2016年浙江英语新高考阅卷体会-读后续写
2016年浙江新高考英语题型解读—读后续写 含解析
《普通高等学校招生全国统一考试英语科考试说明(高考综合改革试验省份试用）（第一版)》已经公布.作为试点开始单位，2016年10月份开始的浙江省新高考英语科目考试题型有重大变化，其中英语写作分为两部分：第一节为应用文写作；第二节为读后续写或概要写作。
应用文写作与往年的写作变化不是很大，已为广大师生所熟悉，但是第二节的读后续写或概要写作是一种新题型，之前考试中考生并未接触过。
为方便广大师生尽早熟悉这种题型,高效备考，特作以下解读。
一、2016年浙江新高考《考试说明》英语写作样题读后续写第二节:读后续写(满分25分）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the wayto workone day。
As he walked along Park Avenuenear the First NationalBank，he heard the sound of someone trying to start acar。
He triedagain and again but couldn't get the car moving. Arthur turnedandlooked inside at the face of a young man who looked worried。
Arthurstoppedand asked，“It looks like you've got a problem，” Arthursaid。
“I'm afraid so。
I'm in a big hurry and I can’t start mycar。
”“Is there something I can do to help？” Arthur asked. The youngmanlooked at the two suitcasesin the back seatand then said，“Thanks。
浅谈浙江新高考读后续写体会
一、了解考试要求 首先解读读后续写的要求。本段落提供 一段 350 词以内的语言材料，要求考生依据 该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所给标示关 键词进行续写（150 词左右），将其发展成一 篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整 的短文。 其次分析原文。原文材料 350 词以内， 所写文章 150 词左右。一般文章多是情节丰 富的记叙文，偶有少量的议论文。原文给出 10 处的标有下划线的关键词语，所续写短文 应使用 5 个以上。续写部分分为两段，每段 开头语已经给出。续写部分分为两大类别： ①半开放性质。必须依据文章的语境逻辑推 理续写。②完全开放性质，可以根据文章思路， 自己发挥。 再次关注注意事项：①词数要求。②与 所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度。③内容 的丰富性和对所标出关键词语的应用。④应 用语言结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性。⑤上 下文的连贯性。 最后把握评分原则：本题总分为 25 分， 按 5 个 档 次 给 分。 第 五 档（21-25） 第 四 档 （16-20） 第 三 档（11-15） 第 二 档（6-10） 第一档（1-5）还有最后空白卷（0）。评分 时，先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确 定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求衡量、 确定或调整档次，最后给分。词数少于 130 的， 从总分中减去 2 分。评分时，应主要从以下 四个方面考虑：①与所给短文及段落开头语 的衔接程度；②内容的丰富性和对所给关键 词语的覆盖情况；③应用语法结构和词汇的 丰富性和准确性；④上下文的连贯性。拼写 与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面， 评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。 二、准确把握读后续写的特点 了解文章的类型，抓住文章发展的主思 路。一般情况下续写短文多以记叙文故事类 文章或者夹叙夹议类文章为主，故事情节曲 折伏，但故事线索的逻辑性比较强。比如在 2016 年 10 月浙江新高考《考试说明》英语读 后续写中的例文中就是故事性非常强的记叙 文，从 Arthur 主动提供帮助给年轻人拿箱子， 再到银行的警报响起，有抢劫。人们四处逃 窜问发生什么了，到最后一个年轻女人用怀 疑的眼光看着 Arthur 手中的箱子，以及观察 到周围人的反应，他开始逃跑了。这样的文 章留给我们的结尾空间非常大。考生可以理 解为这个年轻人是银行抢劫者，而 Arthur 因 此成为一个大英雄；考生也可以理解为这个 年轻人不是一个银行抢劫者，结果产生了误 会。还可以是警察把 Arthur 当成年轻人的同 伙。结尾可以是圆满的也可以是带有遗憾的。 再比如浙江 2016 年 10 月英语选考中的读后 续写真题中 Jane 和 Tom 从吵架开始，Jane 出 走到迷路失联，然后 Jane 自救到直升机出现 在上空。这里可续写线索就可以从 Jane 的内 心发展变化包括以及周围环境变化着手，直 升机出现，其实是这个故事发展的一个转折 点，也是文章发展一个积极的嵌入点。考生 可以考虑结尾 Jane 历经千辛万苦终于获救了。
高考作文之浅谈浙江新高考读后续写体会
浅谈浙江新高考读后续写体会2017年的高考已经圆满落幕了。
带着一丝忐忑看着今年英语的读后续写文章，心理倍感压力，同时也对读后续写文章有一些自己的小看法。
一、了解考试要求首先解读读后续写的要求。
本段落提供一段350词以内的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所给标示关键词进行续写（150词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。
其次分析原文。
原文材料350词以内，所写文章150词左右。
一般文章多是情节丰富的记叙文，偶有少量的议论文。
原文给出10处的标有下划线的关键词语，所续写短文应使用5个以上。
续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已经给出。
续写部分分为两大类别：①半开放性质。
必须依据文章的语境逻辑推理续写。
②完全开放性质，可以根据文章思路，自己发挥。
再次关注注意事项：①词数要求。
②与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度。
③内容的丰富性和对所标出关键词语的应用。
④应用语言结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性。
⑤上下文的连贯性。
最后把握评分原则：本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。
第五档（21-25）第四档（16-20）第三档（11-15）第二档（6-10）第一档（1-5）还有最后空白卷（0）。
评分时，先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。
词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分。
评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑：①与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；②内容的丰富性和对所给关键词语的覆盖情况；③应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；④上下文的连贯性。
拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。
了解文章的类型，抓住文章发展的主思路。
一般情况下续写短文多以记叙文故事类文章或者夹叙夹议类文章为主，故事情节曲折伏，但故事线索的逻辑性比较强。
比如在2016年10月浙江新高考《考试说明》英语读后续写中的例文中就是故事性非常强的记叙文，从arthur主动提供帮助给年轻人拿箱子，再到银行的警报响起，有抢劫。
(完整版)浙江新高考英语作文概要和续写
