如何在2019高考英语作文中增加细节技巧(共19张PPT)
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公开课 如何在高考英语作文中增加细节PPT精选文档21页PPT
然权力是一头固执的熊，可是金 子可以 拉着它 的鼻子 走。— —莎士 比
谢谢
11、越是没有本领的就越加自命不凡。——邓拓 12、越是无能的人，越喜欢挑剔别人的错儿。——爱尔兰 13、知人者智，自知者明。胜人者有力，自胜者强。——老子 14、意志坚强的人能把世界放在手中像泥块一样任意揉捏。——歌德 15、最具挑战性的挑战莫过于提升自我。——迈克尔·F·斯特利
公开课 如何在高考英语作文中增加细节 PPT精选文档
1、合法而稳定的权力在使用得当时很 少遇到 抵抗。 ——塞 ·约翰 逊 2、权力会使人渐渐失去温厚善良的美 德。— —伯克
3、最大限度地行使权力总是令人反感 ；权力 不易确 定之处 始终存 在着危 险。— —塞·约翰逊 4、权力会奴化一切。——塔西佗
谢谢
11、越是没有本领的就越加自命不凡。——邓拓 12、越是无能的人，越喜欢挑剔别人的错儿。——爱尔兰 13、知人者智，自知者明。胜人者有力，自胜者强。——老子 14、意志坚强的人能把世界放在手中像泥块一样任意揉捏。——歌德 15、最具挑战性的挑战莫过于提升自我。——迈克尔·F·斯特利
公开课 如何在高考英语作文中增加细节 PPT精选文档
1、合法而稳定的权力在使用得当时很 少遇到 抵抗。 ——塞 ·约翰 逊 2、权力会使人渐渐失去温厚善良的美 德。— —伯克
3、最大限度地行使权力总是令人反感 ；权力 不易确 定之处 始终存 在着危 险。— —塞·约翰逊 4、权力会奴化一切。——塔西佗
高中英语写作提升之如何增加细节 课件(共21张ppt)
crowds. Only in this way can you keep yourself far away from
学会分析优秀的范文 the virus. More importantly, you must wear protective clothing or at least mask when you have to go out, as the protective
job in a foreign company.
3.__S_i_n_c_e_/A__s_/B__e_c_a_u_s_e__I_h_a_v_e__t_h_e__e_x_p_e_r_ie_n_c_e__o_f_____ ___l_o_s_in_g__m__y_p__u_rs_e__，______(由于我有过丢钱包的经历）
Dear Tim,
补充原因
Learning that the COVID 19 is also spreading in America
and you are asking for advice since Chinese have done quite
well in fighting in this battle, I am writing this letter to offer you
二、补全前因后果或目的
2.补充前因后果或目的
1. K__n_o_w_in_g__th_a_t_y_o_u__s_h_o_w_g_r_e_a_t_in_t_e_re_s_t_i_n_C__h_in_e_s_e____ __tr_a_d_it_io_n_a_l_c_u_lt_u_r_e_, (知道你对中国传统文化很感兴趣,）
Looking forward to your early reply.
高考英语写作技巧 第1课时 增加细节,让文章丰满起来
abroad _________ (我们不仅仅能阅读国内外的新闻 ), but also get
information, send emails and attend online schools. She speaks perfect 2． Laura is a standard American style. _____________________
American English (她说一口完美的美式英语), and that' s __________________
why I am crazy about her.
