2023年广州一模大小作文评讲 --应用文-投稿类写作学案+ 读后续写逐句翻译练习 [解析版]
2023年全国英语高考1卷读后续写我的写作比赛讲评与示范讲义-2024届高三英语二轮复习
一．读后续写原题目When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest, I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. 【举例子】Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail? His reply: "Because I love your stories. If you're willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this." Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.【写作思路】I chose Paul Revere's horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith（银匠）in Boston who rode a horse all night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse's mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny, and unlikely to be anyone else's choice.【写作过程】What did the horse think, as he sped through the night? Did he get tired? Have doubts? Did he want to quit? I sympathized immediately. I got tired.I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere's horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half-dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them.When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud, and said, "Great. Now, write it again." I wrote it again, and again, and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn't win, I wouldn't care.当我在中学的时候，我的社会学老师让我参加一个写作比赛，我想都没想就拒绝了。
2023届高考英语读后续写模拟题(附范文)
高考读后续写专题练习（全国模拟题真题）—、评分原则1.本题总分为25分，按七个档次给分。
2.评分时，应主要从内容、语言（词汇语法）和篇章结构三个方面考虑，具体为：（1）续写内容的质量、完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度。
（2）应用语法结构和词汇的准确性、恰当性和丰富性。
（3）与所给短文及段落开头的衔接程度，上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。
3.评分时，应先根据所续写短文的整体情况确定其所属的档次、然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。
二、各档次的给分范围和要求档次第七档（22~25分）—创造了新颖、丰富、合理的内容，富有逻辑性，续写完整，与原文情境融洽度高；—使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达流畅，语言错误很少，且完全不影响理解；—自然有效地使用了段落间语句间的衔接手段，全文结构清晰，前后呼应，意义连贯。
第六档（18~21分）—创造了比较丰富、合理的内容，比较有逻辑性，续写比较完整，与原文情境融治度较高；—使用了比较多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达比较流畅，有个别错误，但不影响理解；—比较有效地使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。
第五档（15~17分）—创造了基本合理的内容，有—定的逻辑性，续写基本完整，与原文情境相关；—使用了比较恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达方式不够多样性，表达有些许错误，但基本不影响理解；—使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。
第四档（11~14分）—创造了基本完整的故事内容，但有的情节不够合理或逻辑性不强，与原文情境基本相关；—使用了简单的词汇和语法结构，有部分语言错误和不恰当之处，个别部分影响理解；—尚有语句衔接的意识，全文结构基本清晰，意义基本连贯。
第三档（6-10分）—内容和逻辑上有—些重大问题，续写不够完整，与原文有—定程度脱节；—所用的词汇有限，语法结构单调，错误较多且比较低级，影响理解；—未能有效地使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不够清晰，意义欠连贯。
广州一模广东一模作文解析与范文
阅读下面的材料，根据要求写作。
（60分）今年春节，顾氏家族成员从各地回到老宅，欢度新年，畅叙亲情。
大太爷爷一家四代同堂，都住在老宅。
大太爷爷早年以画像为业，儿子开照相馆，子经营影楼，曾女开发了一款美图软件，在网上爆红。
二太爷爷参加过抗日战争，儿子是油田的技术员，女改革开放之初到创业，曾正在亚丁湾执行护航任务。
三太爷爷年青时到旧金山打拼，儿子在当地开了个小超市，子娶了当地的姑娘，曾Peter今年18岁，中文名字叫顾念祖，第一次岁父亲到中国探亲祭祖。
顾念祖把大太爷爷手绘的祖辈画像和家族历次团聚的照片传到网上，这些照片有黑白的、有彩色的，诉说着家族的故事。
他留言说这次聚会给了他许多温暖和感动，他对顾家的家族观念充满好奇。
顾氏家族是无数中国家族的缩影。
每个人都在谱写家族的历史，每个家族的历史都折射着时代的变迁、国家的发展，请你根据以上材料写一篇文章，回应顾念祖的留言，帮助他理解中国的家族文化。
要求：选好角度，确定立意，明确文体，自拟标题：不要套作，不得抄袭，不得泄露个人信息：不少于800字。
一、题目解读2019年高考“一模”语文作文题，用一句话来概括材料的容和含意就是“家族故事，时代变迁；家族文化，源远流长”。
我们来仔细分析一下题目。
（一）题干信息22.阅读下面的材料，根据要求写作。
（60分）这是典型的高考作文题题干表述的形式，传递了题目序号、写作题目是材料作文、作文题的分值是60分这些信息。
（二）材料信息今年春节，顾氏家族成员从各地回到老宅，欢度新年，畅叙亲情。
大太爷爷一家四代同堂，都住在老宅。
大太爷爷早年以画像为业，儿子开照相馆，子经营影楼，曾女开发了一款美图软件，在网上爆红。
二太爷爷参加过抗日战争，儿子是油田的技术员，女改革开放之初到创业，曾正在亚丁湾执行护航任务。
三太爷爷年青时到旧金山打拼，儿子在当地开了个小超市，子娶了当地的姑娘，曾Peter今年18岁，中文名字叫顾念祖，第一次随父亲到中国探亲祭祖。
2023年4月广东一模应用文讲解课件+2023届高考英语作文备考
Dear fellow students, It’s a great honor to have Professor Smith here. Though we met online, I
3.诗歌类型： ①nursery rhymes：童谣
i. usually the traditional poems or folk songs
ii.to the point but has a storyline
iii. have a strong rhythm, and of ten repeat the same words
believe he will feel our sincere gratitude through our generous applause. So please join me in welcoming our special guest!
