2020雅思写作语料库教育类：是否同意老师的影响比父母大.doc

2020 雅思写作语料库教育类：是否同意老师的影响比

父母大

【教育类】

2020 年 11 月 7 日雅思写作回忆B卷( 小鹏哥版 )

For schoolchildren, their teachers have more influence on

their intelligence and social development than their parents.

To what extent do you agree or disagree? 是否同意在孩子们的智力和社交方面，老师的影响比父母大?

【薛鹏点评】恒热教育，原题重现。

【雅思题库】

Once children start school, teachers have more influence

on their intellectual and social development than parents do.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?孩子们上学后，在学习

水平和社交水平的发展方面，老师比父母的影响更大，你在多大水准

上同意这个观点 ?(2008 年 9 月 6 日雅思题目 )

【薛鹏点评】语意升格

【头脑风暴导言】

父母是孩子们的启蒙教师，孩子们是父母们的一面镜子。因为是

骨血，所以，父母们本能之爱在孩子们的知识拓展和社交技能方面影

响颇深。不过，一旦幼童开始步入课堂，尤其是开始接受中小学教育

之后，教育者在他们的学业、社交、人生观等方面的影响也许更加显著。

【作家立场】比之父母，老师对于孩子的智力开发和社交培养影

响更加深刻，但是，我们不能忽视父母们在孩子们成长中的作用。

【思路拓展】

① 为何老师对于孩子们的智力开发和社交技能的培养影响深刻：

1.确实，老师有助于孩子们的智力开发及学业的优异，因为老师们通常精通专业知识，了解教育常识，能够总结学科精华，所以，老

师们的教育更加高效。同时，一个学生绝大部分时间是呆在学校里，

所以，老师的教育会对学生的学业有潜移默化的影响。

2.另外，老师在培养孩子的社交技能方面也能够发挥重要的作用，教育孩子们如何以准确的方式和周围的同学交往及交流，鼓励孩子们扩大交友圈，是老师们的职责所在。

②为何父母对于孩子们的智力开发和社交技能的培养亦有影响：

1.父母也能够影响孩子们的智力成长，有些父母本身就是优秀的教师，其专业优势能够在一定特定的领域让孩子成长更快。

2.父母也能够影响孩子们的社交技能。常言道：父母是的老师，父母是孩子们的第一个老师，所以是孩子们效仿的对象，父母的言行

举止对于孩子如何与人交往是起到了潜移默化的影响。同时，因为父

母本能地爱孩子，所以会有意识地教育孩子行为处事。在处理人际关

系方面，多数父母会教育孩子们尊敬长辈，团结同龄人等。所以，不

能忽视父母对于孩子成长的影响。

【总结立场】

我认为，父母和老师对于孩子的发展都有长远的影响。比之父母，老师对于孩子的智力和社交水平的培养具有更加深刻的影响，尤其是当孩子们开始接受中小学教育之后。

【范文赏析】

【首段】背景介绍+争议焦点+作家立场

’s Numerous people will exert a profound impact on one

character-training，mental growth and future life. Parents

are our initial teachers, yet, educators will also be playing

an increasingly crucial r ole in one’s academic study and social life. An opinion springs up that teachers impose a far

more significant influence on one’s study and social development compared with parents. Basically, I side with the standpoint ，however，the impact of parents can never be

ignored.

【解析】

1. Parents are our initial teachers 父母是我最初的老。

2. An opinion springs up that ??有人??

3. impose a far more significant influence on ??有更加的影响

【二段】支持原点

Granted, some convincing arguments could be easily

explored to justify that teachers exert a noticeable effect on

those who are in the formative years in terms of social skills

and intelligence development. For a start, as for students,

since the majority of their time is spent in the classroom,

thereby, teachers will exert a subtle influence on their

cultivation of study habits or learning methods. Further ，

teachers usually excel in professional knowledge ，summarize the core of knowledge and have deeper insight into

the common sense of education ，thus ，they can help students

excel academically

Last, it is the obligation of educators to guide students

how to communicate and associate with peers in a proper way.

More precisely, one ’s commutation skills could be fostered and one’s suitable social ability could be developed with the assistance and guidance of teachers.