2016年浙江新高考英语题型解读—概要写作一、2016年浙江新高考《考试说明》英语写作样题第二节：概要写作（满分25分）阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。
Getting rid of dirt, in the opinion of most people, is a good thing. However, there is no thing fixed about attitudes to dirt.In the early 16th century, people thought that dirt on the skin was a means to block o ut disease, as medical opinion had it that washing off dirt with hot water could open up t he skin and let ills in. A particular danger was though to lie in public baths. By 1538, the French king had closed the bath houses in his kingdom. So did the king of England in 15 46. Thus began a long time when the rich and the poor in Europe lived with dirt in a frie ndly way. Henry IV, King of France, was famously dirty. Upon learning that a nobleman h ad taken a bath, the king ordered that, to avoid the attack of disease, the nobleman sho uld not go out.Though the belief in the merit (好处) of dirt was long-lived, dirt has no longer been re garded as a nice neighbor ever since the 18 century. Scientifically speaking, cleaning awa y dirt is good to health. Clean water supply and hand washing are practical means of pre venting disease. Yet, it seems that standards of cleanliness have moved beyond science since World War II. Advertisements repeatedly sell the idea: clothes need to be whiter th an white, cloths ever softer, surfaces to shine. Has the hate for dirt, however, gone too f ar?Attitudes to dirt still differ hugely nowadays. Many first-time parents nervously try to warn their children off touching dirt, which might be responsible for the spread of diseas e. On the contrary, Mary Ruebush, an American immunologist (免疫学家), encourages ch ildren to play in the dirt to build up a strong immune system. And the latter (后者) positi on is gaining some ground.（原创范文，仅供参考）One possible version：People have mixed opinions towards dirt on our skin. (要点 1 ) For a long time in histo ry, people of some European countries, such as France, believed that dirt protected peop le from getting ill. (要点 2 ) However, people began to change their attitudes to dirt abou t 200 years ago. People have been told that washing dirt off our body can keep us health y. (要点 3) However, some scientists believe that exposure to some dirt may help our im mune system. (要点 4)【范文点拨】(一)要点分析1. 文章第一段就是本篇文章的主题句，点明了总的观点：However, there is nothing fix ed about attitudes to dirt. 换句话说：Different people have different attitudes towards di rt. 再结合下文谈到的主题可知Different people have different attitudes towards dirt on the skin. 范文中的要点1“People have mixed opinions tow ards dirt on our skin. ”概括非常精炼。
一六年浙江高考英语读后续写范文
一六年浙江高考英语读后续写范文全文共3篇示例，供读者参考篇1The 2016 Zhejiang College Entrance Examination English reading comprehension section had one passage about a young girl named Lily who traveled to Australia and stayed with a host family for a year to study English. The passage ended with Lily deciding to return to China after experiencing homesickness.Continuing the story from where it left off, Lily's time in Australia gradually became more enjoyable as she made friends with her classmates and improved her English skills. She became more confident and independent as she navigated the challenges of living in a foreign country. Despite missing her family and friends back in China, Lily found comfort in the relationships she built in Australia.As the months went by, Lily's host family became like a second family to her. They supported her in her studies and encouraged her to pursue her interests. Lily began to feel grateful for the opportunity to experience life in Australia and learn about a different culture.One day, Lily received a letter from her parents in China, expressing how much they missed her and how proud they were of her for taking on this adventure. The letter reminded Lily of her roots and gave her the strength to continue her journey in Australia.As