2017英语作文讲评课
2017届第一次月考作文讲评
have difficulty with your 汉语不够好 Chinese • a few suggestions/some 几个建议 advice • as follows 如下 • Chinese listening and 中文 speaking ability
Some useful words
内容
语法 框架---组织结构 思想
要点全，拓展有度，有效
准确，复杂语法结构， 高级词汇，多种句型
连接词，作文结构紧 凑；流畅
开放能引起读者的共鸣,灵魂
1.单词拼写或用错：
Give you some advise advice
Here are my own suggests.
I heard from your e-mail.
Dear Peter, I’m glad to receive your letter, saying you are hoping to be a volunteer in 2022 Beijing Winter Olympics. Beijing has become the first city to host both Summer and Winter Olympic Games, and it together with Zhangjiakou is the host of the 2022 Olympic Winter Games. I’d like to give you two suggestions on how to learn Chinese well. First, speak a little Chinese every day. The absolute best way to learn any new language is just to speak it. Second, attend a Chinese class or discussion group. After all, language learning settings are of great importance. If you have any further questions, please don’t hesitate to write to me. Yours Li Hua
高考英语作文讲评课（Writing）课件.ppt
⾼考英语作⽂讲评课（Writing）课件.pptBased-task Writing太⽩中学刘亚琴Teaching goals: Enable students to learn how to write an article.Teaching important and difficult points: Check the mistakes in students’ article. Teaching methods: Discussion, cooperative learning.Teaching aids: a computer and a pptTeaching procedures and waysStep1 lead-inStep2 Check the answer题⽬：假定你是中学⽣李华。
美国⼀个中学校长代表团即将访问你校并出席英语周的⼀项活动。
请根据写作要点和写作要求写⼀篇欢迎词。
写作要点：1.表⽰对客⼈的欢迎；2. 介绍此项活动（如活动⽬的、内容等）；3. 表达对客⼈的祝愿。
写作要求：1.词数不少于100词；2. 称呼已经给出，请写欢迎词正⽂；3. 不能⽤真实姓名和学校名称。
Dear American guests,On behalf of our school, I would like to express our warm welcome to you. We are lucky to have you here in the middle of our English Week activities.As scheduled, we have English Talent Show today. The purpose of this programme is to develop our interest in English learning and practical abilities in listening and speaking. The programme consists of the following activities: recitation, singing, word spelling, story telling and so on . The Show will beg in at two o’clock this afternoon at the Student Centre. Dear guests, you are welcome to take part in some activities. I hope we students will benefit from your presence.I sincerely wish you a pleasant time with us. Thank you.18-23分黄云张银娟秦青李琼李⽂兴杨欢王阳赵天云朱媛张敏李爱琴郑茹李岚唐⽂丽崔红王娇张萌赵彤彤24分彭瑶梅赵林鑫周筱Mistake Correction in Spellings1.I am lucky to introtuce …2. …and Ping-Pong gams…3. The most important is English speach…4. This acitivity…Mistake Correction in Passage1.It’s benefit from communicating culture.(任永刚)I benefit from…2. I will greet you on my school behalf.(任永刚)I will greet you on behalf of our school.2.We take part in English Talent Show can improve students’ English. (黄云)We take part in English Talent Show to improve our English.4. I am express ours warm welcome to you.(张银娟严飞）I would like to express our warm welcome to you.5. This English Week activities consist to many interesting project. ( 杨欢）… consist of many interesting programs.6. Thanks for your come to…(杨欢)Thanks for coming to…7. Such as English spoken…(李莹莹秦青)Such as spoken English…8. We are lucky to invite you take part in this activity and we will appreariate if you can give us some advices. (李琼) We are lucky to invite you to take part in this activity and we will appreciate it if you can give us some advice.9. Due to our school English Talent Show students’ English level is high.(李岚)Due to our school English Talent Show, students’ English level has improved gradually10. I’m very thank you. (杨锐花)Thank you very much.11. In order to making… (李莹莹)In order to make…12. I think I’m very luckily.I think I’m very lucky.13. The key of this activity…The key to this activity…14. Our school develop a variety of English activity. (崔红)There are a variety of English activities in our school.15. The Talent Show, whose goal is improve our English communication.