三年级作文修改前后比较
修改前修改后作文对比范文
修改前修改后作文对比范文修改前：
草坪上阳光真好啊，晒得整个人都暖洋洋的。
鸟儿在树上叽叽喳喳，好像在聊什么八卦一样。
远处的城堡看起来好古老，感觉有好多故事藏在里面。
走进城堡，哇塞，这里好像拍电影的地方啊！大厅里的吊灯晃来晃去，墙上挂的那些画，看起来都好像有大故事。
角落里那台钢琴，不知道谁会弹一曲好听的。
晚上了，星空真美！城堡露台上大家都在跳舞，穿得花枝招展的。
笑声、音乐声混在一起，感觉整个世界都美好了。
这一刻，真的好想停下来，永远不要走。
修改后：
草坪上的阳光，简直暖到心里去了，整个人都懒洋洋的。
树上的鸟儿，像是在开茶话会，叽叽喳喳个不停。
远处的城堡，一看就知道是个有故事的地方。
走进城堡，简直就是进了另一个世界！大厅里的吊灯摇曳生姿，墙上的肖像画，每一幅都像是在讲故事。
角落里的钢琴，真希望有
人能弹一曲，让大家都陶醉其中。
夜幕降临，星空璀璨如钻。
城堡露台上，大家都在尽情舞动，
欢声笑语此起彼伏。
这一刻，真的想让时间停下来，永远留住这份
美好。
英文推荐信修改前后稿比较
英文推荐信修改前后稿比较编者按： Dear Sir or Madam: As the Chair of the Department of International Finance, I'm pleased to recommend Mr. XXXX, my fa... Dear Sir or Madam:As the Chair of the Department of International Finance, I'm pleased to recommend Mr. XXXX, my favorite student, to your esteemed university.I got to know him in my class of Special Topics on International Finance last term. He has great interest in Economics and thirst for knowledge about it. He studied in my class conscientiously and often talked with me about the questions that he met in reading and study. Once, we talked about the design of the tax system. He said that since people always wanted to evade tax, the increasing cost that caused by it was an important problem. I talked with him several methods of how to account the cost caused by evading the tax and found that he was very skilled in using diagrammatic curve and mathematics. Finally, he said that the reaction of government to the action of evading tax of people would affect the behavior of people and the cost of levying taxes. He said maybe the solution of the problem would exert the Game Theory. I encouraged him this idea. He said he didn't know much about Game Theory and borrowed me some essays about it written by Nash. Mr. XXXX always studied with this serious attitude and often pointed out some creative ideas. His study is to improve his knowledge about Economics, not for the exam. This is his distinction from others and I appreciate him for it. In the end of last term, he got a high score of 90 in the exam. But most of the exams are dogmatic, so he hasn't got the same high scores in them.He often talks with me about his ideal to be an economist. So I often do some special instructions to him and lend many books about economics to him. He spends a lot of time on them and seldom prepare for the exams.Though his keeps average score top 25% in his class. I think he is very clever. When I was well aquatinted with him, he often do some favor to me.Because his English is good, I often let him help me to translate some English essays when I am busy. He always does well. His oral English is good too, so I think he will be more competitive than other Chinese students to apply to your university.He has a strong ability to