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Some people think that robots are very important to human’s future development. Others thought that they are dangerous and have negative effects on the society. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of the robots. (atleast250words)

As an increasing number of robots are produced, it is interesting to analyze the value of robots in the future. Some people believe that robots will play a crucial role in developing of humanity while others concerned that robots will pose a threat to our society. This essay will briefly review the pros and cons of the robots.

Thereis no doubt that robots can help us in many aspects. Robots are more powerful and more efficiency than mankind on doing repetitive works. For example, in car factories, a large number of robots havebeen installed to do most of the work all days and all nights, this will greatly increase the yield and cut down the labor cost. In some unsafe environments, such as deep water or underground, robots can also do lots of dangerous work instead of humans.

On the contrary, the drawbacks of using robotunrestricted are really existed. Actually, the rate of unemployment will increase when robots are widely used, as more and more new application of robot being developed, this situation will be even more serious. On the other hand, with the development of technology, robots become much more intelligent, through the internet they can master the information and data from individual to government, so robots will have the ability to destroy our world, just like the story of some science fiction film, it would be a serious problem for us.

Since robots have both advantages and disadvantages for human, I consider that people should have the entire ability of management before using robots, thinking carefully about all the consequences of using robots rather than just consider about the benefits of robots.

替换词：

1.More and more-------

a growing/increasing/surging/mushrooming number of robots----robotic technology/automatons

2.advantages and disadvantages-----

boons and banes/ merits and demerits

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