3． However, it seems people are unaware of the negative
For example, effects of mobile phones on communication. ____________ many people begin to pay less and less attention to __________________________________________________
优化点三 内容比他人丰
正文是文章的核心部分，素有“猪肚美填”之说。词数达 标、内容充实、结构连贯、语意顺畅是五档作文必不可少的几 大要素。为了不只是简单地翻译或者仅仅完成题目所给条目的 指定内容，为了让表达逻辑有序，本部分将从两方面给予优化 指导。
第1课时 增加细节，让文章丰满起来
在英语书面表达中，增加细节是必不可少 的，细节可有效串联起各个要点，让文章显得丰 满、圆润，读起来朗朗上口，不干瘪生涩。细节 是需要构思的，细节是需要创意的，可尝试用以 下5个技法来增加细节。
[即时演练]
高考英语二轮复习：书面表达中增加细节的七大技巧(素材)
高考英语复习备考：高考书面表达中增加细节的七大技巧全国卷的书面表达所提供的要点信息较为简单，但同时也指出“可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯”。
这种灵活的命题方式既给了考生较大的发挥空间，又对考生提出了更高要求。
但写作时，有些考生仅仅简单翻译所给信息点，文章就显得单调乏味，字数不足，达不到交际的目的。
还有些考生信口开河，信马由缰，结果详略不当，偏离主题。
此时，我们应该合理拓展显性信息，运用以下技巧挖掘隐性信息，才能做到适当增加细节。
一、增加原因参加中文学习班。
Here are a few suggestions. First，it is important to take a Chinese course，as you'll be able to learn from the teacher and practice with your fellow students. 以下是几点建议。
首先，上汉语课很重要，因为你能向老师学习，和同学们一起练习。
二、增加结果赞赏该报优点：①兼顾国内外新闻；②介绍名人成功故事First，it covers both national and international news so that，by simply turning the pages，I can learn all important things that have happened during the week. Equally attractive are the success stories of world-famous people，which help me understand how a person can work hard to make the world a better place.首先，它报道了国内和国际新闻，以至于仅仅翻一下页面，我就能了解本周发生的所有重要的事情。
高中英语写作提升之如何增加细节 课件(共21张PPT)
二、补全前因后果或目的
2.补充前因后果或目的
1. K__n_o_w_in_g__th_a_t_y_o_u__s_h_o_w_g_r_e_a_t_in_t_e_re_s_t_i_n_C__h_in_e_s_e____ __tr_a_d_it_io_n_a_l_c_u_lt_u_r_e_, (知道你对中国传统文化很感兴趣,）
I am writing to invite you to participate in this activity.
2._In__o_r_d_e_r_t_o__g_e_t_s_o_m__e__p_ra__c_ti_c_a_l _e_x_p_e_r_ie__n_c_e_,_______
(为了获得一些实践经验) I'm planning to take a part-time
I can feel how anxious Mr Steven will be now.
暂停3分钟
Because of the experience of...
三、适当将写作内容具体化
3.适当将写作内容具体化
1.The activity will be held
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我擅长于运动。
, such as A，B and C/ so on.
, including A，B and C/ so on.
I am good at sports, such as swimming, playing basketball and running/ so on. I am good at sports, including swimming, playing basketball and running/ so on.
2019高中高考英语写作指导(共19张PPT)
thinking over. 4. What he did yesterday was dissatisfactory.
What he did yesterday, by no means, was
satisfactory. 5. There is little hope of winning.
There is little, if any, hope of winning. 第七页，共十九页。
the water is too cold. 2. His words are right.
His words, to some extent, are right.
3. The question deserves thinking over.
The question, from my point of view, deserves
opportunities for promotion. I am in favor of equal rights for women,
especially the right to compete with men for jobs on equal terms, the right to get the same pay as
2. 你如此建议的理由；
3. 你对于执行此方案的建议。
第六页，共十九页。
*用好插入语
1. There are people who will say that the water is too cold. There are people, I am sure, who will say that
volunteer can you gain a free stay. It sounds great! Your arrival will add colors to the atmosphere there. On the other hand, during our
What he did yesterday, by no means, was
satisfactory. 5. There is little hope of winning.
There is little, if any, hope of winning. 第七页，共十九页。
the water is too cold. 2. His words are right.
His words, to some extent, are right.
