雅思大作文批改范例8复习课程
有道写作雅思批改
有道写作雅思批改全文共四篇示例，供读者参考第一篇示例：有道写作雅思批改是一种针对雅思考试写作部分的辅导服务，通过专业的老师批改学生的作文并提供建议和指导，帮助学生提高写作水平和得分。
有道写作雅思批改服务不仅可以帮助学生了解雅思写作考试的要求和标准，还可以提供个性化的写作指导，帮助学生克服写作难题，打破写作瓶颈，快速提升写作水平。
有道写作雅思批改的服务流程通常包括以下几个步骤：学生需要注册并购买服务，然后按照指定的格式将写作任务提交到有道系统中。
接下来，专业的老师会在规定的时间内对学生的作文进行批改，并在作文中标注错误和提出改进意见。
学生可以通过系统查看批改结果，了解自己的不足之处，并根据老师的建议进行调整和改进。
有道写作雅思批改服务的特点主要有以下几点：1. 专业老师提供指导：有道写作服务的老师都是经验丰富的雅思写作批改专家，能够深入了解学生的写作水平和需求，针对性提出建议和指导，帮助学生解决各种写作难题。
2. 定制化建议：每位学生的写作水平和需求都各不相同，有道写作雅思批改服务可以根据学生的具体情况提供个性化的建议和指导，帮助学生有效提高写作水平。
3. 及时回馈：有道写作雅思批改服务通常在24小时内完成批改，学生可以及时查看批改结果，并根据老师的建议进行调整和改进，从而提高写作效率和质量。
4. 多样化练习题目：有道写作雅思批改服务提供了多样化的写作练习题目，涵盖了雅思写作考试的各个方面，帮助学生全面提高写作能力。
5. 追踪服务：有道写作雅思批改服务还可以提供学生的写作成绩和进步情况追踪服务，帮助学生了解自己的强弱项，及时调整学习计划，针对性提高写作水平。
第二篇示例：有道写作雅思批改是为那些想提高雅思写作能力的学生提供的一项专业化服务。
雅思考试是国际上最具权威性的英语语言能力测试之一，对于许多留学生来说，取得一定的分数是必须的。
而写作部分往往是许多学生的难点，因为它要求考生具备一定的逻辑思维能力、语言表达能力和写作技巧。
雅思大作文真题范文及指导
2012.09.15 教育类Money for postgraduate research is limited. Therefore some people think financial support from governments should be only provided for scientific research rather than research for less useful subjects. Do you agree or disagree?硕士研究经费有限，有些人因此觉得政府的资助应该只能支持科学调查，而不是那些没有用处的科目。
在何种程度上你同意这个观点？写作指导传统来说, scientific research包括physics, chemistry, biology, agriculture, cell technology, 这些科目都是和自然世界(physical world)有关的。
而其他方面的研究包括语言学，心理学，哲学，历史，社会学等。
这种题型在雅思写作中很典型，意思是“只应该做A事情，而B事情完全不应该去做”。
这类话题明显都是一种偏激的观点，写法基本上是一样的。
第一种写法：先承认A观点的合理性，然后进行驳斥，讲只做A会产生的负面影响，接下来讲B的必要性。
第二种写法：先交代B观点的不足之处，然后对其进行驳斥，然后再讲B观点的合理性。
结构与思路：本文适合写成单边支持型。
在“题型解读”中提到的两种方法都能使用。
第一种写法：第一段让步段，先承认科学研究是合理的，因为科学研究可以获得即时利益，可以找到新的资源能源，能让我们富有。
然后驳斥，只在科学研究上花钱会产生的一些后果（公民只有物质生活而没有精神生活的负面影响），然后讲对其他领域投资的重要性。
投资其他领域会让我们的精神生活更加健康。
第二种写法：第一段让步段，先讲有些人或许会认为投资其他领域并不能创造经济上的利益，因此政府投资其他领域是浪费纳税人的血汗钱。
新雅思8分作文范文(优选八篇)
雅思8分作文范文(优选八篇)5雅思8分作文范文(篇一)In many countries, the number of elderly people is increasing fast. To what extent do the disadvantages outweigh the advantages?Nowadays, owning to the improvement of living condition(这里习惯用复数), people can live much longer than before, which gives rise to the fast increasing number of elderly people. Some hold that this situation will result in a series of problems, such as social burden, population expansion and so on. While others insist that it agrees the development of modern society and brings many advantages. For my part, I take the latter side with(用for) the following reasons:(74words)点评：开头稍微写的有点长，不过内容写的还不错。
属于通过分析两种不同观点，较后阐述自己观点的写法。
(此种写法在雅思大作文的第一段比较常见)美中不足的是倒数第二句的错误比较明显!while是个连词，应该连接句子与句子，所以这里前面不应该是句号。
后面agree是不及物动词，不能直接加宾语。
Firstly, elder people(一会儿elderly people,一会儿又elder people，这不是自相矛盾么) are the fortune of our society. They have enough experiences and capabilities which are badly lacked and needed for our youth when dealing with all sorts of problems, they can still do well in their jobs. Especially(前面应该用逗号，然后这里小写) in some professions, such as teacher, doctor, scientist and so on, sometimes (前面应该用句号，然后这里大写)age means the authority and ability. When you see a doctor, do you prefer an elderly doctor with grey hair or a youth without mustache? (77words)Secondly, elder people(同上) are the happiness of our society. Increasing number of elderly people is also the embodiment of our improving living quality, which shows our society run(应该第三人称单数)to the right and healthy direction, we(前面句号，这里大写) have more chance and time to serve our elderly people, and it’s the happiest time of all our life to accompany with(accompany是及物动词) our parents, grandparents and great grandparents. (63words)Finally, elderly people are the lubricant of our society. They have good temper and enough patients(应该是patience吧) to do anything, they can help us to intercede(它是不及物动词，而且主要用人作宾语) social disputes, and they make our society much more harmoniouswhich(前面较好有个逗号)makes for the construction of harmonious society.(43words)正文段综合点评：此篇是典型的5段式作文的写作，正文段构思出三个分论点来证明自己的观点，的确在构思上花了不少心思。