The theme today is “How to Write and Enjoy Poems”. So, Professor Smith, a learned scholar who is featured in a deep dive on English classic poets especially Shakespeare, will give us a basic framework of writing and enjoying English poems through multidimensional perspectives including genres, rhymes, and meanings.
2023年新高考省份英语适应性测试——读后续写和应用文写作解读
2023年新高考省份英语适应性测试——读后续写和应用文写作解读（一）读后续写解读阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
人与社会（人际关系——陌生人之间的责任与担当——对接X2U1成年）Lionel, Fandi and Iskandar often got together to play football. They dreamt of one day growing up to be professional footballers.The empty field beside the block of neighbourhood was where they would meet for their football sessions.One sunny afternoon,they were at the field as usual. They were in the thick of their game when Fandi aimed his foot at the ball and gave a forceful kick.He himself was surprised by his strength.The ball flew past the goalposts breaking into a glass window of the house behind.The boys were too shocked for words. They were half expecting the annoyed home owner, Madam Leong,to storm out through the front door and give them a good tongue criticizing.They knew she was an ill-tempered old lady. Actually, she had scolded（责骂）them several times before for being too noisy.When no one came out of the house after ten minutes,the boys were quite surprised.They had prepared themselves for a scolding and were ready to compensate （赔偿）Madam Leong for breaking her window. Out of curiosity,Fandi adventured into Madam Leong's yard.The gate was unlocked and he went in while the other two waited outside.Fandi knocked on the main door.No reply.Looking in through the broken window,Fandi let out a loud scream.Lying on the floor in a pool of blood was the old lady.There was a big cut on her forehead. She must have been cut by pieces of glass,flying across the living room.In panic, Fandi immediately dialled '995'for an ambulance. As they were unable to enter the house without a key,there was nothing they could do but wait for the ambulance to arrive. Although the ambulance arrived soon,to the boys,the annoying wait seemed like forever.The ambulance attendants forced open the door and rushed to Madam Leong. She was unconscious, but still breathing. One of the ambulance attendants applied pressure on the wound and wrapped it.With its emergency lights flashing,the ambulance rushed off to the nearest hospital.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
2023广东省一模高三英语优秀作文
The Power of Perseverance in OvercominghallengesIn the realm of academic pursuits, the significance of perseverance cannot be overstated. It is a vital trait that separates the successful students from the rest, especially during critical moments like the 2023 Guangdong Provincial First Model Test for Senior Three students. This essay delves into the profound impact of perseverance on overcoming challenges and achieving academic excellence.The journey of academic success is often fraught with challenges and obstacles. Whether it's the complexities of advanced mathematics, the intricacies of foreign languages, or the vastness of scientific knowledge, each subject presents its unique set of challenges. In such scenarios, perseverance becomes a crucial tool in the arsenal of any aspiring student. It is the unwavering commitment to overcoming difficulties, the resilience in the face of failure, and the relentless pursuit of improvement.One notable example of perseverance in academic endeavors comes from the realm of language learning. The mastery of a foreign language requires immense dedicationand effort. From memorizing vocabulary to grasping grammar rules, the process can be daunting. However, those who persevere, despite the initial difficulties, often emerge victorious. They invest countless hours in practice, engage in immersive language experiences, and embrace every opportunity to improve