3. The question deserves thinking over.
The question, from my point of view, deserves
opportunities for promotion. I am in favor of equal rights for women,
especially the right to compete with men for jobs on equal terms, the right to get the same pay as
2. 你如此建议的理由；
3. 你对于执行此方案的建议。
第六页，共十九页。
*用好插入语
1. There are people who will say that the water is too cold. There are people, I am sure, who will say that
volunteer can you gain a free stay. It sounds great! Your arrival will add colors to the atmosphere there. On the other hand, during our
如何增加细节+课件-2023届高三英语一轮复习应用文写作
1)添加修饰成分使文章更丰满。 (运用更富内涵的词，短语或句型） 2)变换更高级和丰富的句式。如：定语从句，独立主格结构，非谓语等
2. 补加语句: Specific examples，Causes/ purposes， results/meaning，Ways/conditions
1)列举实例来补充说明。 2）增加心理描写及背景渲染。 3）结尾发挥，写你的感受，评价，愿望，倡议等。
Discuss the principles
1.which information should be extended(哪些信息需要扩展)
2. from what aspects to extend the details(从哪方面扩展)
3. extend effective details (有效扩展) 4. know the logic of the details(逻辑性)
3. 增添过渡：如， besides, meanwhile，in brief, on the contrary, as a result , on condition that…
Instance exercise:
（2018 全国卷I） 假定你是李华,你的新西兰朋友Terry将去
中国朋友家做客,发邮件向你询问有关习俗。 请你回复邮件,内容包括： 1.到达时间2.合适的礼物3.餐桌礼仪 注意:1.词数100左右；
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
Apply the rules to writing!
Dear Terry, How are you doing? In your last letter, you asked me about being a guest to a Chinese friend’s home. Now, I am writing to inform you of some relevant details. To begin with, according to our tradition, you are supposed to arrive early, so that you can help the family prepare the dinner, which is meaningful and interesting. Besides, you’d better bring some gifts, like a book or a Chinese knot. What’s more, when you are enjoying the meal, you need to avoid making noises while chewing food. Hopefully, these suggestions would be helpful for you. I have the confidence that you will have a great time. Best wishes!
2. 补加语句: Specific examples，Causes/ purposes， results/meaning，Ways/conditions
1)列举实例来补充说明。 2）增加心理描写及背景渲染。 3）结尾发挥，写你的感受，评价，愿望，倡议等。
Discuss the principles
1.which information should be extended(哪些信息需要扩展)
2. from what aspects to extend the details(从哪方面扩展)
3. extend effective details (有效扩展) 4. know the logic of the details(逻辑性)
3. 增添过渡：如， besides, meanwhile，in brief, on the contrary, as a result , on condition that…
Instance exercise:
（2018 全国卷I） 假定你是李华,你的新西兰朋友Terry将去
中国朋友家做客,发邮件向你询问有关习俗。 请你回复邮件,内容包括： 1.到达时间2.合适的礼物3.餐桌礼仪 注意:1.词数100左右；
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
Apply the rules to writing!
Dear Terry, How are you doing? In your last letter, you asked me about being a guest to a Chinese friend’s home. Now, I am writing to inform you of some relevant details. To begin with, according to our tradition, you are supposed to arrive early, so that you can help the family prepare the dinner, which is meaningful and interesting. Besides, you’d better bring some gifts, like a book or a Chinese knot. What’s more, when you are enjoying the meal, you need to avoid making noises while chewing food. Hopefully, these suggestions would be helpful for you. I have the confidence that you will have a great time. Best wishes!