雅思8分之详细篇(大家论坛)
雅思8分经验之详细篇（来自大家论坛）本帖来自群中RY AN的分享，让我整理了。
修改了部分错别字，加了小部分重点。
LZ写得真的是非常好，娓娓道来，很有说服力，大神级人物！正文：早就答应好了大家要写这篇经验分享，断断续续写了几个月，一直没有完工。
迈入了崭新的2012年，而且明天要启程去深圳，暂别大学，开始工作，终于找不到再拖下去的理由。
所以就在2012年的1月1日，将这份经验分享奉献给大家作为礼物。
由于时间和精力限制，下面很长的日子里，我的英语可能都不会再有飞跃性的进步了。
在此缅怀一下过去认认真真学英语的9年。
希望大家能够快快乐乐把英语学好！大三下学期考雅思，分数是overall 8 (Listening: 9Reading: 8 Writing: 6.5 Speaking: 7.5)。
我不是牛人，无数比我的小的同学早就取得了比我厉害得多的成绩。
但是单单对于雅思这门考试，也确实有一些经验可以分享。
阅读：剑桥3、4、5、6我没有做完就去考试了，原因是我考高口的时候做了15套左右高口真题阅读练习，每篇长度都和雅思阅读差不多，而且时间只有雅思考试的一半：30分钟。
所以做雅思的阅读我会觉得时间很宽裕，觉得水平差不多了，就把准备的时间花在了我最弱的口语上面。
这就说明了一点，提高阅读速度是提高阅读分数的第一大要素。
怎么样才能提高大家的阅读速度？这里又要运用到我之前说的“两个凡是”啦（详见文章最后链接国际学院学子英语学习经：所谓“两个凡是”）。
首先推荐一本书《三倍速阅读法triple your readingspeed》。
这本书是超超同学推荐的，用了符合自然规律的方法来提高大家的阅读速度。
有了阅读方法，下面就要求有词汇量了。
背单词是学英语永恒的旋律。
虽然说雅思是单词不懂依然可能把题目做对，可是如果你懂这个单词的含义，对文章的理解会生动许多，做题目的过程不再是机械的用不认识的关键词定位，而成为一种可以拓展大家知识面的途径。
雅思作文写作task2第八课时—范文赏析
IELTS作文讲解：范文赏析审题:1. 本题出现两个图，饼图与曲线图，首先确定写作结构，饼图和曲线图分别叙述，若两者之间有联系，则需要指出。
这样本篇作文的大体结构就可以设置三部分，第一段对总体进行概述，主体段对两个表格分别描述，末段进行总结（可选）2. 写作要点分析：饼图信息点：确定时间2000年，内容可口可乐罐装销售总额，地点为五个地区，分别占的百分比，最大与最小百分比分别对应的地区。
曲线图：确定时间96年-01年，内容为可口可乐的股价，以美元为单位计算，曲线信息可分为两个时间段，98年中期之前与之后的特点对比，总体趋势波动范文：The pie chart shows the worldwide distribution of sales of Coca-Cola in the year 2000 and the graph shows the change in share prices between 1996 and 2001.首段介绍两个图表的主要信息，巧妙地进行关键词的改写the worldwide distribution In the year 2000, Coca-Cola sold a total of billion cases of their fizzy drink product worldwide. The largest consumer was North America, where per cent of the total volume was purchased. The second largest consumer was Latin America. Europe and Asia purchased and per cent of the total volume。
2020年雅思8分范文作文8分的雅思作文样的
雅思8分范文作文8分的雅思作文样的第一步，关于审题。
很多考生发帖、回帖说自己偏题了或者询问自己的写作是否离题。
确实，写作的雅思写作大作文混合交叉类型出现极其频繁，审题难度变大，加上考生不善于灵活老师的分类，生搬硬套，必然容易出现离题的情况。
对作文进行了分类：A、A’、B、C、D五类。
《剑桥国际英语教程4，5，6》上的大作文均可归类为上诉五类。
第二步，结合以上分类进行分析。
重点研究《剑桥国际英语教程4，5，6》上的6篇小作文，6篇大作文。
结果如下：小作文：首段：1-2句(90%一句简单句或者复杂句均可)中间段1：2-3句(一般2句复杂句，1句简单句)中间段2：2-3句(一般2句复杂句，1句简单句)注:复杂句95%为并列句，偶有状语从句。
末端：1句(简单句或者复杂句均可)全篇150-180字，160字左右最佳。
简单句平均15字，复杂句平均30字。
中间段、复杂句隔离分析。
以上数据加上中间段复杂句的单独分析，于是不难解决一个重大问题：小作文数据信息的择取问题——这也是小作文写作的核心问题。
小作文最难的地方在于如何取舍有效数据。
哪些该表达，哪些不需要。
数据多时，如何取重要的;数据少时,如何取舍。
解决方法：中间段只写两大信息点。
每个大信息点用两个小信息点并列式组成。
这样构成2个复合句。
其余信息用一个简单句补充。
有了这个黄金法则，小作文的问题就解决了。
另外一个值得注意的问题是要灵活运用老师讲授的各种有效表达方式。
大作文：首段：2-3句：需要表达自己观点时-3句，不需要就2句。
其中1-2个复杂句，1个简单句。
中间段1：3-4句：2-3句复杂句，1-2句简单句。
80%复杂句为并列句、状语从句、名词性从句、另外，多插入语。
介词短语和分词短语。
中间段2：(同上)末段：2-3句。
(2个复杂句，1个简单句)全篇：250-290字，270字左右为最佳。
简单句平均14字，复杂句平均28字。
中间段单独分析。
中间段考官从未采取列点法写作。
雅思作文批改英语
雅思作文批改英语Absolutely, here's a sample of how to correct an IELTS essay:Original Paragraph:In today's world, technology plays a vital role in our lives. It has made our lives easier and more convenient. For instance, we can use the internet to find information quickly and easily. Also, we can use smartphones to communicate with our friends and family. This is why I believe that technology is very important for us.Corrected Paragraph:In the contemporary era, technology has become an integral component of our existence, significantly enhancing the quality and convenience of our daily routines. For example, the internet serves as a powerful tool for instantaneously accessing a wealth of information. Additionally, smartphones have revolutionized the way we maintain contact with our loved ones, facilitating communication across vast distances. Consequently, I am of the opinion that the significance of technology in our lives cannot be overstated.Corrections and Justifications:1. Word Choice: Replaced "today's world" with "contemporary era" for a more formal