【解析】

1. exert a noticeable effect on ??v 于??有著的影响

2. those who are in the formative years n 成中的年人

3. exert a subtle influence on their cultivation of study

habits or learning methods v于他学和方法的培养有潜

移默化的影响

4. help students excel academically v 助学生精通学

5. it is the obligation of educators to ??v 做??是教育者所在

【二段】步原点的局限性

Nonetheless ，it is rather groundless simply believe that

parents have no roles to play in children ’s sociability and

academic performance. First ，parents, in most cases, know

better about their children and are instinctively willing to

devote their love to the development of their children. In

this sense, some talented or knowledgeable parents could successfully help children achieve more in academic study.

Also ， almost every parent will educate their child to

respect the old and unite the peers. In light of this

statement ，parents impose a marked effect on their

children ’s social development.

【解析】

1.Nonetheless ，it is rather groundless simply believe

that ??不，??是相当肤浅的

2. in light of this statement v基于的法

3.impose a marked effect on ?? v 于??施加著的影响【尾段】再次亮

明点

In a nutshell ，my view is that under no circumstances can we ignore the indispensable roles parents could play in their

children ’s development. Virtually, both teachers and

educators exert profound influence on one ’s intelligence and social kills. However, once schooling starts, teachers will have more influence.

【解析】

However, once schooling starts, teachers will have more influence.一旦开始接受中小学教育，老的影响更加著。

【全文点】

本篇多年之前的旧文，精修改之后和童鞋分享。小哥像儿自

己的羽毛一惜着自己的每篇文本。惜墨如金，字斟句酌，希望每一次

的分享都能者来一点快、启迪和收。

【小哥料】

1. exert a noticeable effect on ??v有著的影响

2. impose a marked effect on ??v 有著的影响

3. exert a subtle influence on v 于??施加了潜移默化的

影响

4. respect the old v 尊敬老人

5. unite the peers v 同人

6. campus activities n 校园活

7. it is certainly true that = a h ard truth is that ??

是事

https://www.360docs.net/doc/5e6209077.html,munication skills ，group awareness and co-operation

ability n 交流技能，体意及合作水平

9.make it easy for him or her to get along with others

when he or she grows up.使他在大的候很容易和人交往

10.parents are generally most concerned about the growth

of their children父母通常更加注重孩子的成。

11.Most children tend to unconsciously imitate

everything.多数孩子会无意地模仿父母。

12.Most parts of children education are virtually beyond

parents ’ reaches. 孩子的学父母无法教授。

13.Most of teachers are usually adept at

professional knowledge 大部分老精通知。

【解析】 are usually adept at = excel in = be good at v

熟于，精通于??

14. have deeper insight into the common sense of

education v了解教育的常

15. summarize the core of knowledge v 学科的精

16. ?? exert a far more profound influence on students

’academic study v于学生的学影响更深

17.Parents, in most cases, know better about their

children and are instinctively willing to devote their love

to the development of their children.父母最了解孩子，本能地最爱孩子。

【解析】 instinctively adv本能地

18.how to associate and communicate with peers in

a proper way v 如何和同龄人以恰当的方式交往和交流

19.Students ’ social skills could also be greatly

affected by those teachers because they take them as role

models 学生们的社交技能会受到老师的影响，因为孩子们拿老师当成

偶像。

20.Both teachers and educators exert profound influence

on one ’s intelligence and social kills.父母和老师对于孩子的发展都有长远的影响。

作者介绍：

新东方网专栏作家：薛鹏(@雅思小鹏哥) ，吉林大学外国语言学及应用语言学硕士。17 年英语教学经验(7 年新东方雅思托福SAT教学经历 ) ，前长春新东方功勋教师，多次培训出雅思和托福高分学员 ( 雅

思7.5 分，托福 29 分) 。

爱生活，爱运动，爱音乐电影，爱旅行美食，爱读书摄影，更爱

英语教学。 20 岁登上英语讲台，主讲英语万词速记课程。熟悉 GRE、TOEFL、SAT、TEM、CET等各级别词汇教学。

大一时即在报刊杂志上主持“英语学习系列谈”以及“薛鹏教你

学单词”等专栏。 2006 年获得“外研社 / 朗文杯”新概念背诵大赛吉林省赛区大学成人组冠军，全国总决赛大学成人组二等奖。

对于各类写作课程有精深研究，授课方式行云流水，妙语连珠，知识底蕴深厚，对学员极具有启迪性和激励性。

教学理念： Education is not the filling of a pail but the

lighting of a fire.(教育不是注满一桶水，而是点燃一把火)