高三作文评讲

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四、信末结束语常用句型 盼回复：
1. Looking forward to your reply. 2. I am looking forward to your reply. 3. Waiting for your good news.
【审 题】 应用文—建议信 体裁： _________________ 建议信是写信人针对某事向收信人提出的建 议和忠告。建议信有可能是写给个人，就其遇到 的某个问题提出自己的看法和观点，也可能是写 给某个组织机构，就改进其服务提出建议和忠告。
建议信 的框架
(三段式)
首段： 对处境表示理解并给予安慰 或陈述问题，说明写信目的 主体： 提出具体建议 信末： 表示希望采纳建议，并期盼 回复或表达美好祝愿
【审 题】 结构和句意 注意事项： ① 注意与已经给出的开头的衔接； Dear Mary, I’m so glad to hear from you, but ________
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【审 题】 若没给出开头： 1）个人求助 I am glad to hear from you/ have a talk with you. 2）建议征集 I am …, a Senior Three student from+学校. I happened to find your posts on the Internet/ in the news paper.
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四、信末结束语常用句型 望采纳：
1. I hope you will take/ follow/ adopt my advice. 2. Please take good consideration of my advice. 3. I believe you will find these suggestions useful/ helpful/ practical. 4. I would appreciate it if you take my suggestions into consideration/ account. 5. I do hope that my suggestions are helpful for your decision-making anyway.
3. You have asked for my advice about… and I will try to share some suggestions with you.
4. When it comes to…, I have some advice for you. 5. Thanks for trusting me. It is my great pleasure to offer you some conductive suggestions.
3）主动对存在问题提出建议 自我介绍。 陈述存在的问题。Recently, I have found…
【审 题】 注意事项：
结构和句意
① 注意与已经给出的开头的衔接；
若未给出开头则要根据实际情况写；
② 要符合英语书信的基本格式；
③ 基本时态为一般现在时和一般将来时；
④ 建议信的语言特点：简明扼要、目的明确、 具有合理性和说服力，语气委婉； ⑤ 建议的角度和句型要多样化，避免重复。
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三、提出建议的句型
1. 祈使句+and+句子（一般将来时） 2. As for as I am concerned, you’d better do… 3. It is/ seems better for you to do… 4. It would be a good idea if you could… 5. If I were you, I would… 6. You may consider doing… 7. It seems to me that you could do… 8. The best way to do…（目的）is to do …（建议） 9. In my opinion, it would be wise to do… 10.It would be of great benefit for you to do… 11.When it comes to such a situation, I would like to make a suggestion that you (should)…
1、要点齐全 ②
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2、语言表达准确、自然 得体，行文连贯流畅
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3、词汇亮点：使用高级词 汇及过渡词，短语丰富
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4、句式亮点：句式灵活多 变，正确运用较多复杂句 型结构
Dear Mary, I am so glad to hear from you, but I feel so desperately sorry to learn that you are depressed about some extra weight you have put on recently. To begin with, being fat or slim is 动名词作主语 merely a matter personal opinion. With different people “with+of 宾+ 宾补”作原因状 语 holding different views on this subject, there is no agreed standard ideal figure. So there is no need for you to There isfor no an need for sb to do… worry about it. What’s more, it is being fit that is the most 强调句 important for us. Only when you have a healthy body can you “only+ 状语”于句首 live to the fullest. As far as I am concerned, you can do some sports daily by which means you can keep healthy. Most 定语从句 importantly, it is suggested that you should go on a balanced diet主语从句 at the same time, thus doing good to your health. I hope what I said above can be of great help to you. After all, health is to us what water is to life. A I am forward hearing is tolooking B what C is to D. to 表语从句 your good news.
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二、照应材料，陈述问题，表明写信意图的句型
1. I am sorry to learn about your problem and I’d like to give you some advice. 2. I am writhing to express my views concerning…
【构 思】
假如你是李华，你的英国笔友Mary给你写了一封信 求助。她因为最近学习压力大长胖了，时常被同学们嘲笑， 并且长胖也影响了她自己的健康，因此她感到非常郁闷。 请根据下列要求用英语给她回一封信。要点如下： ① ② 1. 同情她的处境并安慰她，胖或瘦没有统一的标准； 2. 强调保持健康的重要性； ③ 3. 给出保持健康的建议。 ⑤ 望采纳，盼回复，表祝愿 ④
【准备词汇、句型】
8、保持健康 •keep fit / healthy 9、……对我们很重要 •… is important/ of great importance to us. •It is important/ significant for sb to do… 10、定期做运动 •do / take some regular physical exercise 11、均衡饮食 •keep a balanced diet 12、早睡早起 •Early to rise and early to bed will contribute to your health.
【准备词汇、句型】
6、胖的 •fat adj. 瘦的 •thin / slim adj. 7、……的统一标准 •a(n) fixed/ unified/ agreed standard to do…/ for…
•There isn’t a standard to tell whether you are fat or slim. •Being fat or slim is a matter of personal opinion. •There is no such standard for an ideal figure.
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一、表示同情和安慰的句型
1. I’m sorry to hear that. 2. I’m so sorry for what happen to you. 3. I’m very sorry to have heard of your present situation that+从句 4. I feel so desperately sorry to learn that you have difficulty/ trouble in doing… 5. You must feel worried and helpless now. 6. Take it easy. 7. Don’t worry too much about it. 8. It is not necessary for you to lose heart. 9. Everyone has his ups and downs, so when things go wrong, don’t feel too bad / worry too much.
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确定要点： 谋篇布局：
分三段 分四段
①② ③④ ⑤ ①② ③ ④ ⑤ ① ②③ ④ ⑤
【准备词汇、句型】
1、为……感到难过 •I feel sorry for your experience/ what you are going through. •I am sorry to hear/ learn / know that +从句. 2、对……感到郁闷 • feel depressed/ upset/ annoyed about… 3、长胖 •put on/ gain some extra weight 4、被嘲笑 •be laughed at 5、影响健康 •affect your health •I am so glad to hear from you but feel sorry to learn that you are now extremely depressed because you put on some extra weight. As a result you are laughed at by your classmates and even your health is affected.
周测（三）作文评讲
By Penny
【作文题目】 假如你是李华，你的英国笔友Mary给你写 了一封信求助。她因为最近学习压力大长胖了， 时常被同学们嘲笑，并且长胖也影响了她自己 的健康，因此她感到非常郁闷。请根据下列要 求用英语给她回一封信。要点如下： 1.同情她的处境并安慰她，胖或瘦没有统一的标 准； 2.强调保持健康的重要性； 3.给出保持健康的建议。 Dear Mary, I’m so glad to hear from you, but ___________