense that young people's love for traditions worth continuing always strengthens the well-being of the society and never weakens all that is meant to identify themselves with their country. Good tradition being a good guide, young people, however rebellious, should not be entirely negative about the past with all its enduring heritages and necessary evils.In conclusion, since a modern society is not supposed to be a dead community, young people may behave freely in treating tradition as the living faith of the dead and not as the dead faith of the living. They should not believe in traditions simply because many beliefs and practices have been handed down for many generations, but should instead observe and analyze anything that agrees with reason and is conductive to the good and benefit of the society. It takes a lot of history to make a tradition, so the best of which must be accepted and lived up to, from generation to generation.更多资讯请登录新航道烟台雅思培训官方网站：/。
慎小嶷：十天突破IELTS写作完整真题库与6-9分范文全解(
Day 8法制进行时： 犯罪类真题库与各
分数段范文剖析
Day 10没有方向感 的人也能够写好雅
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作者介绍
读书笔记
这是《慎小嶷：十天突破IELTS写作完整真题库与6-9分范文全解（剑13版）》的读书笔记模板，可以替换为 自己的心得。
精彩摘录
这是《慎小嶷：十天突破IELTS写作完整真题库与6-9分范文全解（剑13版）》的读书笔记模板，可以替换为 自己的精彩内容摘录。
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目录分析
Education类各分 数段范文剖析
解读Education类 真题库
学有余力者
Technology类各分 数段范文深入讲解
解读Technology类 真题库
学有余力者
Media类各分数段 范文剖析
解读Media类真题 库
学有余力者
Government类各分 数段范文剖析
解读Government类 真题库
学有余力者
Development类各 分数段范文剖析
解读Development 类真题库
学有余力者
Culture类各分数 段范文深入讲解
解读Culture类真 题库
学有余力者
解读Environment类 真题库
Environment类各分 数段范文剖析
学有余力者
IELTS写作全真题速 查指南
Day 9走路去纽约： 全球化类真题库与 各分数段范文剖析
慎小嶷：十天突破IELTS写作完整 真题库与6目录分析 05 读书笔记
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02 内容摘要 04 作者介绍 06 精彩摘录
思维导图
关键字分析思维导图
剑桥
题库
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雅思大作文万能例子
雅思大作文万能例子英文回答：As an AI language model, I am capable of providing examples and explanations for various topics, including IELTS writing tasks. Here are some examples that can be used as versatile examples in IELTS writing:1. Education:In my opinion, education is the cornerstone of a successful society. For instance, in many countries, education is highly valued and considered as a ticket to a better future. In China, the phrase "读万卷书，行万里路" (dú wàn juǎn shū, xíng wàn lǐ lù) translate s to "read ten thousand books and travel ten thousand miles," emphasizing the importance of education and exploration. This shows that education is not only about acquiring knowledge but also about gaining experiences and broadening one's horizons.中文回答：就我个人而言，我认为教育是一个成功社会的基石。
官方指南雅思范文(完整大作文附赠部分解析)
Test 1Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.1.For most people, when they get their first job they have little idea whether or not they will remain in the same organisation throughout their working life.2. If they decide to change, they need to consider how this will impact on their career overall.注意开头段写法，说明背景句+观点的方式已经被雅思官方认可，而且一般就两句话。
但是这两句话作者并不是随意的简单同意替换，句型上来说一定要丰富。
比如作者用了一个用了一个时间状语从句+一个条件状语从句。
平时在行文练习中，一定要注意开头段的长句子输出，如果大家无法用一个句子说清楚背景，可以用两个句子，介绍背景加题目观点。
另外一个句子来表达自己观点。
从现在官方范文来看，几乎所有开头段都表达了作者的观点。
3. People who stay with the same organisation will have the advantage of a thoroughly understanding how it works and also becoming familiar with the staff and processes.4. If they work hard, their promotion prospects are good and there is likely to be greater job security with a promise of a good pension when they retire.5. Employers value loyalty and may offer additional incentives to long-term employees, including bonuses and reward schemes.第3句，中心句，表达长期从事一份工作的主要好处第4句，中心句的拓展，解释在长期工作的情况下，如果工作努力，又会得到什么好处第5句，解释雇主对忠心员工提供的好处, including的用法一定要学会别动不动就such as很多同学一遇到稍微抽象的问题，就不知道该怎么拓展了。
英语一大作文多少分
英语一大作文多少分
在不同的英语考试体系中，如雅思(IELTS)、托福(TOEFL)、大学入学考试等，英语作文的分值会有所不同。
以下是一些常见英语考试中作文部分的分值情况：
1. 雅思(IELTS): 雅思考试的写作部分分为两个任务，Task 1 和Task 2。
总分是9分，写作部分的分数通常占总分的四分之一，即
2.25分。
但是，考生的实际得分会根据写作的表现进行四舍五入。
2. 托福(TOEFL): 托福考试的写作部分包括综合写作和独立写作两个任务。
总分是30分，全部用于评估写作能力。
3. 剑桥英语考试: 如CPE（剑桥高级英语证书）等，写作部分的分值会根据具体考试的评分标准而定，但通常是总分的一部分。
