考研作文评分标准及示范

大作文

第五档范文19分

As illustrated in the cartoon, each person sits in their own work room. In front of them is a computer. Everyone looks at the screen carefully, and communicate with their colleagues through the net instead of talking face to face. Their work places are placed like a net. And below the cartoon, there is a topic which says: the near and far among the Internet.

From the cartoon, we can conclude that the cartoonist wants to convey such a message: with the popularity of computers, people from all over the world become nearer by using the internet to communicate with each other. Meanwhile, people also become far away from their friends. All of us accept the fact that the development of the internet brings lots of conveniences to our daily life, for instance, we can buy a book on the net instead of going to a bookstore. Besides, we can communicate with our friends on the net without going out of home. But we can't ignore the other side of these: the time we spend with friends or family becomes less. And we hardly see them once in a week. It will make us feel lonely if we continue to use the tool on the net to talk with friends instead of talking with them on the phone or going out with them.

To my best understanding, we should use the net to communicate with each other in a proper way. It is just a tool when we really need it to serve us. If we want to keep our friendship more effectively, we should spend more time with them in our real life. Only in this way can we not only make full use of the communication tool on the net but also make our friendship stronger.

评语：该文很好地完成了试题规定的任务，内容完整，既清楚描述了漫画内容又指出了其隐含的意思。语言流畅，措辞准确，句型结构有变化，有效使用了连接手段，内容连贯，层次分明，文章易于理解，仅有个别语言错误，字数符合要求。

第四档范文15分

As is vividly depicted in the drawing above, we can see clearly that some people are very near by the computer while some people are much long with each other in the net world.

What is conveyed in the picture is most thought-provoking and worth discussing among people, especially the young people. It is a mirror, reflecting the relationships between the people are altering by the Internet. People's opinions differ greatly on this matter. Some people believe that the Internet is very convenient for people who are living in a longer distance to keep connection with each other. Others argue that the Internet make the people living in near areas meet very little. Still others hold that people's facing to face to communicate is reducing to a low level.

It struck me that if nothing is done to solve the social phenomenon, its effect will be soon shown, which inevitably affects the development of the harmonious society. So we should regard the trend rightly. We also should take it into our accounts strictly. We should use the Net more reasonably. On no account should we make the people longer by the computer. Only in this way can we have a good generation foreseen. And a more harmonious society can be built up.

评语：文章较好地完成了试题规定的任务，内容比较完整，既描述了漫画又揭示了隐含的意思，使用了比较丰富的句型结构和词语，使用了一定的连接手段，语言基本通顺，文章结构完整，层次清晰，易于理解，但是有一定数量的语言错误。

第三档范文11分

As the picture vividly depict that internet like a net connect different people in the world. You can communicate with your friends. No matter where they live in, the distance no longer an obstacle in our communication.

The picture reflect a thought-provoking social phenomenon that people in a mounting numbers use internet shopping, work, study and chatting with friends in order to meet each other face and face. There are somewhat reasonable, but you weighing in mind, you can find that distance between our spirit longer than before. On the Internet we can not know each other very well, because some people don't use their real name, even tell lies on internet. On the conterary, if we meet each other face and face, it's better for communication.

Internet make the obstacle of distance vanished, benefit us a lot, we can chating with our friends who live in a city that far from us. However, we should take that serious internet make the distance of our spirit longer than before, internet is a double-edge sword.

评语：该文包含多数内容要点;语法结构与词汇基本能够满足任务要求;有一些严重语法与用词错误，但不影响理解;内容较连贯，层次较清晰。但是第三部分主要是对第二部分的总结，评论简单。

第二档范文7分

As can be seen from the picture, many people are sitting in the front of a computers, who are basing in typing on the keyboard, but they don't immediate communicate with each other though they live near. It looks like a bit pot, everyone has its space, and the computer is necessary for them.

It goes without saying that this picture aims at reavling a common phenomenon

in our daily life, that is internet brings conviences to us, also brings the distance for each other. Nowadays, we must believe that our development can not leave the using

of internet. We do any things through the computer instead of saying "hello" to our families or colleagues face to face.

In my opinion, we must realize the importance of the internet and also pay more attentions to communicate with each other face to face. Do not make the computer make a distant between us.

评语：该文遗漏题目要点，评论不够恰当，语言错误多，有些句子内容表达不清晰，字数不够。

第一档范文3分

Largely through the influence of many people from different points of the world. The old, the young and the student, they use the computers to constant with another body.

Some people use computer to leare new knowledge, such as the students. Some people use the computer to help them to complete their work. Such as the tank workers. While some people use the computer to play games. For example, some old person like to play game on computer.

Many people on computer is on Monday to Friday. But the player people is everyday more or less. So the world is like a family. Since the computer with us is to enable our to share in a common life we cannot help considering whether or not we are forming the powers of the life’s happy.