the end of her stay approached, Lily felt conflicted about leaving. She had grown accustomed to life in Australia and had developed strong bonds with the people she met. However, she also longed to return to her home country and reunite with her loved ones.In the end, Lily decided to return to China with a heavy heart but with a newfound appreciation for her experiences in Australia. She knew that she would always cherish the memories she made and the lessons she learned during her time abroad. And as she boarded the plane back home, Lily felt a sense of excitement for the next chapter in her life, knowing that she had grown in ways she never thought possible.篇2The year 2016 was a significant one for the students in Zhejiang Province, as they faced the challenge of taking the high-stakes college entrance exam, also known as the Gaokao.Among the various subjects tested, English was a particularly important subject for many students, as it is viewed as a key skill for success in today's globalized world.After months of preparation and hard work, the day of the exam finally arrived. Nervous but determined, students poured over the questions, carefully weighing their options and crafting their responses. For some, the multiple choice section was a breeze, while others struggled to choose the correct answer from the four options provided.As the exam progressed, students tackled the writing section, where they were asked to read a passage and write a response based on the information provided. Some were able to compose eloquent essays, showcasing their language skills and critical thinking abilities. Others found themselves grappling with the task, struggling to express their ideas clearly and coherently.Despite the challenges, students emerged from the exam room feeling a sense of accomplishment and relief. They knew that they had done their best, and that was all they could ask for.In the weeks that followed, students eagerly awaited their results, hoping for the best but preparing for the worst. Finally, the day arrived when the results were announced, and students anxiously logged on to check their scores.Some were overjoyed to see that they had exceeded their expectations, while others were disappointed to find that they had fallen short of their goals. But regardless of the outcome, all the students knew that they had given it their all, and that was something to be proud of.As they reflected on their Gaokao experience, the students realized that it was not just about the test itself, but about the journey they had taken to get there. The late nights spent studying, the sacrifices made in pursuit of their goals, the support of their teachers and families – all of these things had contributed to their success, and they were grateful for the opportunity to have taken part in such a challenging and rewarding experience.Looking ahead to the future, the students knew that the Gaokao was just the beginning of their academic journey. There were more challenges to come, more opportunities to seize, and more dreams to pursue. But no matter what lay ahead, they were confident that they had the skills, the determination, and the support to face whatever may come their way.And so, the students of Zhejiang Province closed the chapter on their Gaokao experience, with a sense of pride and gratitude for all they had achieved. They were ready to face the nextchapter of their lives, knowing that they had the knowledge and skills to succeed in whatever path they chose to take.