their proficiency. As a result, they not only overcome the challenges but also achieve a level of fluency that is truly commendable.Similarly, in the realm of mathematics, perseverance is paramount. The subject demands precision, logic, and a keen ability to solve problems. Often, students encounter complex problems that require deep thinking and perseverance to crack. Those who give up easily may miss out on the satisfaction of solving a difficult problem. However, those who persevere, digging deeper into the problem and trying different approaches, often find the solution and experience a sense of accomplishment that is truly rewarding.The importance of perseverance is not limited to specific subjects but extends to the overall academic journey. It is the driving force that propels students topush beyond their comfort zones, take risks, and embrace new challenges. It is what separates the average student from the exceptional one. The exceptional student is not just someone who scores high grades but someone who possesses the resilience and determination to overcome any obstacle that comes their way.Moreover, perseverance also plays a crucial role in building self-confidence. As students persevere through challenges and overcome obstacles, they develop a sense of accomplishment and self-belief. This, in turn, empowers them to take on even greater challenges and strive for higher goals. The cycle of perseverance, achievement, and self-confidence reinforcement is a virtuous one that can lead to remarkable academic and personal growth.In conclusion, perseverance is a vital ingredient in the recipe for academic success. It is what separates the successful students from the rest, enabling them to overcome challenges, achieve excellence, and build self-confidence. As we embark on the journey of academic pursuits, let us remember the power of perseverance and embrace it as a guiding principle in our endeavors.坚持不懈克服挑战的力量在学术追求的领域，坚持不懈的重要性不言而喻。
2021届广东省高三一模读后续写课件 (1)
and her eight-year-old boy
when: on a freezing morning of December where: in the streets at the shop at Clara's house what: a burglary in the cake shop near the City Museum why: Clara wanted to make her son a birthday cake
and sat down on the floor.
At that very moment, a child's voice broke the silence, “Mom, is anyone coming for my birthday? Invite them in, please.”
四个步骤 Four Steps
读懂大意，理清脉络
读所给的不完整故事，弄清大意和主题， 理清故事的主要人物和事件。
细读首句，构思框架
仔细阅读所给两段的首句，结合正能量 结尾，思考大致框架。
增加细节，开始写作
根据“所见/遇所想，所为所感”等构思 具体细节。
修改润色，整洁誊写
思考再三，把修正润色后的续写整洁地 写入答卷。
of searching around, she walked straight into the storage room, stole cheese,
chocolate, butter and other ingredients for a cake, and then ran away down the
2023年广州高三模拟作文题：作文解析+范文
2023年广州高三模拟作文题：作文解析+范文2023届广州高三一模作文导写及范文【原题呈现】23.阅读下面的材料，根据要求写作。
（60分）《孙子兵法》中说：“激水之疾，至于漂石者，势也。
”水能漂石，可见“势”的力量巨大。
合乎“势”，顺势而为，往往事半功倍；反之，则可能举步维艰；因而，人们要正确地认识“势”，灵活地把握“势”。
面对不同的局面，有的人蓄势待发，有的人谋势而动，有的人乘势而上。
请结合材料，联系现实写一篇文章，体现你的感悟与思考。
要求：选准角度，确定立意，明确文体，自拟标题；不要套作，不得抄袭；不得泄露个人信息；不少于800字。
【优秀范文】《顺应时代发展实现人生价值》时代在发展，生活在变化。
自古以来，我们的祖先就关注现实，关注生命，关注自己与整个天地的和谐统一。
《孙子兵法》中说：“激水之疾，至于漂石者，势也。
”时至今日，我们虽然已经能够更加科学地认识这个世界，但想要让人生、让生活、让国家变得更好，就需要我们清醒的认识到，唯有将个人命运与国家命运紧密相联，顺应时代浪潮，竭尽全力做好自己的事情，才能实现自己的人生价值。
听从时代的呼唤，顺应时代浪潮。
顺势而为,方能乘风而上。
顺应时代不是妥协、不是盲从，不是佛系、也不是随遇而安，是客观认识当前的社会与生活，尊重时代特性。
顺应时代需要转变思维、积极拥抱、抢占先机，一味墨守陈规只会被时代淘汰。
就如柯达公司盲目自信，固守自己先进的胶卷技术、不愿探索数码相机的发展，最终被市场淘汰;又如诺基亚抱守手机市场领头羊位置，不愿在手机系统上进行改革创新，最终“泯然众人”;晚清统治者盲目自信，在全球进入工业时代时却依然闭关锁国，使中国落后于西方，受尽了百年屈辱。
作为新时代的新青年，要在时代的浪潮中勇于拼搏创新，用青春谱写时代华章。
肩负自身的使命，就当竭尽全力。
“幸福都是奋斗出来的。
”生在新时代，烙下时代的印记，就要抓住时代所给予的机会，竭尽全力闪耀自己的光芒。
积极进取的奋斗精神，是成人成事的根本，是每个人发展完善、提升自身不可或缺的精神和内涵。
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2023年广州一模大小作文评讲小作文·【投稿类】【2023广州一模】你校英文报“Teenage Life”专栏本期的主题为“Sports and Health”。
请你用英语写一篇短文投稿，内容包括：1．运动的重要性；2．你的运动建议。
注意：1．写作词数应为80左右；2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Sports and Health【2023全国甲卷】你校将以六月八日世界海洋日为主题，举办英语征文比赛，请你写一篇短文投稿。