4. 美国大学入学考试: 如SAT和ACT，这些考试中的写作部分通常是可选的，分值也会根据考试的具体评分标准而定。
5. 中国大学英语四六级考试(CET-4/6): 四六级考试的写作部分通常占总分的一定比例，具体分值会根据考试的评分标准而定。
6. 英国大学入学考试: 如A-Level英语考试，写作部分的分值会根据不同的试卷和任务而有所不同。
请注意，不同的考试机构和不同的考试类型可能会有不同的评分标准和分值分配。
考生应该根据自己参加的具体考试来了解作文部分的分值。
雅思考试大精选作文范文格式3篇
雅思考试大精选作文范文格式3篇篇一：雅思考试大精选作文范文格式【简介】：Ｓomepeoplepreferplanningforthefuturewhileothersarguethatwesh ouldfocusonthepresent.ＷhatisyouropinionＧivereasonsforyouranswerandincludeanyrelevantexamp Ｓome people prefer planning for the future while others argue that we should focus on the present. Ｗhat is your opinion Ｇive reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.真习题大意：有人认为应该计划将来，也有人认为重点就是现在。
你同意哪一种想法请说出你的道理，并却从个人的知识或经验中，举出例子来证明。
Ｅxample Ｗriting:Ｔhe present is where everything begins and there is no time like the present. Ｗithout being prisoners of the past, winners prefer working in the changing present toward the unpredictable future. Ｔhe trouble with some people is that they are planning only for the unforeseeable time to nete and not facing the reality now.Ｐaradoxically, the future is now. Ｉt is more realisticto regard life as an awareness of the present rather than a prediction beyond knowledge. Ｓince the future is anybody's guess, "one today is worth two tomorrows," to quote Ｂenjamin Ｆranklin. Ｔherefore, the way we live and the way we work ought to keep in step with the present leading to the future. Ｔhe logic may be that we can only learn from the past, and on the other hand the future does not affect us now as much as does the present. Ｉt also makes sense that the way to plan tomorrow is to enjoy living and working as wisely and beautifully today as possible.Ｏur argument for focusing on today may as well be based on the fact that the present does not sit still for a portrait, but is changing constantly. Ｃhange being the law of life, concentrating our mind on what is happening in the present is probably more true to life than dreaming of the future. Ｉt means that life for us today is always beneting and never being. Ｏbviously, today has its own problems to be solved, so there is no need to be over troubled about the future. Ａccordingly, it is better not to foresee the future but beconcerned about taking care of the present. Ｉt is one thing to prefer planning for the future, but it is quite another to control the change that follows soon enough.Ｆocusing on the present is more important than merely planning for the future because right now is one of the moments we are influencing our future. Ｐractically, we should see the future in the present which carries more weight in real life. Ｉt stands to reason that the future actually begins now.篇二：雅思写作大精选作文范文格式智课网ＩＥＬＴＳ备考资料雅思写作大精选作文范文格式摘要：雅思写作大精选作文范文格式，小马过河又为大家带来福利啦，在备考雅思写作的时候是不是很想多看多读一些好的大精选作文范文格式呢，今天小编就为大家带来了雅思写作大精选作文范文格式，希望考鸭们都能下载学习哦。
雅思Simon写作大小范文(高清PDF解析使用经验)
雅思Simon写作大小范文（高清PDF解析使用经验）我来讲一下我的学习方法:写作我应该是比较有发言权的。
网上五花八门的雅思写作教程一大堆，别用了这个换那个，把思维全搞乱了，只需要认准一个，一开始先把自己习惯的写作思维方式定下来，后面就只用积累素材就好了。
雅思作文真的不是像洪水猛兽一样可怕的东西。
我全程用的是雅思前考官 Simon 的写作结构和idea第一步，去看他的simon writing，了解一下雅思写作从头到位到底是什么结构，该如何构思，在构思过后该怎么下笔才能让整篇文章连接下来。
然后：①大作文：Simon的一篇自编书籍《idea books for IELTS topics》总结了雅思作文24个topic，关于家庭，政府，教育之类的各种话题素材，每个话题都给出了简洁精辟的idea，这些话题一定要一遍遍的过，亲测非常有效！我这次考的题目是“男人和女人之间对家庭和工作有各自分工”，我用的就是他给的Gender role（性别角色）这个topic里的观点。
此外，我分享的资料里面还有他的范文，我希望大家在读他的范文的时候不要去死记硬背，要去看里面可以模仿和运用的词汇和短语（比如“持续增长”这个词，可以用growing代替continues to increase），Simon的表达和用词非常地道，这些词汇都是可以用来学习在写作里面是要加分的哦！他还有28篇流传很久的经典范文，涵盖了几乎所有的题型，我建议是先不要看范文自己对着题目先写，最后在用范文对比看自己的薄弱点在哪里。
切记不要忘记了他的素材技巧书的24个话题，写的时候去翻前面提到的Simon的idea，看过idea之后再去写，你会发现和自己之前比起来有质的飞跃。
准备一个专门的作文本，每次自己写完之后对照Simon写的把自己的句型和词汇用的不好的都记下来，等复习的时候可以及时发现自己的缺点。
当然我们有时候很难完全自己发现问题，可以去找专门的雅思老师给你修改作文，不是说每篇都得改，你可以根据个人情况自己决定。
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雅思(ielts)写作：雅思大作文9分范文分析
中国人写的雅思作文有结构但语言不够地道；nativespeaker写的文章够地道，但不够雅思！因此，市面上总找不到“完美”的雅思例文。
此次，我特别邀请我的美国朋友（同样研究和教授雅思）“按照我的要求”写了一些文章，这里逐一贴出来，让大家分享一下，呵呵。
Childrenwhogrowupinfamilieswhichareshortofmoneyarebetterpreparedt odealwiththeproblemsofadultlifethanchildrenwhoarebroughtupbywealthypa rents.Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagree?