篇3Title: A New Beginning - Continuing the Story of the Zhejiang High School Entrance Examination English Reading ComprehensionIt was a warm summer evening in Zhejiang, and the sun was setting over the horizon. On this particular day, thousands of high school students had just finished taking the English reading comprehension section of the college entrance examination. As they left the exam hall, they couldn't help but feel a mix of relief and anxiety. They had prepared for this moment for years, and now it was finally over.Among the students was a young girl named Lily. She had always been a diligent student, studying late into the night and taking extra classes to improve her English skills. As she walked out of the exam hall, she couldn't shake the feeling of doubt that lingered in her mind. Did she do well enough to get into her dream university? Only time would tell.A few weeks later, the results were finally announced. Lily anxiously searched for her name on the list, her heart beatingrapidly in her chest. And then, there it was - her name, with the words "Congratulations, you have been accepted into Zhejiang University!" Tears of joy and relief filled Lily's eyes as she realized that all her hard work had paid off.As she walked through the gates of Zhejiang University for the first time, a sense of excitement and anticipation washed over her. This was the beginning of a new chapter in her life, a chance to learn and grow in ways she had never imagined. And as she sat down in her first class, surrounded by new friends and professors, she knew that the future was bright.Over the next four years, Lily thrived at Zhejiang University. She studied hard, made lifelong friendships, and even had the opportunity to study abroad in the United States. And as she walked across the stage to receive her diploma, she couldn't help but think back to that warm summer evening when she had finished the high school entrance examination. It was a moment that had changed her life forever.As Lily looked out at the crowd of proud parents and beaming professors, she knew that this was only the beginning. With a newfound sense of confidence and determination, she was ready to take on whatever challenges lay ahead. And as she threw her cap into the air, a symbol of her success andachievement, she knew that the best was yet to come. Lily was ready to make her mark on the world.。
2016浙江新题型 读后续写+概要写作 含答案
第二讲读后续写【技法指导】题型特点读后续写的阅读材料一般是词数大约为350词以内的记叙文。
考生要在此文的后面接着续约150词左右的文字与前文构成一个完整的故事。
一般来说，记叙文浅显易懂，但故事情节多曲折动人，故事线索的逻辑性也较强。
阅读材料虽然是一篇不完整的文章，但是它有趣，内容能延伸。
要求考生续写的部分多是故事发展的高潮或结局。
写作要求考生在读懂原文的基础上，在规定时间内展开合理的想象，并运用所学的英语知识完成一篇约150词左右的续写。
考生所续写的部分要有创新性和想象力，不是原文的抄写或胡编乱造，同时，还要带有原文色彩(必须使用原文5处以上的关键词语)。
续写一般分为两类：半开放性续写和完全开放性续写。
半开放性续写要求考生务必根据文章的逻辑推理续写。
完全开放性续写则要求考生依据文章的思路自由发挥。
续写时要尽可能与原材料的中心思想和语言风格上保持一致。
写作步骤①审题：速读阅读材料和写作要求，明确写作任务。
②读文：细读阅读材料，确定文章体裁和题材(话题)。
注意文中的关键词，也就是故事中的时间、地点、人物和事件，特别要标记能描述事件发展过程的词和短语。
③谋段：先仔细阅读续写部分所给出的两段段首文字，再构思这两段要写的段落大意。
根据确定好的段落大意，选出每一段可能要用到的原文中带下划线的关键词。
结合这些关键词，确定每一段的写作要点。
这两段加起来要能写出10到15个句子，以满足续写词数要求。
④初写：按照第三步谋段时确定好的写作要点进行初写。
写作时要注意所用的人称和时态要与原材料一致另外，还要注意尽可能地减少表达上的语法错误。
如果遇到语言上的表述困难，可多参考原阅读材料中的有关语句。
⑤定稿：写好初稿后，考生要结合原材料中故事线索读一读自己续写的内容。
既要确保不出现与原材料相矛盾的地方，又要做到内容上前后连贯，语句通顺。
最后规范誊写并标出使用过的原材料中下划线的关键词语。
【典例示法】阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
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浙江省新高考英语2016.10-2019.6--6次读后续写／概要写作
2016.10（读后续写）Para1: But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Looking through the thick darkness, she felt a strong sense of regret of despair surging through her body. “If only I had not quarreled with Tom.” She thought to herself. However, she didn’t lose heart, keeping shouting in her mind, “Focus! Tom must have called for those helicopters. I have to guide him tomorrow.” She picked up her courage again and managed to find a shelter to stay from the bones-chilling night. Shortly after, she collapsed in fatigue and barely kept her eyes open, sweetly dreaming of seeing Tom.Para2: It was daybreak when Jane woke up.She ate some berries and then made her way along the stream, hoping to find a suitable place to guide the