评语：该文明显遗漏主要内容，不能反映需要表达的观点;语法与用词错误很多，妨碍理解，作者的语言运用能力差;字数不够。

小作文

五档，9分

Dear editor,

I'm a sincere reader of your newspaper and I like your discussion of the social problems. Now I want to give some opinions of myself about the "White Pollution"

As we know, regulation was made to solve the problem in June 1st of 2008. The use of plastic bags was restricted in the supermarket and many other shops freely. At the beginning, it was carried on well, but now I found plastic bags were used in some small shops for free or with no pay.

I am writing to tell you that we should solve this problem soon with the help of your newspaper. You could make some investigators about it

and write some reports of it, so as to appeal to all the people’s attentions of our society.

Sincerely,

Li Ming

本文很好地完成了试题规定的任务，与目标读者完全产生了预期的效果：

1.内容包含了所有的内容要点，该文第一段的内容更吻合题目的要求。

2.所使用的语法结构和词汇比较丰富。

3.语言比较自然流畅，尽管存在个别的语法(例如，时态)和用词错误。

4.有效使用了各种衔接手段，层次清晰，组织也比较严密。

5.格式与语域恰当贴切。

四档，7-8分

Dear Editor Wang,

I am a senior student living in Beijing. Being a citizen in our capital, I care a lot about our environment. But, although the law of not using plastic bags had been enforced since June, the effect is not very good.

I am afraid 'White Pollution" will still exist for a long time.

I believe there are ways to improve the situation. Our communities could offer bags free, which will substitute plastic bags. Meanwhile, some education on environment and White pollution should be held to local people. Besides the above two, much more can be done. I hope you would consider it carefully.

Yours truly

Li Ming

较好地完成了试题规定的任务，基本能够对目标读者产生预期的效果：

1. 包含了所有的内容要点，既简要介绍了自己的观点，又提出了具体的建议。

2. 所使用的句子结构和词汇相对比较丰富，例如：Being a citizen in……,

I care……等。

3. 语言基本正确，当然也存在着一些语法错误和用词的错误，但是并不会严重影响意义的表达。

4. 采用了适当的衔接手段，例如, but, meanwhile, besides等，层次也比较清晰。

5. 格式和语域比较恰当。

三档，5-6分

To whom it may concern:

As a student of a university, I want to take this opportunity to express some points about "White Pollution".

There is no denying that plastic is destroy our environment is we use it excessively. So the government take some means to deal with it. Restrict to use the plastic bags in whole country. But it didn't get successful as we predict. The "White Pollution" is still around our environment in some regions.

Takes measures is needed. I want to take some recommends. First and formost, more strength restriction is needed by pollution education. Second, media should spread more information concern. Only in this way can we curb the statement. I'm looking forward your reply.

Sincerely yours

Liming

基本完成了试题规定的任务，对目标读者基本产生了预期的效果：

1. 内容包含试题所要求的两个要点，没有跑题。

2. 具有较多的用词与语法错误，但是读者仍然能够大致领会作者想要表达的意思。

3. 采用了一些简单的衔接手段，内容还算连贯，层次也算清楚。

4. 格式和语域基本合理。

二档，3-4分

I am very sorry to trouble with you. But this is a problem annoying with me. It is White Pollution. With the economic growth widely, white pollution become more and more serious. It is harmonious between the men

and nature. White pollution destroy some special. More and more similar issue can be read today in newspaper as well as in magazine.

The problem can be solved in some ways. First, attitude is everything. We must make people aware of this issue. Second, we must change with ourself. It's essential that we address our problem before looking to others change. Finally, the acts of pollution must be punishment.

I'm looking forward to your reply!

Yours sincerely

Li Ming

未能按照要求完成试题规定的任务，不能清楚地将信息传达给读者。

1.第一段落的内容离题太远，未能很好地表达题目的第一个内容要点。

2.语法和用词错误太多，表明作者缺乏基本的英语语法知识或者使用语法知识的能力。

3.虽然也使用了一些衔接手段，但是内容上缺乏连贯性。

4.格式和语域不恰当。例如，此信没有抬头。

一档，1-2分

Dear the editor

I'm pleasure to write the letter to you. With the development of the socity, white pollution is more and more bad. Our sky is not blue, our earth is not clean and our river is not fish.

To solve this question, I have some suggestions. First, every one drive their car less a day in a week than before. Second, when we are shopping, we use environment plastic bags. Third, our government do some rules. Do you thing my opinion? Look forward your reply.

Yours faithfully,

Li Ming

未完成试题规定的任务，不能把信息传递给读者：

1.文章内容基本离题，有许多不相关的内容。

2.作者基本不具备英语的语法常识，句子结构简单且不完整。

3.用词错误太多，词不达意。

零档 0 分

dear editor:

I am a student of Tianjing University. Recently years our country 所传达的信息或者所用的语言太少，内容与要求也无关系，无法评价