organize people and is ready to help people.His classmates all like him and elected him as the person responsible for sports activities. He organized his classmates to take part in the sports meeting of Peking University every year. He also organized some basketball and football games that were took part in by boys and girls both in the Department of International Finance. It made his classmates a rich life in the University.Mr. XXXX is a very active student and he always keeps high spirit. I think he has enough things in him to go to America to study Economics with his perfect theory base, hardworking habit and fluent English. I hope you willaccept him. If you want to know more information about him, don't hesitate to contact with me.Sincerely,XXX XXXXXProfessor of EconomicsAssociate Dean, School of Economics, Beijing UniversityChair, Department of International Finance<改后稿>Dear Colleagues:I am Head of the Department of International Finance in the School ofEconomics at the Beijing University, perhaps the most prestigiousuniversity in China, and I am writing to recommend Mr. XXXX, one of my favorite students, for acceptance into your Master's program.I got to know him personally last semester when he was taking the course of Special Topics on International Finance that I was teaching. In the class, he showed great interest in economics. He studied conscientiously and often talked with me after the class about the questions that he had come across in his readings. Once when we talked about the country's ongoing restructuring of its tax system, he delved into the increasing cost of tax evasion. We then discussed several methods of calculating the cost. As we talked, I found that he was very skilled in expressing his ideas through diagrammatic curves and mathematics. Recognizing that the government's attitudes to acts of tax evasion will affect not only people's behavior but also the cost of levying taxes, he saw possible solutions to the problem in the Game Theory. I encouraged him to pursue this idea. He said he didn't know much about the Game Theory and proceeded to borrow some essays by Nash from me. He thus left me with a deep impression.Studying with conscientiousness, Mr. XXXX often came up with creative ideas. Unlike some other students, he studied notto just pass the exams but to really improve his knowledge and expertise. He stands out among hisfellow classmates with an unmistakable thirst for genuine understanding of the country's economic realities and problems. That has won him appreciation from not just me but my colleagues as well. But he did do well in exams too. In the final exam of last semester, he got a high score of 90 for my course.He often talks with me about his ideal to become an