helicopter. Exhausted but full of hope, all of a sudden, she spotted a huge flat rock. She made a great effort to climb onto it and waited with patience. The minute the helicopter came into sight again, she waved the yellow blouse violently and yelled at the helicopter with full-strength. Much to her joy, it did capture the attention of the helicopter and the helicopter landed near the big rock slowly. Without hesitation, Jane jumped off the rock and rushed towards Tom like a flying arrow in floods of tears, hugging tightly in his arms, “please never leave me alone!”2017.06（读后续写）Para1: The car abruptly stopped in front of him. Paul rolled down the window and yelled, “Come on，get in the car.” Without any hesitation, Mac jumped off the bicycle and dashed into the back seat of the car. “What a narrow escape!” Mac sighed in a shaky voice. All of a sudden, Mac let out a scream of terror with eyes wide open. The wild wolf almost caught up. Paul swung his car around immediately and headed straight towards the fierce wolf at a fantastic speed. Mac was too terrified to open his eyes, with fingers firmly crossed praying for safety. Sadly, the violent collisions directly ended the wolf’s life. Para2: A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived. Seeing a breathless wolf lying in a pool of blood and Mac frozen with terror, they frowned in puzzlement. “Good to see you two again.”Mac came up to them in floods of tears, holding them tightly in arms. After figuring out what had happened moments ago, they gave Paul and Becky a tight hug and conveyed heartfelt thanks. When Mac gradually regained his calm, three friends waved goodbye to Paul and Becky until their car disappeared into a line of sight. And the three friends continued their bicycle trip to Alaska pleasantly.2017.11（读后续写）Para1: The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us. Mom insisted that we must make full use of it since we had brought it. David and I cast a look at Dad, hoping he could turn down her crazy idea again. Much to our frustration, he agreed unexpectedly. Mom’s eyes twinkled with pleasure. She pulled over the car and searched for the tent instantly. All of a sudden, she let out a cry of anxiety. “Oh, gosh! We left the tent in the hotel!” she burst out crying like a child. Absolutely speechless as we were, we made up our mind to head back to the hotel. Luckily, we managed to retrieve the tent and even enjoyed a night in our tent for the first time. The next day, we continued our trip pleasantly.Para2: We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. The vast bright blue sky, the limitless fresh green grass, the blossoming wild charming flowers, the group of adorable sheep kept me spellbound. However, all the breathtaking and picturesque scenery faded away compared to my absent-mind and forgetful mom, it dawned on me that without all the unnecessary trouble caused by mom, the journey wouldn’t be such a fan tastic and amazing experience to treasure in my childhood. It was her who brought light to our plain life. I really love my Mum. 2018.06（读后续写）Para1: Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.Startled by the white fluffy rabbit, the horse almost threw me off its back. I hurriedly tightened my grip and couldn't help letting out screams. But after we regained our calm, I was amused both by the thrill and the innocence of the little creature. Seeing it fleeing, cheerily, I turned to my dad, “Dad, can we follow it?” My dad nodded with a tolerant smile. Soon without consciousness, we were miles away up into the mountain and we lost track of the rabbit and of course, the track Uncle Paul had asked us to keep to.Para2: We had no idea where we were and it got dark. We had to get off the horses and tried to figure out the way back, but after many attempts, we still failed---we got lost. I grew a bit anxious, but with dad around, I felt all right. As darkness thickened, dad believed it was safer to stay on the spot and waited for help. It was then that we enjoyed a symphony of nature---the warm breeze ruffling through the trees，the insects buzzing and other animals contributing their unique sounds… This serenity ended as we heard shouts and torches came into our sight. At this time, I felt extremely grateful, to Paul and Tina, to this vacation with my dad, and to natur. 