Somefeelthatthechildrenoflowincomefamiliesarebetterequippedtodeal withdifficultiesp osedbythe‘realworld’whentheygrowupandtheyalsobelie vetheprivilegedchildrenofwealthyfamiliesarelessfittodealwiththesediff iculties.Theimplicationsandveracityofthisargumentseemself-
evident,butinfactrequirecloserexamination.（58words）
点评：1+1’模式，最后1句为主题句。
此段的主题句稍微有点特殊，它的确否定了前面所提到的观点，从而表达出了自己的观点，此外还引出了下文。
特别是最后半句：butinfactrequirecloserexamination，感觉是在抛砖引玉。
Thepopularwisdomisthatchildrenofpoorerfamilieslearnearlyonthevalu eofabuck,andarethusnaturallybettersuitedtostretchingmoneywhentimesget toughinadulthood.Inversely,thechildrenofwealthyfamilies,thosebornwith asilverspoonintheirmouths,arebelievedtobecompletelyignorantofthevalue ofmoney,havinghadeverythingprovidedforthemintheiryouthandoftentimeser roneouslyexpectingthesamesituationinadulthood.Theyarebelievedtobepron etooverspendingandfinancialirresponsibility.Thisbelief,thoughlogical, overlooksonekeypointwhichis,ofcourse,education.（100words）点评：1’+3模式，第1句是主题句。
请注意，从此段的内容来看，这是个让步段（即分析自己并不赞成的观点）。
虽然4段论的作文的主体段是两面讨论，但是本人还是喜欢这样的写作，即主体段的观点还是有侧重的，把让步段放在前面，最后1句话引出下一段，这样过度地很自然，而且自己的观点也比较明确！
Thebasisofthisargumentis,ofcourse,knowingthevalueofmoney,andtheid eathatchildrenofthepoorknowthis,andthoseofthewealthydonot.Whothough,i sinabetterpositiontoteachtheirchildrenthevalueofmoney;someoneskilledi nearningandkeepingit,thewealthyparent,orsomeonewhocannotseemtoacquire it,thepoorparent?Bothwealthyandpoorchildrenareequallylikelytoacquirea
neducationinmoney,whetheritisformal,orintheschoolofhardknocks.Convers ely,bothchildrenareaslikelytoignorethiseducation.（101words）点评：这段的内容感觉写得不够直接，还是在分析对方观点的漏洞！请注意，前面让步段已经这么写过了，那么这一段是正面地论证自己的观点，这样从内容上来说更convincing一点！此外，需要说明的是，大家发现作者的内容还是有一定深度，但是这是要有一定的英语功底才行的！如果英语功底不行的话，建议内容不要写太深，因为那样容易造成考官看不懂你在说什么！
Apoorchildmaybelievethatonecangetalong,ifnotaseasily,withoutwealt h.Awealthychildmaybewelltrainedbyaparentsteepedintheknowledgeofmoneym anagement;thekeytodevelopingthisskilliseducation.
点评：最后一段有点像是提出解决这个问题的办法，即education.它没有像传统的结尾段那样简单的重申自己的观点。
总结之总结：
全文的观点有待揣摩，作者很明显是不赞成题目的说法，即Childrenwhogrowupinfamilieswhichareshortofmoneyarebetterpreparedtodea lwiththeproblemsofadultlifethanchildrenwhoarebroughtupbywealthyparent s.但是作者自己是更偏向穷人家的孩子呢，还是富人家的孩子呢？！根据文章来看，作者是中立，他所看重的是他们所接受的教育。
Inotherwords，整篇文章又是一次中立的写法。
在雅思考试中，这种写法经常使用，还是非常实用的，大家可以学习一下。
此外，文章中有很多好词好句，特别是长句，值得模仿一下。
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