高考英语书面表达增加细节的五大技巧
高考英语书面表达增加细节的五大技巧罗雪梅李思灯纵观近五年（2015—2019年）高考英语全国卷书面表达，都是书信体裁，基本以文字提纲的方式呈现，要点明确，任务具体，结构清晰。
试题的“注意”部分要求考生“可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯”。
这种灵活的命题方式既给了考生较大的发挥空间，又对考生提出了更高要求。
高考英语作文评分标准第五档（很好）：（21-25分），涵盖了如下特点：完全完成了试题规定的任务：（1）覆盖所有内容要点;（2）应用了较多的语法结构和词汇;（3）语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致，具备较强的语言运用能力;（4）有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑，完全达到了预期的写作目的。
而在考试中，有些考生无话可说，仅仅简单翻译所给信息点，文章显得单调乏味，字数不足;有些考生信口开河，随意发挥，导致详略不当，偏离主题。
因此，如何合理有效地增加细节是书面表达题得分的关键。
下面我们以历年高考真题为例谈谈增加细节的五大技巧。
一、增加交际功能性语言书信体是一种具有很强交际功能的应用文体，通常有明确的目的，或为了增进感情，或为了获取信息，或寻求帮助等，注重实用性，语言朴实简洁，结构相对稳定。
为了创造准确、实用、真实的文本语境，我们可以在书信的开头和结尾适当添加交际功能性的语言。
如围绕作者和读者之间的关系，添加得体的交际用语。
1. 收信人和写信人是朋友关系。
在书信的开头可以添加问候语How are you doing these days？或根据题目提供的语境增加合适的寒暄语。
如（2017年全国I卷）：假定你是李华，正在教你的英国朋友Leslie学习汉语。
请你写封邮件告知下次上课的计划。
可以增加以下细节：Dear Leslie，How are you doing today？ I am very glad that youve been making great progress in your Chinese learning. Now I am writing to inform you of our course schedule of our next class.通过题目中的情景“正在教你的英国朋友学习汉语”，补充与之相关的交际话语——你的中文进步很大，自然地引入写信的目的，符合交际实际，使信件显得自然得体。
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How to add reasonable details to your article
假定你是李华。上周日在地铁站捡到了英 国人Steven 的护照。请你用英语给你市某英 文报社编辑写一封信，内容包括：
1.简述时间过程; 2.交代护照相关信息; 3. 委托报社刊登招领启事.
注意: 1.词数100左右 2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
4 增加结果或者是效果
(1)I think it is a good chance to appreciate local
operas, w__h_i_c_h__w__il_l__s_u_r_e_l_y__h_e__lp__y_o__u__le_a__r_n__m__o_r_e__ ___a_b_o__u_t_C__h__in_e__s_e cu(这ltu必re将.有助于你学到更多的中国文化）
__m__a_k_in__g_i_t_im__p_o_s_s_i_b_le__t_o_u__s_e_. ______________(
变得无法使用)
5.补充功能性（交际性）语言 1____I_w__o_u_ld_g_r_e_a_t_ly_a_p_p_r_e_c_ia_t_e_i_t _if_y_o_u_c_o_u_l_d__
____d_o_m__e_t_h_e_f_a_v_o_ur_._____________（如果 你能帮我这个忙，我将不胜感激
（2）_L_o_o_ki_n_g_f_o_rw__a_rd__to__y_o_u_r _e_a_rl_y_r_e_p_ly_._____ （期待着你的早日回复）
(3 )_I_f_th_e_r_e_i_s_a_n_y_t_h_in_g__I _ca_n__d_o_f_o_r_y_o_u_,____ ____p_le_a_s_e__d_o_n_’t_h_e_s_i_ta_t_e_t_o_le_t_m__e_k_n_o_w__. __ (如果有什么能帮到你的，请不要犹豫告诉我）
3 With caution, I opened the plastic bag, ______________________________.（结果）
4 Last week, I bought an English dictionary from your online bookstore
____________________________________(目的/原因)
practice (add reasonable details）
1.I’m LiHua,___________________. (同位语)
2. I’m writing to ask you to help me find the owner of a passport,___________________. (具 体来源等)
(希望是一位跟我有相同兴趣的女孩).
2.补充前因后果或目的 (1) Knowing that you show great interest in Chinese traditional culture,
___________________________________________ (因为知道你对中国传统文化很感兴趣），I am writing to invite you to participate in this activity.
注意：
1. 词数100左右；
2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
I'm your student Li Hua. I'm applying for a part-time job at a foreign company in my city during the summer vacation. Could you correct the language and the format of the application letter and resume I have written?
3.适当将写作内容具体化
（1) The activity will be held from 9 a.m. to 10 ___a_._m_._o__n_A__p_ri_l _1_1__i_n_C__la_s_s_r_o_o_m___5_0_1_.__________
(具体时间、地点）
(2 )I know the owner is Steven f_r_o_m__E_n_g_la_n_d_,_a_g_e_d__3_8_, _m_a_r_ri_e_d_. (相关身份信 息)
Dear Peter,
I'm glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to learn Chinese well.