2018.11（概要写作）It’s a wise choice for you to pay a personal visit to the college before you apply for, especially the ones that close to you. （要点一和二）In order to avoid being regretful, you should at least visit the colleges you desire to attend. （要点三）If you are short of time and money, it will be helpful as well to search the online college fairsCollegeWeekLive where you can obtain necessary information. （要点四）2019.06（概要写作）（原文）Parents everywhere praise their kids. Jenn Berman, author of The A to Z Guide to Raising Happy and Confident Kids, says, "We've gone to the opposite extreme of a few decades ago when parents tended to be more strict." By giving kids a lot of praise, parents think they're building their children's confidence, when, in fact, it may be just the opposite. Too much praise can backfire and, when given in a way that's insincere, make kids afraid to try new things or take a risk for fear of not being able to stay on top where their parents' praise has put them.Still, don't go too far in the other direction. Not giving enough praise can be just as damaging as giving too much. Kids will feel like they're not good enough or that you don't care and, as a result, may see no point in trying hard for their accomplishments.So what is the right amount of praise? Experts say that the quality of praise is more important than the quantity. If praise is sincere and focused on the effort not the outcome, you can give it as often as your child does something that deserves a verbal reward." We should especially recognize our children's efforts to push themselves and work hard to achieve a goal, "says Donahue, author of Parenting Without Fear: Letting Go of Worry and Focusing on What Really Matters. "One thing to remember is that it's the process not the end product that matters."Your son may not be the best basketball player on his team. But if he's out there every day and playing hard, you should praise his effort regardless of whether his team wins or loses. Praising the effort and not the outcome can also mean recognizing your child when she has worked hard to clean the yard, cook dinner, or finish a book report. But whatever it is, praise should be given on a case-by-case basis and be proportionate(相称的) to the amount of effort your child has put into it.（参考范文）Nowadays parents tend to overpraise their children, which may have bad effects.(要点1）However, inadequate praise can be equally harmful. （要点2）Experts suggest parents pay attention to the quality of their praise and that they should praise the effort rather than the result. （要点3）Parents should also be aware that praise needs to be task-specific and match the amount of effort their children have made. （要点4）2019年2月温州市二模For many high school students, giving an in-class presentation is an approach to their growth. Teachers will call up students, one by one, to present their work in front of the class, and, though it is often tense, many people say it has helped turn them into more confident public speakers. Some educators also credit it with building leadership skills and increasing students’ confidence and understanding of materials.But in the past few years, students have started calling for an end to in-class presentations as they show discrimination against those with anxiety. This week, a tweet posted