tone. "Vital role" was changed to "integral component" to convey a stronger sense of importance.2. Sentence Structure: Varied sentence structures to improve the flow and readability of the paragraph. For example, "It has made our lives easier and more convenient" was split into two sentences to clarify the benefits of technology.3. Grammar: Corrected the verb tense consistency by changing "plays" to "has become" to match the past participle "enhanced".4. Clarity and Detail: Added specific examples such as "instantaneously accessing a wealth of information" and "facilitating communication across vast distances" to provide clear evidence of how technology enhances our lives.5. Concluding Statement: Strengthened the concluding opinionby using "the significance of technology in our lives cannotbe overstated" instead of a simpler "very important for us".Remember, when correcting an IELTS essay, it's crucial tofocus on enhancing the coherence, vocabulary, grammar, and overall structure of the essay to better align with the expectations of the IELTS scoring criteria.。
雅思8分作文范文
雅思8分作文范文第一篇作文:Title: The Role of Social Media in Modern SocietySocial media has become an integral part of our daily lives, with millions of people logging on each day to keep up with their friends, the news, and their favorite brands. In this essay, I will explore the impact that social media has had on modern society, and what role it plays in our lives today.One of the most significant benefits of social media is the ability to connect people from all over the world. This interconnectedness has facilitated the growth of online communities, allowing individuals to share ideas and information on a global scale. Social media has also given us the ability to network professionally, allowing us to connect to potential employers, mentors, and business partners.However, social media has also had some detrimental effects on society. One of the most concerning is the rise of cyberbullying. Social media has made it easier than ever for anonymous individuals to harass and threaten others online. This type of abuse is particularly damaging because it can quickly spread to a large audience and can be difficult to remove or control once it has been posted.Another issue that social media has caused is the spread of misinformation. As anyone can post anything online, false information can quickly spread and become accepted as fact, leading to confusion and even harm. It’s important that individualsdon’t just accept everything they see online, and instead take the time to verify information from reputable sources.Despite these risks, the benefits of social media in modern society far outweigh the negatives. It has revolutionized the way we communicate, and has allowed us to connect with people in ways that were once impossible. Social media has also allowed us to keep up with the latest news, participate in online discussions, and even mobilize for political action.In conclusion, social media is a powerful tool that has had a significant impact on our lives. While it can be misused, it has the potential to bring people together and foster positive change in the world. To make the most of social media, it’s important that we use it responsibly and critically evaluate the information we encounter online.Total Words: 336第二篇作文:Title: The Benefits of TravelingTraveling is one of life’s greatest pleasures, and it offers a wide range of benefits for individuals and society as a whole. In this essay, I will explore some of the many benefits of traveling and why it is an important part of our lives.Firstly, traveling provides us with the opportunity to explore new cultures and learn about the world. It allows us to