economist. T o help quench his thirst for knowledge, I have lent many of my own books to him and tutored him in his self-study program. He has been much more engrossed in doing independent research than preparing for exams, but his grades still keep him ranked among the top 25% of his class. I think he is a very intelligent young fellow.Mr. XXXX has a good command of the English language. As he is well acquainted with me, he has often helped me in my own research by translating some English essays that I am too busy to translate. His translations are usually quite good. His oral English is good too.Compared with other Chinese students who may be applying to your program, I think Mr. XXXX should be considered more favorably.Well grounded in the theories of economics and the methodologies of economic research, and proficient in English, Mr. XXXX should make an outstanding student in graduate studies. I have not seen many Chinese students who are so intent on achieving an academic career in economics.If you accept him, you will find that his drive and sense of purpose very contagious among the students. In view of all that I know of him, I strongly recommend him. If you want to knowmore about him, please don't hesitate to contact with me.SincerelyXXX XXXXXProfessor of EconomicsHead of Department of International FinanceAssociate Dean, School of Economics, Beijing University。
作文《那一刻，我长大了》修改前后对比
作文《那一刻，我长大了》修改前后对比那一刻，我长大了（陈靖波原文）人生如一支歌，应该多一些昂扬的旋律，少一些萎靡；人生如一幅画，应该多一些亮丽的色彩，少一些灰暗的色调；人生如一首诗，应该多一些热烈的抒情，少一些愁苦的叹息……转眼间，我已经度过了十四个春秋，在这段美好的时光里，经历了无数的事，是我们更加成熟。
我至今记忆犹新的是那一次，通过那一次，我发现我长大了。
那时我刚上三年级，身体很不好，时常发烧。
那天晚上，很冷，外面又刮风又下雨，爸爸也去上夜班了，只有我和妈妈在家，我在房间里写作业，妈妈在客厅看电视。
因为我放学回家时淋了点雨，着了凉，所以我一晚上头都晕晕的。
我告诉了妈妈，妈妈马上走到我身边，用手摸了摸我的额头，又拿出来一根体温针让我测量体温。
时间到了，妈妈帮我取出体温针一看，“三十八度八”，妈妈马上对我说，“你有点发烧了，得去医院。
”说完，她就马上换好了衣服，准备带我去医院。
路上，她一手扶着我，一手撑着雨伞，艰难地一步一步走着，她把雨伞的大部分都倾向了我，豆大的雨滴无情的打在妈妈身上，好像她每走一步是那么的艰难。
走了不知多久，终于来到了医院，望着妈妈那湿透了的全身，我心里不禁一振，有一种说不出的感觉。
可接下来，妈妈不等着擦一下身上，就马上帮我挂号，想让我尽快的打上点滴，打着点滴，我不知不觉的睡着了。
不知过了多久，我睁开了眼睛，看见妈妈还在我身旁无微不至地照顾我。
她看见我醒来了，马上问我好些了吗？我点了点头，此时我的泪水已经润湿了眼睛。
父母们总是无微不至的照顾我，为我们付出的实在太多了。
所以我要重现在开始努力学习，将来报答父母。
这一刻，我发现我长大了变得更成熟了。
(665字)潘潘点评：内容欠充实，“妈妈送我去医院”的选材陈旧，细节描写不够生动。
结尾无提升，仅仅点了标题，没有点明主题。
那一刻，我长大了（陈靖波修改后）如果说人生是一首优美的乐曲，那么痛苦则是其中不可缺少的音符；如果说人生是一望无际的大海，那么挫折则是一个骤然翻起的浪花；如果说人生是一片湛蓝的天空，那么失意则是一朵漂浮的淡淡的云。
修改前修改后作文对比范文
修改前修改后作文对比范文
修改前：
哎呀，看看这阳光，真是撒得满街都是，石板路都晒得热乎乎的。
老树在路边儿，叶子哗哗地响，好像在跟路过的每个人打招呼，“嘿，你好啊！”。
走进这家小店，咖啡的香味儿就扑面而来。
店里的装饰挺有感
觉的，简约又不失格调。
墙上还挂着些挺有艺术感的画。
店主特别
热情，推荐的招牌咖啡真是好喝到不行。
那咖啡豆的香味和牛奶的
滑嫩，简直就是绝配！
晚上了，城市的灯都亮了。
河边儿那个小酒吧，可热闹了。
年
轻人都在那儿聚着，有的坐着，有的站着，聊得正欢。
偶尔一阵风
吹过，连他们说的话都被吹散了，河面上的波纹也随风摇曳。
修改后：
哈哈，这阳光真是太给力了，晒得石板路都热乎乎的，感觉时
间都慢下来了。
老树在路边，叶子哗哗地响，像是在跟每个人打招
呼，让人感觉特别亲切。
这家小店的咖啡真是绝了，一进门就能闻到那浓浓的香味。
店
里的装饰简约大方，还有墙上那些画，真是挺有艺术感的。
店主还
特别热情，推荐的招牌咖啡口感超赞，每一口都是满满的幸福感。