by a 15-year-old high school student declaring “Stop forcing students to present in front of the class and give them a choice not to” received more than 130,000 retweets and nearly half a million likes.In fact, being a high schooler nowadays is more stressful than ever. Students are burdened with extra hours of homework. They stay up every night till 1:00 a.m. finishing homework on their third Red Bull. Anxiety is increasing at a faster rate than depression as the leading mental-health issue affecting teenagers, a recent study in the Journal of Developmental and Behavioral Pediatrics found.These students want more options. They say that every student has unique strengths and that they should be allowed to present their work in ways that speak to those strengths. This might mean presenting alone in front of the teacher, or choosing between several alternatives like producing a piece of art or an essay for private judgment instead of presenting their work orally.Educators have begun to take it seriously. They agree teachers should listen to students and hear their voices and respond to that. If students’ feelings are ignored, they might just walk away. However, not everyone is convinced. Some hold the view that pushing students out of comfort zones is a big part of what they should do as some students are deathly afraid to do it.参考文章：Giving in-class presentation has been considered beneficial to students’ growth, especially confidence building. （要点1）Yet recently students are urging it to be cancelled for its improper to those with anxiety, for the heavy burden from homework. （要点2）They can show their individual strengths(strong points) in different ways. （要点3）Educators acknowledge the importance of students’ feelings but some insist on urging students to give in-class presentation to increase their confidence. （要点4）。
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5）如果Jane迷失了，Tom是否是一直在湖边等待？
1、两段首句与续写情节之间的衔接： 1）未考虑第一段首句中的天色和没有直升机再来
的提示；（不应该出现挥舞黄色衬衫这类场景。）
2）紧接第一段首句的场景安排：反思、找地方休 息、继续行走等如何合理设计？
I shouldn’t quarrel with Tom, I’m stay with him.（虚拟语气） 5、抄写文章中的原句。
二、逻辑方面的问题
主要情节逻辑： 1、原文与后续的逻辑 2、后续两段间的逻辑 3、段落开头语与后续语句间的逻辑 4、各情节之间的逻辑 融洽度： 1、逻辑是否严密 2、情节是否有旁枝（要点和次要点）
2、有无降档次 的问题
It was daybreak when Jane woke up. She felt so
hungry and thirsty that to find some food. When she
suddenly found a lake, then a surprising sound she
3）第一段最后未提及入睡；---第二段首句是醒来 的场景。
4）第二段首句—醒来后有两种可能：发现Tom在 身边，该如何解释？如果还需要Jane自己找路，又 该如何展开？
2、部分情节要符合常理 1）独自在黑暗的森林中的感受或遭遇等。 2）出现熊、老虎、蛇等动物追赶的情况如何写才算合
理？目的是什么？
3）在哪里睡觉的问题。是否是要找到一个山洞才安全？ 4）行进方向：沿小溪、找开阔地等。 5）直升机方面：谁开、什么时候开、噪音等，寻找的 picked her way carefully along the 2、语言
stream and shouted, “Tom? Help! Help!......” Then she climbed to a high place and flagged the yellow blouse
二、确定分数
over and over again. Unfortunately, there were no
1、总体印象
helicopters at all. Jane began to cried and thought more in her mind. After a long silence, Jane felt tired and began to sleep.
6）cherry和water的组合什么时候写？cherry是否量很 大？
7）做了什么获救，在哪里获救等。获救以后的感受和 情景是否应长篇描述？
8）是否带有火柴等物品？如果生火又是怎样的情景？
五个说明： 1、下划线：有下划线的词可以进行时态变化，如 walked可以用walk。本次阅卷中对于是否变化或 用了几个关注不大。 2、字数问题（130-170）：本次阅卷关注不大， 但不可明显过多或过少。 3、段落问题：本次阅卷中对于大于两段的问题不 予扣分。 4、情节创设不必过于追求复杂、出人意料，只要 情感、情节的描写到位，语言表达丰富就能拿高分。 5、应特别关注学生的书写和卷面。相对而言，书 写和卷面较好的学生得分普遍高些。
几个提示： 1、打分时间紧，对于卷面关注度过大。卷面、字 迹好肯定能加分。 2、字数多少一般不看，只要看上去差不多都没关 系。但千万不要在每个段落后写上字数。 3、情节连贯的基础上，用一些好词句可以增分。 4、部分基础特别差的学生，可以随意写一些，但 必须不是上文原句，没有一句是对的也没关系， 这样也能得几分。 5、考试时间实在来不及，务必要能收尾，否则不 完整的文章分数都相对会低些。
注意：要认真仔细精读阅读材料，充分理解阅读材 料的内容和写作思路，然后发挥想象力，按照原文 的思路续写，补全故事。
1、上下段与原文之间的逻辑关系： 1）未考虑到原文中已在森林中度过一晚上； 2）两段中是否会出现与原文、或两段中一模一样
的情节重复；（特别是小溪的水流声和Jane后悔的 内容。）
3）部分学生直接以Tom寻找Jane来进行情景创设。 一般应以Jane的处境为落脚点。
walk away and lost, I think maybe you will go to the
lake, so I stay at it all day.” Tom replyed and gave her
a tight hug. “Sorry, Jane. I will never to quarrel with
you.” “Me too.” She smiled and kissed.