Here are a few suggestions. First, it is important to take a Chinese course, as you'll be able to learn from the teachers and practice with your fellow students. Then, it also helps to watch TV and read books, newspapers, and magazines in Chinese whenever possible. Besides, it should be a good idea to learn and sing Chinese songs, because by doing so you'll learn and remember Chinese words more easily. In addition, You can also make more Chinese friends. They will tell you a lot about China and help you learn Chinese.
Try writing to me in Chinese next time.
Best wishes
Li Hua
(2016全国课标卷)假定你是李华，暑假想去一 家外贸公司兼职，已写好申请书和个人简历 （resume）。给外教Ms Jenkins写信，请她修 改所附材料的文字和格式（format）。
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notice on your newspaper to tell him about the
_(_3_)_S___in__c__e__I__h__a__v_e___t_h__e__e__x__p_e__r_i_e__n__c_e___o__f_l_o__s_i_n__g___m__y___I_D______ card, (由于我有过丢身份证的经历），I can feel how anxious Mr Steven will be now.
一个问题
主体信息写完往往只有60-70个字，不 足100词，怎么弥补词数？
需要“适当增加细节，以使行文连贯”。
Dear editor,
同位语
I’m LiHua, a high school student in our city. I’m
writing to tell you a piece of urgent information. I
1. 增加同位语 2. 补全前因后果或目的 3. 适当将写作内容具体化 4. 写出个人感受、评价或后果 5. 充功能性（交际性）语言
What kind of information can often be added to your article?
1 增加同位语
1 I am LiHua, _C__h_ai_r_m_a_n__o_f _th_e_S_t_u_d_e_n_ts_’_U_n_i_o_n_o_f_m__y__
注意：1. 词数：100左右。 2. 可适当增加 细节，以使行文连贯。 3. 开头语已为你写好.
Dear Peter,
I'm glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to learn Chinese well.
Here are a few suggestions. First, it is important to take a Chinese course. Then, it also helps to watch TV and read books, newspapers, and magazines in Chinese. Besides, it should be a good idea to learn and sing Chinese songs. In addition, You can also make more Chinese friends.
picked up a passport last Sunday in the subway
station when I was taking a ride home. There was
nobody around when I found it on a waiting bench.
The owner of it is Steven who comes from England.
(2)We can set out early, so that we can have more _ti_m_e__t_o_r_e_a_d__a_n_d__s_e_le__c_t _b_o_o_k_s__________(以便我
假定你是李华。上周日在地铁站捡到了英 国人Steven 的护照。请你用英语给你市某英 文报社编辑写一封信，内容包括：
1.简述时间过程; 2.交代护照相关信息; 3. 委托报社刊登招领启事.
注意: 1.词数100左右 2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
4 增加结果或者是效果
(1)I think it is a good chance to appreciate local
operas, w__h_i_c_h__w__il_l__s_u_r_e_l_y__h_e__lp__y_o__u__le_a__r_n__m__o_r_e__ ___a_b_o__u_t_C__h__in_e__s_e cu(这ltu必re将.有助于你学到更多的中国文化）
__m__a_k_in__g_i_t_im__p_o_s_s_i_b_le__t_o_u__s_e_. ______________(
变得无法使用)
5.补充功能性（交际性）语言 1____I_w__o_u_ld_g_r_e_a_t_ly_a_p_p_r_e_c_ia_t_e_i_t _if_y_o_u_c_o_u_l_d__
____d_o_m__e_t_h_e_f_a_v_o_ur_._____________（如果 你能帮我这个忙，我将不胜感激
（2）_L_o_o_ki_n_g_f_o_rw__a_rd__to__y_o_u_r _e_a_rl_y_r_e_p_ly_._____ （期待着你的早日回复）
(3 )_I_f_th_e_r_e_i_s_a_n_y_t_h_in_g__I _ca_n__d_o_f_o_r_y_o_u_,____ ____p_le_a_s_e__d_o_n_’t_h_e_s_i_ta_t_e_t_o_le_t_m__e_k_n_o_w__. __ (如果有什么能帮到你的，请不要犹豫告诉我）
3 With caution, I opened the plastic bag, ______________________________.（结果）
4 Last week, I bought an English dictionary from your online bookstore
____________________________________(目的/原因)
practice (add reasonable details）
1.I’m LiHua,___________________. (同位语)
2. I’m writing to ask you to help me find the owner of a passport,___________________. (具 体来源等)
(希望是一位跟我有相同兴趣的女孩).