内容包括：1.海洋的重要性；2.保护海洋的倡议。
注意：1.词数100左右；2.短文的题目和首句已为你写好。
【2022全国乙卷】学校英文报正在开展以Learning English Beyond the Classroom 为题的讨论。
请使用图表中的调查结果写一篇短文投稿，内容包括：1．学习活动状况描述：2．简单评论；3．你的建议。
高考小作类型：投稿分析：文章为投稿类型，在2022年全国高考的甲卷和乙卷分别都考察了投稿的文章类型。
有别于信件类，文章开头不能再写“Hi，I'm Lihua...”。
所以，学生首先要了解投稿的文章结构，才能下笔如有神。
★“投稿”结构：第一段：交代背景第二段：运动的重要性第三段：运动建议第四段：总结/呼吁1.第一段：交代背景A.备用句型：①众所周知As we all know,/ As is known to all,② 人们普遍认为... It is commonly acknowledged that ...③ 现今，随着XXX的发展Nowadays, with the development of ...随着XXX的日益流行Nowadays, with the growing popularity of ...④当谈及到XXX，XXX变得越来越...When it comes to XXX, XXX is becoming more and more ...B.内容---直接点题【广州一模】Sports and Health （重要）1)It is commonly acknowledged that sports are significant to our health.（运动于健康很重要）.2)保持良好的身心健康是非常重要的。
It's crucial to maintain good health, both physical and mental.3)众所周知，良好的健康对于每个人都非常重要。
As is known to all, good health is of vital importance to everyone.2.交代现状【Teenage 】成长的关键阶段；学业繁忙；没时间锻炼①我们仍然在成长的关键阶段。
we are still in the critical stage of growing up,② 作为高中生，我们过着忙碌的生活，忙于课业和课外活动As high school students, we lead busy lives juggling schoolwork and extracurricular activities.③ 然而，我们学生的课业负担很重，因此很少抽出时间进行定期体育锻炼However, we students are heavily burdened with school work, and thus spare little time for regular physical exercise.【2022年全国甲卷：世界海洋日】说到海洋，它的污染越来越严重。
6月8日是世界海洋日，旨在提高人们对海洋保护的认识。
When it comes to ocean, its pollution is becoming more and more serious.World Ocean Day, falling on June 8th, is aimed at raising awareness of ocean conservation.【2022年全国乙卷：课外学习英语】学习活动状况描述：如今，随着智能手机和电脑的日益普及，越来越多的学生选择在课堂之外以各种方式学习英语。
Nowadays, with the growing popularity of smartphones and computers, an increasing number of students are choosing to learn English beyond the classroom in various ways.第二段：运动的重要性/ 意义★句型：not only ... but also1)运动不仅可以锻炼我们的身体，还能帮助我们保持活力和健康。
Doing sports can not only build up our bodies, but also help us stay energetic and fit.2)运动不仅有助于我们保持健康和强壮，还可以振奋我们的情绪，缓解压力。
Having sports not only helps us stay fit and strong, but also boosts our mood and relieves stress.3)作为高中生，定期锻炼对我们的健康有益，不仅可以让我们的身体更强壮，还可以让我们摆脱紧张的学习压力。
As high school students, taking exercise regularly is beneficial to our health, which can not only make our body stronger but also free us from the intense study stress【海洋的重要性】海洋不仅为我们提供了充足的食物，而且保持了自然的平衡。
Not only does ocean offer us sufficient food, but also it maintains the balance of nature.灵活的连贯句运用：1)What is also worth mentioning is the role sports play in maintaining our mental health.2)While working out, we may become more contented, confident and determined.第三段：运动的建议1.中心句：因此，我有一些关于锻炼的建议。
Therefore, there are some advice for us to do exercise.To fully enjoy these benefits, here are some tips.2.建议句型：①祈使句。
首先, 选择你感兴趣的运动。
其次，去找一些好的锻炼伙伴。
最后，适当运动以防止受伤。
First, Choose the sport that interests you.Second, find some good workout partners.Lastly, exercise properly to prevent injuries.其他建议句型：We should do ... You’d better do...②形式主语It’s adj/ n for sb to do ...1) 这是我们步行或骑自行车上学的好机会。
It is a good chance/ way for us to go to school on foot or by bike.2) 提高学生自身的自律性是当务之急.It’s urgent for students themselves to improve their self-discipline,3) 家长和老师也迫切需要加强指导。
it’s also urgent for parents and teachers to strengthen the guidance.③动名词doing作主语1) 加入学校运动队或俱乐部可以为你提供必要的锻炼和归属感。
Joining a school sports team or club can provide you with the necessary workout and a sense of belonging.2) 周末可以和朋友一起游泳和爬山也是挺好的选择。
going swimming and climbing with friends at weekends are the available choices第四段：呼吁/倡议句型一：I (do)hope everyone will enjoy sports and live a healthy life.句型二：倒装句只有我们采取行动锻炼，我们才能在未来变得越来越健康Only if we take action to exercise can we be healthier and healthier in the future.句型三：虚拟语气It's high time that ....总而言之，现在是我们致力于保护海洋的时候了。