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Frightened and tired, Jane climbed to a small hill in a hurry. As soon as she flagged the yellow blouse, a wild sense of exhaustion took hold of her. She sat down under a tree. Nevertheless, the night seemed cold without the woolen blouse and Jane couldn’t help trembling. Ultimately, she fell asleep with the hope to be found tomorrow.
It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Again, she heard the helicopter flying overhead. However, what was different from yesterday was that there’s someone calling her name. She quickly climbed to the place she flagged the blouse, and to her great joy, she saw Tom waving at her on the helicopter. The moment when Tom jumped down and hugged her firmly in arms, tears fell out of control. It dawned upon Jane that even the quarrel was unpleasant, the deep love they gave each other would never disappear. That is to say, love will last forever in spite of difficulties and pain.
1. 涵盖四方面：内容、结构、语言准确性和语言丰富性。 2. 续写内容要求与所读文章的内容高度相关，情节发展
连贯合理；续写结构要求续写部分有效使用了语句间 的连接词语，使作文结构紧凑；语言准确性和丰富性 要求续写中使用多样化的词语和句型，并且表达准确 3. 总词数在150词左右（正负20词），包括5个及以上划 线关键词语，分为两段来写。
heard. “Jane? Oh, thanks to god! Hey, my love!” “Tom?
Oh, tell me it’s true!” Jane burst into tears and dashed
to Tom, “Tom, why are you here?” “Jane, when you
1）、与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度； 2）、内容的丰富性和对所给关键词语的覆盖情况； 3）、应用语法结构合词汇的丰富性和准确性； 4）、上下文的连贯性。 5、拼写和标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面，评 分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。 6、如书写较差以致影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次。
具体描述
2016年浙江英语新高考阅卷体会读后续写的主要问题分析
阅卷基本情况介绍：
一、最大的印象是时间紧
本次阅卷中的续写部分安排的阅卷教师相对 过少。
一般60秒之内要完成一张试卷的给分。
二、评分原则
1、本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。 2、评分时，先根据续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其 所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整 档次，最后给分。 3、词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分。 4、评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑：
4. 创造性地模仿和使用语言。续写必须生成新的内容， 在表达新内容遇到语言障碍时，可直接使用阅读材料 中出现的语句，这是一种语言模仿，但具有创造性使 用的特征：模仿阅读材料中的词语句型，表达自己创 造的内容。
三、评分基本过程：
一、确定档次
But no more helicopters came and it was getting 1、衔接
存在的主要问题：
达不到交际的目的 1. 意义表达不到位 2. 无法接受学生所创设的情景和言语。 3. 体会不到语言美的享受
全省续写部分平均得分为9.99分（包括0分）。
一、语言方面主要错误：
1、基础词汇拼写及词性错误较多：sleep, hungry, tired, suddenly, surprise，heard等。 2、基本句子形式错误较多：句子中没出现动词或 出现了几个谓语动词；没有主语等。 3、直接引语的过多使用和胡乱使用。（主要集中 在Jane个人反思及两人见面后的对话） 4、时态、语法等方面局限性极大地制约了学生的 得分。 如： She is so tired and can’t walked.（时态）