(彭瑶梅) The Talent Show , whose goal is to improve our English skills is very interesting. 16. We are hope you are happily.(王澜波)We hope you are happy.Excellent sentences in the passage1.Only in this way can I learn a lot of knowledge well. (黄云)2.I’m lucky to represent our warm welcome to you.(李⽂兴)3.I’m on behalf of our school to express our warm welcome to you.(赵林鑫)4.There is no denying the fact that this activity is very interesting.5. We not only talk about things we are interested in to practice our oral Englishbut also exchange our experience in English study. (李爱琴)6. Only after you attend this activity will you know the interest of this activity (it). (周筱)7. We are very glad to express our warm welcome to you. (周筱)StepⅢ Homework跟踪训练⽤正确的引导状语从句的连词(词组)填空1．It seemed only several minutes __ 1.2．It has been three years _3．Work hard，4．，_5．I was about to leave _6．The composition is all right，Ⅱ.句型转换1．Don't forget what your teacher says.(使⽤状语从句)1.＝_，don't forget.2．To his surprise，the little girl knows so many things.(使⽤名词性从句)＝①_＝②_＝③_3．Does Mr.Brown enjoy living in China? Could you tell us？(变为复合句)＝Could you tell us _ if/whether _ Mr.Brown _ enjoys _ living in China? 4．Jim is not a student.Tom is not a student，either.(合并为⼀个句⼦)＝_5．When does the train leave？I want to know.(改为含宾语从句的复合句)＝6．He lives in a big house，there stands a tree in front of the house. (变为复合句)＝He lives in a big house，__Step3 Homework。
英语作文讲评教案模板
英语作文讲评教案模板一、基本信息。
教学目标：英文回答，The lesson goals are to provide constructive criticism on students' essays, improve their writing skills, and build their confidence as writers.中文回答，教学目标是针对学生的文章提供建设性批评，提高其写作水平，并增强其作为写作者的信心。
适用年级：英文回答，This lesson plan is designed for high schoolor college students who are learning English writing.中文回答，此教案适用于学习英语写作的高中或大学生。
二、教学过程。
1. 引入（10分钟）。
英文回答，Begin the class by reviewing the importance of writing clear, concise, and effective essays.中文回答，开始课程，回顾撰写清晰、简洁、有效的文章的重要性。
2. 回顾学生文章（15分钟）。
英文回答，Distribute students' essays and ask them to read over their work independently.中文回答，分发学生的文章并要求他们独立审阅自己的作品。
3. 同伴评阅（10分钟）。
英文回答，Divide students into pairs or small groups and have them exchange essays.中文回答，将学生分成小组或小组，让他们交换文章。
英文回答，Instruct them to provide feedback on each other's work, focusing on strengths and areas for improvement.中文回答，指示他们就彼此的作品提供反馈，重点关注优点和可以改进的领域。
中考英语作文讲评课
_________________________________________________________ （2）What are some good places to visit in Beijing?
I think summer vacation is the best time to visit Beijing, because… I think the best time to come to Beijing is during the Spring （May Day, at the beginning of September, the National Day)
4.Why did you go there? I went to Tian’anmen Square because it’s one of the largest Squares in the world. And the Great Wall is the longest wall In the world. It’s also one of the wonders of the world.
回答此问题应该 注意：至少要回 There are some good places to visit in Beijing, such asTian’anmen 答两个地点。 Square, the Summer Palace, and so on.
Tian’anmen Square and the Gread Wall are good places to visit … The Temple of Heaven Beihai Park _________________________________________________________
英语写作讲评课
4. 总结和表达个人观点 in my opinion , as far as I’m concerned , personally (speaking) , in all , in a word / in short , generally speaking , in conclusion , in brief 等。
2. 摆脱“平庸”，用词更高级
如：Since they pay money to learn from the tutors, the students will study harder. 可改为：The students will study attentively and efficiently since they pay money to learn from the tutors.
Teaching Process
Step I. Step II. Step III. Step IV. Step V. Step VI. Step VII. Step VIII. 重新审题 难点突破 补充相关句型或表达 错误纠正 让表达更精彩 写作范例及查错改错、润色 巩固练习 课堂总结和拓展延伸
Step III.
