高考英语 考前30天之备战 专题五 书面表达升格指导 第一节 议论文升格指导 病文升格学案

第一节议论文升格指导【病文升格】目前，越来越多的学生利用周末上各种各样的培训班或请家教。

对于这一现象，存在两种不同请根据以上提示，写一篇150 词左右的短文，反映表中内容，并简要阐述自己的观点。

参考词汇：家庭教师tutor【写前思考】1. 这篇作文要求我们就什么话题发表观点？2. 正方观点哪些？3. 反方观点哪些？4. 你的观点是什么？5. 准备使用哪些句式？哪些连接词？[病文展示]There are more and more students go to training classes ①. Different students have different opinions on it.Some one think it necessary to do so②. Firstly, it’s better to have a teacher to help them. Secondly, you can communicate more with the teacher. Thirdly, you can learn that you don’t understand in classes in weekdays③.The others don’t think so④. First, students can easily depend on others. Then, students need rest and relax at weekend. Also, go to training classes cause some students not to listen carefully in their own classes⑤.In my opinion, I think whether a training class or tutor is needed depend on oneself ⑥. If you are really very weak at a subject, maybe it’s OK for you. But you’d better choose a good class or teacher, or you will waste your time and money.[病文点评]这篇习作从整体上对写作要求把握得较好，要点齐全，条理清晰。

能注意语言前后的变化。

从体裁看，本文遵从写作步骤：一是正方观点，二是反方观点，三是自己的看法。

从这三方面展开来写就能写出一篇结构完整的短文来，当然语言基本功扎实程度有进一步提高的空间。

此文得分在14分左右。

①句中出现两个谓语，可改为More and more students go to training classes。

②句主语与谓语不一致，可改为Some think it necessary to do so.③句表达错误，可以改为you can make up for what you miss or fail to understand inclasses in weekdays。

④句中 the others 表达错误，应改为others。

⑤句中主语应该用doing形式，谓语应该与主语保持一致。

所以改为：Going to training classes may cause some students not to listen carefully in their own classes。

⑥句中in my opinion和I think 重复，主语从句whether a training class or tutor is needed 显得头重脚轻，可以改为it just depends whether a training class or tutor is needed。

[升格范文]More and more st udents go to training classes or hire a teacher. People’s opinions are divided on it.Some people approve of the opinion. Firstly, it’s more effective to study with a teacher’s help than by themselves. Secondly, you can have more chances to communicate with teachers. Besides, you can make up for what you miss or fail to understand in classes in weekdays.On the contrary, some people differ in their opinions on this matter. For one thing, students can easily form the habit of dependence. For another, students need time for rest and recreation at weekends. What’s worse, attending training classes or hiring tutors even causes some students not to listen attentively in their regular classes.As far as I am concerned, it just depends whether a training class or tutor is needed. If you are really very weak at a certain subject, maybe it’s OK. But be sure to choose a suitable class or teacher, otherwise it would be a waste of time and money. [范文点评]使用正反对比型议论文的格式，文章结构严谨，句式工整。

一定的高级词汇和变化的句式，关联词使用丰富，这些都为文章增色颇多。

【应考对策】要写好英语议论文，首先要明确议论的论点，然后照给予的要点提示，考虑用适当的、高级的词语、句式表达出来，并使用一定的连接词，使得行文流畅。

【答后总结】“悟到”才是真正的得到。

通过上面的升格训练，你能总结出高分议论文作文的写作技巧吗？请你认真总结。

【及时巩固】假设你是李华，些名校成为旅游景点，为此你班展开有关“Should the University Campus Be Open to Tourists?”的讨论，请你根据下表所提供的信息，给21st century报社写一封信，介绍讨论的情况并发表自己的看法。

赞成者1. 拉近学生和社会的距离，利于人们之间的文化交流；2. 很多名校风景优美，古老的建筑群。

反对者1. 影响在校学生的学习，分散其注意力；2. 大量游客涌入校园，会带来安全隐患。

你的建议/看法……（至少两点）注意：1. 词数150左右；2. 信的开头和结尾已给出，但不计入总词数。

Dear editor,I'm writing to tell you about the discussion we ve had about whether the university campus should be open to tourists.Yours,Li Hua【范文】Dear editor,I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we ve had about whether the university campus should be open to tourists. As a saying goes, “every coin has two sides”. Opinions vary from student to student. Quite a few students, who are in great agreement with it, hold the opinion that the move is beneficial to get graduates involved in society, which is good for cultural exchange. Moreover, there are some ancient buildings and eye catching views in many top class universities, which may feast tourists eyes on and broaden their horizons.However, some students believe that tourists visiting the campuses will make it harder for students to focus on their studies. What s worse, they even think with plenty of tourists entering university campus, the safety problems are supposed to be taken into account carefully.To me, it s acceptable for university to be open to tourists. I suggest that several factors should be considered before opening the campus to tourists. First, the campus should only be open to tourists on weekends or during holidays. Second, the number of tourists should be limited.Yours,Li Hua。