汉译英赏析

外贸英语汉译英赏析

(1)我们希望指出,这里市场竞争激烈,要想成功地销售出去,你方报价须具有吸引力,否则将有困难.

共有五个分句,各自语法地位大不相同.汉语是一种流水句,分句间可以由逗号相连;但英语讲究形式上的相互照应,不同语法功能的从句必须反映在句型和关联词上.这是汉译英中比较重大的一条.也就是说,汉语可以用四个逗号隔出五个分句,但英语不可以,而是要用关联词,从字面形式上体现出其内在关系.

例如, 可以认为, " 指出"的原因在于"竞争",当然也可以表现为"竞争"的逻辑结论是"指出",这样这个句子至少有两种英译形式.

1)We would like to point out that because of the harsh / fierce competition in

our market your quotation must be attractive to the buyers at our end befor e we

could sell successfully your products here.

2) Fierce competition in the local market here means that, it seems obvious to us,

it would be difficult for us to promote successfully the sale of your prod ucts

if your quotation is not attractive to our end-users here.

如果五个句子综合考虑,可以变换角度译为:

We would like to point out that your quotation has to be attractive to the buyers

here, otherwise it would be difficult for us to sell your products in this

compe

titive market.

市场竞争激烈: fierce / harsh / competitive market

(2)如果你方的价格做得开的话,我们相信能成大生意.

像"价格做得开"和"能成大生意",这类熟语,与别的信函中可能出现的专业性比较强的术语一

样,在商务英语中都可以做适当的淡化处理. 也就是说,无论汉语原文是专业色彩较浓的,还是

相对口语化的,用于信函往来的译文都可以使用一般化的句型和词汇,只要说清楚事情就行,不必追求风格上的一致.

a.If your prices are in line, we trust important business can materialize. b,If your prices are attractive, we believe we can make big business.

英文站点:Financing Local Roads Construction:Small Markets Make Big Business.

/economics_research/reports_studies/finance_local_ roads

/financing_road_construction.htm

U.S. Firms Make Big Business With Iraq.

3)很高兴收到你方8月25日询价,根据你方要求,今寄上有插图的目录和明细价目单.

两个逗号,三个分句,两个完整的意思.四种处理译法:

a.处理为一大一小两个简单句

We were very pleased to receive your inquiry of August 25 and enclose our illustrated catalogue and the detailed price-list as you asked.

b,处理为两个句子.

第一句告知来信收到表示感谢,

We are very pleased to receive your inquiry of August 25.

We were very pleased to have received your inquiry of August 25.

第二句根据特定要求采取寄上目录和价单的行动.(汉语原文中省略了主语,英译文中必须有主

语,译文的主语可以是"我"或"我们"或"我公司",这样译文可以是以下的任何一个或其他变体:

I am pleased to enclose our illustrated catalogue and the price-list for your reference.

We are pleased to enclose our illustrated catalogue and the price-list for your

reference.

For your information we are sending you a copy of our illustrated catalogue and

price-list.

We have enclosed our illustrated catalogue and a copy of the detailed price-list for

you.

Our illustrated catalogue and price-list are enclosed for your reference.

Enclosed for your information are our illustrated catalogue and the detailed price-list as you asked.

C,把对方"you"作为译文的主语,这种着眼符合国际信函中比较受重视的you attitude,值得

提倡.这样需要改变谓语用语,也就是由"寄"改为"收".

Enclosed please find our illustrated catalogue and the detailed price-list as you

asked.

You will find in the attachment our illustrated catalogue and the detailed price-list

you asked for.

Would you please check and find our illustrated catalogue and the detailed price-list enclosed.

D,译文主语为"目录".以物为主语在英语中远比汉语中用的多.

The illustrated catalogue and the detailed price-list you asked for have been enclosed.