• • •
1. 问题呈现 Different people hold different opinions. Opinions are divided on the problem. People have different attitudes towards the problem. 2. 支持或反对一方的观点 支持：be for , be in favor of , approve of ,support the view 等。 反对：be against , disapprove of , oppose , object to the view 等。
英语作文讲评课的流程和方法
英语作文讲评课的流程和方法英文回答：As a teacher, conducting a lesson observation and feedback session, also known as a teaching evaluation class, is an essential part of professional development. It provides an opportunity for teachers to receiveconstructive feedback on their teaching practices and for administrators to assess the effectiveness of the teaching methods being used.The process of conducting a teaching evaluation class typically involves several key steps. First, the observer will schedule a time to observe the teacher in action. During the observation, the observer will take notes on various aspects of the lesson, such as the teacher's delivery, student engagement, and use of instructional materials.After the observation, the observer will meet with theteacher to discuss their findings. This feedback session is crucial for helping the teacher reflect on their teaching practices and make improvements. It is important for the observer to provide specific examples of both strengths and areas for improvement in order to make the feedback more meaningful.In terms of methods, there are several strategies that can be used to conduct a teaching evaluation class effectively. One common method is the use of a rubric,which outlines specific criteria for evaluating teaching performance. This can help ensure that the evaluation isfair and consistent across different teachers.Another method is the use of peer observations, where teachers observe each other's classes and provide feedback. This can be a valuable way for teachers to learn from each other and improve their own teaching practices.Overall, the key to a successful teaching evaluation class is open communication and a focus on continuous improvement. By providing constructive feedback and support,teachers can continue to grow and develop their teaching skills.中文回答：作为一名教师，进行评课和反馈课程，也被称为教学评估课程，是专业发展的重要组成部分。
作文讲评课教案
作文讲评课教案英文回答：1. The essay was well-written and demonstrated a clear understanding of the prompt. The student provided a strong thesis statement and supported it with evidence from the text. The essay was also well-organized and easy to follow.2. The student's use of language was strong and effective. The essay was written in a clear and concise manner, and the student used a variety of vocabulary and sentence structures to keep the reader engaged.3. Overall, the essay was a well-written and thoughtful response to the prompt. The student demonstrated a clear understanding of the text and was able to effectively communicate their ideas in a clear and concise manner.中文回答：1. 这篇作文写得很好，表明了作者对提示有清晰的理解。
他提供了有力的论点，并用文本中的证据进行了论证。
这篇文章条理清晰，易于理解。
2. 学生的语言使用有力而有效。
这篇文章写得清晰简洁，学生使用了多种词汇和句子结构来保持读者的参与度。
3. 总的来说，这篇文章是对提示的写作精良且经过深思熟虑的回应。
北京市西城区重点中学2017年3月初三英语复习 作文讲评课 课件(共24张PPT)
书写 美观
内容 丰富
表达 清楚
语言 通顺连贯 丰富 逻辑性
完全符合题目要求，表达清楚， 内容丰富。使用多种语法结构 和丰富词汇，语言通顺，语意 连贯，具有逻辑性。允许个别 语言错误。
书写 美观
内容 丰富
表达 清楚
语言 通顺连贯 丰富 逻辑性
定语从句：which, that, who 中考句型、词组：not only…, but also…/ so…that… / It is adj. for sb. to do. sth. 主动结构+被动结构
题目一作文讲评课
教学设计思路 初三作文 讲评课
学情分析 教学目标 教学重难点 教学过程
教材分析教学设计思路
• 题目一类型作文题目出现率高，难度较 低但学生得分不够高。 • 大部分学生的作文处于二类文水平（912分），作文的结构问题不大，但是内 容不充实、语言不丰富、作文中单句出 现较多、连接词使用欠佳。 • 英语课标中对于写作技能要求之一是能 使用常见的连接词表示顺序和逻辑。
丰富内容：添加信息、解释说明
书写 美观
内容 丰富
表达 清楚
语言 通顺连贯 丰富 逻辑性
因果关系：because, as
so, therefore, as a result.
表示目的：so that, so as to, in order to, to
表示先后顺序：next，then, first of all …
• • • • • • •
You had better do … I advise you to do … I suggest that … It’s a good idea to do … Remember / Don’t forget to do … You are supposed to do … …
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Ⅱ. 第四档(好)：(16-20分) 完全完成了试题规定的任务 ⑴虽漏掉1、2个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容 ⑵应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求 ⑶语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝 试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致 ⑷应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑 达到了预 期的写作目的 Ⅲ. 第三档(适当)：(11-15分) 基本完成了试题规定的任务 ⑴虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容 ⑵应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求 ⑶有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解 ⑷应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯 整体而言， 基本达到了预期的写作目的
（2）书写较差的学生，从大小写字母开始练习，然后抄写词、句、 段和篇章，最后自由书写。
衡水中学英语书写堪比印刷体
衡水中学英语书写堪比印刷体
反
要 如何算是一篇好文章？ 点 1.覆盖了所有的要点 全 2. 应用了较多的语法结构 和词汇 词汇,句型 （高级）和
语法多样化（较复杂）
第一人称
应用文，建议信 一般现在时
◇ 词句模板 ◇ 1．段首常用语： (1)I am writing to express my views concerning… (2)You have asked for my advice about…and I will try to make some suggestions. 2．表达“建议”常用语： (1)I think the most suitable…for you is… (2)I would like to suggest that… (3)You'd better…/It's better to… (4)As far as I am concerned…/In my opinion… (5)For one thing…， for another… (6)If I were you, I would… (7)It seems to me that you could…
Yours faithfully，
7分
详略不当， 时态误用
12分
中式英语， 句式单调
7分
缺少过渡，行 文不流畅
10分
词义词性误用
Task 3
写作流程指导（四步法）
作文题目要求是什么？是否要写标题？是什么体裁？有哪些要 点？应分几段来写？用什么人称和时态？有无特殊要求？（重 要信息，最好用铅笔勾下来，以免出错） 1.不建议：全草稿和不打草稿。 2.结构（写几段，每段写什么，哪段转哪段承哪段） 关键词（关键单词和短语） 遣词造句 句式 （高级句式） 1.注意语言的自然流畅，清楚正确地表达。 2.注意书写和卷面的美观性（规范，清楚，干净、整洁） 检查是否有单词拼写，大小写，标点等错误。 （消除过失错。）
16分
优点：要点齐全，词汇较好，错误是 由于尝试复杂结构，书面整洁干净！
12分
基本完成要点，有一定的连贯，词汇 和结构单调，书面不理想。
7分
书面差，内容空洞。
4分
书面差，内容不连贯 信息未能传达给 读者。
0分!抄袭!