2.补充前因后果或目的 (1) Knowing that you show great interest in Chinese traditional culture,
___________________________________________ (因为知道你对中国传统文化很感兴趣），I am writing to invite you to participate in this activity.
注意：
1. 词数100左右；
2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
I'm your student Li Hua. I'm applying for a part-time job at a foreign company in my city during the summer vacation. Could you correct the language and the format of the application letter and resume I have written?
3.适当将写作内容具体化
（1) The activity will be held from 9 a.m. to 10 ___a_._m_._o__n_A__p_ri_l _1_1__i_n_C__la_s_s_r_o_o_m___5_0_1_.__________
(具体时间、地点）
(2 )I know the owner is Steven f_r_o_m__E_n_g_la_n_d_,_a_g_e_d__3_8_, _m_a_r_ri_e_d_. (相关身份信 息)
Dear Peter,
I'm glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to learn Chinese well.
Here are a few suggestions. First, it is important to take a Chinese course, as you'll be able to learn from the teachers and practice with your fellow students. Then, it also helps to watch TV and read books, newspapers, and magazines in Chinese whenever possible. Besides, it should be a good idea to learn and sing Chinese songs, because by doing so you'll learn and remember Chinese words more easily. In addition, You can also make more Chinese friends. They will tell you a lot about China and help you learn Chinese.
Try writing to me in Chinese next time.
Best wishes
Li Hua
(2016全国课标卷)假定你是李华，暑假想去一 家外贸公司兼职，已写好申请书和个人简历 （resume）。给外教Ms Jenkins写信，请她修 改所附材料的文字和格式（format）。
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心理 感受
notice on your newspaper to tell him about the
_(_3_)_S___in__c__e__I__h__a__v_e___t_h__e__e__x__p_e__r_i_e__n__c_e___o__f_l_o__s_i_n__g___m__y___I_D______ card, (由于我有过丢身份证的经历），I can feel how anxious Mr Steven will be now.
一个问题
主体信息写完往往只有60-70个字，不 足100词，怎么弥补词数？
需要“适当增加细节，以使行文连贯”。
Dear editor,
同位语
I’m LiHua, a high school student in our city. I’m
writing to tell you a piece of urgent information. I
1. 增加同位语 2. 补全前因后果或目的 3. 适当将写作内容具体化 4. 写出个人感受、评价或后果 5. 充功能性（交际性）语言
What kind of information can often be added to your article?
1 增加同位语
1 I am LiHua, _C__h_ai_r_m_a_n__o_f _th_e_S_t_u_d_e_n_ts_’_U_n_i_o_n_o_f_m__y__
注意：1. 词数：100左右。 2. 可适当增加 细节，以使行文连贯。 3. 开头语已为你写好.
Dear Peter,
I'm glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to learn Chinese well.
Here are a few suggestions. First, it is important to take a Chinese course. Then, it also helps to watch TV and read books, newspapers, and magazines in Chinese. Besides, it should be a good idea to learn and sing Chinese songs. In addition, You can also make more Chinese friends.
picked up a passport last Sunday in the subway
station when I was taking a ride home. There was
nobody around when I found it on a waiting bench.
The owner of it is Steven who comes from England.
(2)We can set out early, so that we can have more _ti_m_e__t_o_r_e_a_d__a_n_d__s_e_le__c_t _b_o_o_k_s__________(以便我