experience different languages, customs, and traditions, and gain a newfoundappreciation for diversity. By experiencing new cultures, we can broaden our horizons and develop a more sophisticated understanding of the world around us.Secondly, traveling can be a great way to improve our mental health. Studies have shown that taking time away from our daily routine and stressors can have a significant positive impact on our mental well-being. Traveling can help us to relax, reduce anxiety, and improve our mood. It also allows us to disconnect from technology and other distractions and focus on being present in the moment.Thirdly, traveling can be an excellent way to make new friends and connect with others around the world. When we travel, we are often exposed to people from different walks of life who we would not have met otherwise. This can broaden our social circle and help us build lasting relationships with others.Finally, traveling can be an important driver of economic growthin both developed and developing countries. By bringing in tourists, countries can stimulate their economies and create new job opportunities. This can help lift people out of poverty and improve their standard of living.In conclusion, traveling is an essential part of life that offers a wide range of benefits for individuals and society. It allows us to experience new cultures, improve our mental health, make friends, and drive economic growth. As such, it’s important that we make travel a priority in our lives, and work to ensure that everyone has the opportunity to experience the benefits of travel.Total Words: 315。
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雅思大作文批改范例
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Some people think that personal happiness s directly related to economic success. Others argue that happiness depends on different factors. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
What is the key to access to happiness has aroused people's interest. Some people claim that money plays a vital role in gaining happiness, while others think that there are a variety of elements constricting to it. Personally, I agree with the latter opinion. Money provides people with more opportunities to pursue happiness, because economic success can make it possible for people to enhance their quality of life. By purchasing expensive jewels, luxury house, sports car, etc. without worries of monetary pressure, wealthy person can enjoy better living standards than that of ordinary people. When financial pressure and life stress do not exist in one’s life, he
or she is likely to have less worry and have rich entertainment, thereby achieving the access to happiness.
Although fortune is significant to obtain happiness, there are also many other factors form important parts of eudemonia. An active lifestyle can prompt people's spiritual treasure. This means that people can receive happiness by having a healthy life, warm relatives and intimate friends. These valuable factors enable people have a positive attitude to tackle difficulties and enjoy a happy Iife.
As far as I am concerned, happiness cannot always be purchased by money. Rich material life sometimes could cause negative impact on achieving happiness. It is noteworthy that numerous of wealthy people who have affluent possessions, in contrast, have often ended up in a sick lifestyle. This makes them suffer from sickness, lonely and desperation, in the light of fact that money is no guarantee of happiness. To summarize, financial success could give people an ease Iife to enjoy happiness. However, without an active lifestyle and spiritual treasure, happiness will not be sustainably maintained.
总点评：
本篇文章得分: 6.5。