晚上了，城市的灯光闪烁，河边儿那个小酒吧真是热闹得不行。
年轻人都喜欢聚在那儿，有的聊天，有的玩乐，氛围特别好。
偶尔
一阵风吹过，连他们的话都被吹散了，河面上的波纹也随风摇曳，
感觉整个世界都变得轻松自在。
三年级语文作文写作要重视习作批改与修改
三年级语⽂作⽂写作要重视习作批改与修改 在当前的作⽂教学中，⼀些教师只重视作前的指导，⽽轻视甚⾄忽视作后的讲评，修改。
其实，讲评、修改也是作⽂教学中不可缺少的重要⼀环，要提⾼学⽣的写作⽔平，对作后的讲评、修改也同样要重视。
下⾯是店铺给⼤家带来的三年级语⽂作⽂写作要重视习作批改与修改，供⼤家参考! 三年级语⽂作⽂写作要重视习作批改与修改 习作讲评、修改的重要性。
习作讲评是对本次习作的分析和评价。
它是习作教学过程中重要的⼀环，既是习作指导的继续和加深，⼜是习作讲评的巩固和提⾼;既是对本次习作情况的总结，⼜是对下次习作训练的指导具有承前启后的作⽤。
因此，讲评是作⽂教学中要做的⼀项重要⼯作，必须认真抓好讲评这⼀环节，努⼒提⾼讲评的质量，从⽽促进学⽣的写作能⼒。
对学⽣的作⽂进⾏批改，也是作⽂教学的重要组成部分。
⽼师通过批改，对学⽣进⾏作⽂的指导，使学⽣了解⾃⼰作⽂的优点和缺点。
并从中受到怎样写好作⽂的启发。
通过批改，教师可以了解学⽣作⽂的实际，便于总结作⽂教学的经验教训，及时改进教学，也可以搜集素材，为作⽂讲评作好准备。
对于学⽣作⽂，除了⽼师批改，还可以指导学⽣⾃⼰修改、互批互改，通过修改提⾼⾃⾝的写作能⼒。
呵护学⽣作⽂中的童真。
我们⾯前的孩⼦，他们是那么的天真烂漫、充满稚⽓。
他们总怀着纯真的感情去对待⼀切，在作⽂中也不时闪烁着孩⼦的童⾔。
对此，作为孩⼦的良师益友，在作⽂讲评、修改中，我们应去维护和发挥孩⼦们作⽂中那⽆邪的童真，不能扼杀掉孩⼦的童真。
如有⼀位学⽣写我帮妈妈做家务时，写道：“我对妈妈说：‘妈妈，今天我来帮你做家务吧。
’妈妈却说：‘⼩孩⼦家，把⾃⼰的学习搞好就⾏了，瞎凑什么热闹!’”⽽其他的同学都写的妈妈很⾼兴，夸我长⼤了，我很⾼兴之类的话。
看出来，第⼀位学⽣写出了他的真实想法，写出了⼀个孩⼦的童真，怎能让他把这段话修改掉呢? 培养学⽣⾃改作⽂的能⼒。
作⽂教学中经常是：“教师批改作⽂，学⽣看评语”。
修改前和修改后的作文,总两篇
修改前和修改后的作文,总两篇
我的作文，就像一张白纸，上面什么都没有。
老师说，要“写一段真情实感”。
但，我的脑袋里，只有一片空白。
老师说，我的作文，像一幅没有色彩的画，很单调。
但我总觉得，我描摹了我的世界，我的快乐，我的伤心。
我一遍遍地修改，把“太阳”改成“火红火红的太阳”，把“小鸟”改成“叽叽喳喳的小鸟”，把“开心”改成“无比快乐的”。
修改后的作文，像涂满了颜色的画，很可爱。
老师也说，我的作文“进步比较大”。
不过，我的心，好像有点难过，我总觉得，这也不是我想要的世界了。
后来，我偷偷地把作文改了回来，把“火红火红的太阳”改成“太阳”，把“叽叽喳喳的小鸟”改成“小鸟”，把“无比快乐的”改成“大家都快乐”。
我凝视着我的作文，这感觉好多了，它又变回我自己的世界了。
我才清楚，老师说“描情实感”，就是写一段自己的感觉，自己的故事，自己的心声。
我的作文，就像我的心，它必须拥有我自己的颜色，我自己的声音。
我不可能再为了漂亮的“颜色”而放弃真实的感受了。
修改前和修改后的作文,总两篇
修改前和修改后的作文,总两篇
我坐在椅子上，鼻尖几乎要贴到纸张上。
窗外，阳光白惨惨的，照得我眼睛有点儿酸。
但是我一点儿也不想动，因为我正准备修改作文。
直接修改之前，我的作文像一个脏兮兮的皮球，又圆又笨重，了无生气。
老师说，它像一滩没有形状的泥巴。
我当时稍微有些气恼，我实在奇怪，我那么努力地写了，为什么老师说我的作文都不大好？
现在，我正托着铅笔在纸上画来画去，像是在给皮球刷油漆一样。
我给它添上了一点颜色，又添上了一些花纹。
原本平淡的句子，现在变得稍微有点生动传神，像是在迅速旋转。
修改后的作文，像一个闪闪发光的玻璃球，透明色的，里面隐约闪烁着明亮的光芒。
老师说，它像一颗晶莹剔透的珍珠，让人眼前一亮。
我很开心极了，原来修改能让作文变得更漂亮啊！
望向修改后的作文，我突然间又想起了一个故事。
故事里，一只丑小鸭在努力，后来变成了白天鹅。
我的作文也是这样，经过我的努力，现在变得异常好看，它像一只白天鹅，飞翔在蓝天白云里。
我握着我的作文，仿佛紧紧握住了一颗闪闪发光的星星。
它让我明白了，只要能坚持努力，就会有所收获。
就像改作文，只有不停地修改，才能让它变得更加完美。
母爱的作文修改前和修改后的对照
母爱的作文修改前和修改后的对照修改后段落一。
啊，说起母爱，我就觉得特别温暖。
真的，每次我迷茫或者失落，我妈总会给我那种“没事，有妈在”的感觉。
记得那次考试没考好，她没有骂我，反而帮我找问题，告诉我加油。
那一刻，我心里暖暖的，觉得有妈真好！
修改后段落二。
我妈啊，真的是那种超级无私的人。
小时候生病住院，她都不睡觉地守着我，给我熬汤喂药。
那时候看着她担心的样子，我就告诉自己要快点好起来，别再让她操心了。
修改后段落三。
我妈可是个超有毅力的人！你知道吧，她为了让我学个特长，每天都陪着我练，哪怕再累也不放弃。
这种坚持和毅力，我真是佩服得五体投地。
有她在身边，我就觉得啥困难都不怕了。
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开头、结尾：
（原文）秋天到了，天气凉了，树上的叶子变黄了。
秋天真美丽！秋天有很多花都凋谢了，可是菊花开得正艳。
（改文）秋天是一个美丽的季节。
秋天真是一个美丽的季节，我喜爱秋天。
顺序、结构、好词好句
写叶：（原文）天气凉了，树上的叶子变黄了。
（改文）树上的叶子变黄了，一片一片地落了下来。
他们在空中打着转儿，像一只只美丽的黄蝴蝶在空中飞舞。
树叶落在地上，铺成了一条金黄色的小路。
写花：（原文）秋天有很多花都凋谢了，可是菊花开得正艳。
（改文）秋天有很多花都凋谢了，可是菊花开的正艳。
那一丛丛、一簇簇美
丽的菊花，在秋风中傲然挺立。
写人：（原文）小朋友们来到了郊外游玩。
他们在秋风里做游戏，在树林里捉迷藏，还捡拾了很多的树叶，想拿回家做标本。
天蓝蓝的，还有几朵白云，凉爽极了。
（改文）小朋友们到郊外游玩，就像一群快乐的小鸟，开心极了！他们在秋风里做游戏，在树林里捉迷藏，还捡拾了很多的树
叶，想拿回家去做标本。
他们踩在厚厚的落叶上发出的“吱吱”的声音，就像是落叶在给这美丽的秋天演奏的一首优美的乐曲。