暴露问题
1 审题不准导致详略不当和时态误用 2 句式单调，存在中式英语 3 缺乏必要的过渡,行文不流畅 4 词性词义把握不准,导致表达不清楚
审题： 草稿：
成文：
检查：
第三节 书面表达（共1小题，满分20分） 假定你是李华，你的美国笔友Jack不久前跟随父母来到中国求学。 最近他因考试成绩不理想而感到沮丧，甚至想放弃学习。请你用英语 给他写一封信，内容包括： 要点1 要点2 1、表示安慰； 2、你的看法及建议。 要点3 注意：1、词数100左右（开头和结尾已给出，但不计入总词数）； 2、可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。 Dear Jack, I learnt from your last letter that ____________________________________________________
Ⅳ. 第二档(较差)：(6-10分) 未恰当完成试题规定的任务 ⑴ 漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关内容 ⑵语法结构单调、词汇项目有限 ⑶ 有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解 ⑷较少使用语句间的连接成分， 内容缺少连贯性信息未能清楚地传达给读者 Ⅴ. 第一档(差)：(1-5分) 未完成试题规定的任务 ⑴明显遗漏主要内容，写了一些无关内容， 原因可能是未理解试题要求 ⑵语法结构单调、词汇项目有限 ⑶较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响对写作内容的理解 ⑷缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯 信息未能传达给读者。
返回目录
3．段尾常用语： (1)I think it would be more beneficial if you could… (2)I believe you will take my advice into account/consideration. (3)I hope you will find these proposals/suggestions practical/useful/helpful. (4)I will be more than happy to see improvements in this regard. (5)I will be ready for further discussing this matter into details.
连 接 词
3. 有效地使用了语句间的 连接成分，使全文结构紧凑 语言地道， 4. 语言得体
规范
Appreciate the following compositions and try to find out the best one !
18分
优点：要点齐全，词汇高级， 句子结构多样，书面整洁干净！
审题： 1 审人称
2 文体 3 审时态 4 列要点
第一人称
应用文，建议信 一般现在时为主，兼顾其他时态
Dear Jack, 要点1 I learnt from your last letter that you‘re feeling upset recently because you haven't performed well in the exams and that you even want to give up studying. 要点2 It is natural to feel upset after exams if we don't perform well enough. To solve this problem, I think it's important to develop the right attitude towards exams. After all, they're only a means of checking how we're getting on with our lessons, so there's no need to care too much about grades. The most important thing is to analyze the cause of the failure and look for proper 要点3 solutions. Remember that failure can be a learning experience and an opportunity for a fresh start. Best wishes! Yours,
返回目录
范文： Dear Mr. Headmaster，
I am Li Yue ， a student from class one ，senior II . I am writing to draw your attention to some improper behavior among us students ： littering and scribbling . It makes our school dirty and unpleasant ,and does harm to the image of our school . I always feel ashamed whenever I see this . It is clearly not appropriate for a student to litter and scribble about. I wonder if the school could place more dustbins around and set up specific rules against such behavior. At the same time ,students should be encouraged to develop good habits and better behave themselves. I believe that , with the joint efforts of bother teachers and students ,our school will become a more enjoyable place in the near future. Thank for your consideration.
Li Hua
Task 4 Have a try !
要点1
假定你是高中生李岳，有感于校园中存在的随意涂写 （scribble） 和乱丢垃圾（litter）的行为，请用英文 给校长写封信； 1. 说明写信的目的 要点2 2.对这些行为提出批评 要点3 3.提出建议 要点4
审题： 1 审人称
2 文体 3 审时态 4 列要点
段考一作文讲评
高考作文评分标准
Task 1
1 本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。 2 评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次， 然后以该档次 的 要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给 分。 3 词数少于 80和多于 120的，从总分中减去2分。 4 评分时，应注意的主要内容为：内容要点、应用词汇和 语法结构的数量和准 确性、上下文的连贯性。 5 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，应 视其对交际的影响程 度予以考虑。英、美拼写汉词汇用法 均可接受。 6 如书写较差，以至影响交际，将分数降低一个档次。