All in all, it is high time that we devoted ourselves to protecting ocean.【运动与健康】范文（1）It is commonly acknowledged that sports are significant to our health. This is especially true for us teenagers. As we are still in the critical stage of growing up, doing sports can build up our bodies, thus helping us stay energetic and fit. What is also worth mentioning is the role sports play in maintaining our mental health. While working out, we may become more contented, confident and determined.To fully enjoy these benefits, here are some tips. First, choose the sport that interests you most and suits you best. Second, find some good workout partners. That way, it's more likely that you'll exercise regularly. Lastly, exercise properly to prevent injuries. I hope everyone will enjoy sports and live a healthy life.【运动与健康】范文（2）As high school students, we lead busy lives juggling schoolwork and extracurricular activities.It's crucial to maintain good health, both physical and mental.Having sports not only helps us stay fit and strong, but also boosts our mood and relieves stress.It's a great break from our workload that also benefits our bodies. Just find a form of physical activity that you enjoy and make it a part of your routine. Joining a school sports team or club can provide you with the necessary workout and a sense of belonging.Remember, taking care of our bodies is just as important as taking care of our minds. Make an effort each day, and your body and mind will thank you for it!【运动与健康】范文（3）As is known to all, good health is of vital importance to everyone. However, we students are heavily burdened with school work, and thus spare little time for regular physical exercise(背景). So I suggest we fit exercise into our busy schedule, making it part of our daily routine.(引出下文) As high school students, taking exercise regularly is beneficial to our health, which can not only make our body stronger but also free us from the intense study stress (运动对大家的好处physical &mental) . Therefore, there are some advice for us to do exercise. For example, it is a good chance for us to go to school on foot or by bike (建议1). Meanwhile, we should make good use of PE lessons to do some sports, such as running and playing basketball(建议2) What's more, going swimming and climbing with friends at weekends are the available choices(建议3).Only if we take action to exercise can we be healthier and healthier in the future.(倡议)【2022全国高考乙卷】范文Learning English Beyond the ClassroomNowadays, with the growing popularity of smartphones and computers, an increasing number of students are choosing to learn English beyond the classroom in various ways.It can easily be seen that the percentage of students who choose listening to English songs and watching English movies is respectively 65% and 50%. However, those choosing reading English books and visiting English learning websites only account for 18% and 12%. As far as I’m concerned, it is a disturbing trend. For students, what benefits most to their study is reading English books. Because of their lack of self-discipline, they’re more easily addicted to chatting online or playing games. It’s urgent for students themselves to improve their self-discipline, and it’s also urgent for parents and teachers to strengthen the guidance.【2022全国高考甲卷】范文When it comes to ocean, its pollution is becoming more and more serious. World Ocean Day, falling on June 8th, is aimed at raising awareness of ocean conservation.Ocean plays a key role in our world. Not only does ocean offer us sufficient food, but also it maintains the balance of nature. Thus, it is imperative to protect ocean. First of all, what we can do is to place importance on our daily actions. For example, garbage can’t be thrown into ocean. What’s more, we can also hand out leaflets to call on more people to protect the ocean. The more people are involved, the better the ocean environment is.All in all, it is high time that we devoted ourselves to protecting ocean. To protect ocean is to protect ourselves.【2023广州一模·读后续写】第二节（满分25分）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。